02. The mission given to me by the company commander has been successfully carried out.
03. After education, the victims of "FxG" sharpened their eyes and increased their awareness.
04, students must abide by the rules of the road to prevent do not have an accident.
05, in class, Xiaohua's eyes do not turn away from the teacher.
06, I bought a pen, ruler, eraser and stationery and rushed home.
07, Although you study even better, there is no reason to be proud.
08, Martha was wearing a blue windbreaker and a yellow hat.
09, Tonight the sky is as full as a mirror with a full moon and stars, what a beautiful night scene!
10. The square was crowded with many, many, many more people than you can count.
11、After treatment, Xiao Ming's illness has been restored to health.
12. Since the reform and opening up, there have been great changes in China.
13, It's very educated to hear what the teacher said.
14, I have visited most of all the spots in the Summer Palace.
15, in the deep mountains of the Northeast, earth coal kilns are sparsely scattered everywhere.
16、He sat attentively, listening intently to the teacher.
17、After the essay is written, we have to learn to correct the incorrect typos.
18, In labor, our hands get dirty with mud.
19, I whispered when I heard the news.
20, Only about seventy-two people showed up for the meeting this time.
21, One of his hands was almost completely frozen.
22, The campus is planted with many trees such as moonflower, begonia, sycamore, pine and cypress.
23, There are so many toys in the children's store, including blocks, cloth dolls, electric trains, soccer balls and so on.
24、Sunday, the students brought bread, eggs, apples, bananas, cooking utensils and food to the picnic.
25, She wore a bright red scarf and a snow-white shirt.
26, I read all day this morning.
27, This lack of love for food and wilful waste is shameful.
28、The number of goods on the market is now much higher.
29, The students said that yesterday's activity was a pleasant day.
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Answers:1. change "regardless of" to despite. 2. change "practise" to "accomplish" 4. "Prevent" conflicts with "don't", so remove one of them.
5. "Not to look away" means "to gaze at". 6. "and" is changed to "etc." 7. "Although..." is changed to "but". "but" is changed to "even though...
8. "and" was changed to "wearing" 9. "the night scene" was removed 10. "Many, many" and "countless" went to a 11. "of the disease" and "health" went to a
12. "in" was removed 13. "very educated" before the addition of a person, such as: classmates 14. "All" and "most of the" conflict with the "any go to a
15. "" sparsely" and "most of the" conflict with the "most of the"
16. Sparse" and "stars and dots" to go a 16. "Intently" and "attentively" to go a
17. go "incorrect" 18. "Our hands" and "dirt" to change the order 19. "I" and who "discuss"? Change "I" to "we"
20. "72" is so precise, but still "around" ah? 21. Leave one for "almost" and "completely" 22. Change "trees" to "plants"
23. "Soccer ball" is not a child's toy. 24. "and food" removed 25. "and" changed to "wear" 26 "morning" removed
27. "Wasteful" followed by "phenomenon" 28. "Quantity" changed to "quality" 29. "of the activities" and "of the day" removed one.
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Common Types of Sentences
I. Order of Speech Improper
1. The definite article is not in the right place. For example:
(1) The production of cotton in China has not been self-sufficient for a long time.
(The position of the definite article and the center of the word is reversed, it should be: China's production of cotton, long-term self-sufficiency.)
(2) The vast number of young people in the countryside showed immense enthusiasm for going socialist.
(The definite article "incomparable" has been wrongly placed in the place of the gerund, resulting in a sick sentence, and "incomparable" should be put before "enthusiasm".)
2. The gerund is misplaced. For example:
(3) In the cause of socialist construction, the role of knowledge should be fully utilized.
(The gerund "fully" is wrongly placed in the place of the definite article, which should be put before "play".)
3. Inappropriate placement of adverbs
<1> The adverb "not" is not in the right place. For example:
(4) If we don't try to put our own domestic affairs in order, it will be difficult for us to have a say in the international arena. (The negative adverb of the word "put" should come before the word "put.")
(5) If we don't check the work of substitute plowing before it's too late, the ground in front of us won't be hoed well. (The word "not" should be moved to before the word "while".)
<2> Improper placement of related words
When two clauses of a compound sentence have the same subject, the related words should be after the subject; when the subjects are different, the related words should be before the subject. If they are reversed, they are misplaced. For example:
(6) Not only does he study well, but he also helps other students. ("He" should be moved to the front of "not only")
Two. ("Students" can not be "gallop", can be changed to "run".)
(8) The torrents of feelings were tumbling, and the hot blood of the body was roaring. ("Hot blood" can only be "boiling", not "roaring")
(9) His noble revolutionary qualities often come to my mind. ("Quality" can not be "surfaced", can be changed to "his great revolutionary image.")
2, improper collocation.
(10) These articles are full of Marxist ideas. ("Flashes" should be "light".)
(11) Before liberation, the money earned by Dad and his brother was not enough to support the family. (The word "feed" should only be "live", not "live".)
(12) The Shanghai Science and Technology Development Center has gathered a group of professional teams who are enthusiastic about science and technology development services and good at management. (The word "gathered" should be "specialized talents.")
3, the subject and guest collocation improper.
(13) This last day of labor was the most intense, enjoyable and meaningful day for the students. ("Labor" is "one day" inappropriate, delete "labor" can be.)
(14) Political stability and unity are prerequisites for the establishment of a sound socialist market economic system in China. ("Situation" is "condition" is inappropriate, can be deleted "of the situation.")
4, modifier and the center of the improper collocation. For example:
(15) He has put a lot of effort into cultivating good seeds. ("A great deal" should be replaced by "a lot".)
(16) With his own clever and capable hands, he built everything. ("Smart and capable" should be changed to "dexterous".)
(17) At this conference, there was an extensive exchange of views on the wage issue. (Replace "widely exchanged" with "extensively exchanged.")
5. One side does not go well with both sides. For example:
(18) The improvement of academic performance depends on whether the students themselves work hard. ("Improvement of academic performance" is one-sided, and "whether or not they make an effort" is two-sided.) It can be changed to: the improvement of academic performance depends on the students' own efforts. (Or read: The improvement of academic performance depends on whether the students themselves make an effort.)
(19) Artists were always looked down upon in the past, but now they are eagerly favored by the people, and between this look and favor, they experience the warmth of the world. ("Eye" and "favor" refer to two sides, but "warmth" corresponds to only one side.)
6. Negative and affirmative do not match. For example:
(20) Should we emphasize language learning or not? Is it enough to study mathematics, science and chemistry? Our answer is negative. (The previous question has both affirmative and negative answers; the later answer only takes care of the negative answer.)
(21) I think it should not be necessary to narrate that there is no one who will not be able to imagine it. ("There is no one who can't imagine it" means "no one can imagine it", which is the opposite of the original sentence.)
When checking for collocations, pay particular attention to parallel phrases to prevent the loss of one for the other. For example:
(22) Various methods are adopted to cultivate and improve the standard of teachers, especially middle-aged teachers. ("Cultivate" and "level" do not go well together.)
Three, the results of the mutilation or redundancy
1, the components of mutilation
<1> the lack of the subject. For example:
(23) From this small, ordinary thing, a big problem is illustrated. （What is the subject of "illustrate"? The prepositional phrase cannot be the subject, and "from ......" can be deleted.)
(24) Much has been said about the TV movie "Beijingers in New York". (Delete "about" so that the subject of the sentence appears.)
<2> Missing predicate. E.g.
(25) These roles are of different types, and the distance is quite great, so it is not possible to play them well without good characterization skills. ("These characters are of different types" lacks a predicate and should be supplemented with "belonging to" to make it sound.)
(26) Recently, a comprehensive quality inspection campaign has been launched, in which a series of tasks such as the establishment and strengthening of a technical management system are to be carried out. Which verb is the object of "a series of efforts"? (I can't find a suitable one in the original sentence. The predicate "to accomplish" should be added before "to establish" to make it sound.)
<3> Missing object. For example:
(27) In the past two years, they have popularized the Mahe brigade's adherence to scientific farming throughout the county. ("Promote" what?). Missing object "...... experience.")
(28) We must do everything we can to put our agriculture on the road to mechanization and collectivization. ("On the path of ......" would be appropriate.)
2, superfluous
Component superfluous subject, predicate, determinative, etc., here only one example of each slightly illustrated.
(29) We, the second graders, generally speaking, listen carefully and observe classroom discipline during class. (Subject redundant.)
(30) The handouts we borrowed from your institution last time are being printed and can be distributed to the students before class. (Predicate redundant.)
(31) In honor of the "March 8" festival. The festival will be held on March 8, 2012, in honor of the "March 8" holiday. (The object is followed by a redundant element.)
(32) What a wealth of "silent" subtext is contained in this sentence. (The definite article is redundant.)
(33) He carried out wheat-yield experiments with the old farmer many times over. (The dative case is piled up. Delete any one of them.)
(34) Wang is very serious about any work he does. (Complement redundant.)
Four, structural confusion
1. Sentences are mixed. This refers to the fact that there are two or more sets of sentence structures jumbled together, making the semantic meaning unclear. For example:
(35) This approach is hygienic, convenient and popular among the masses. (or "loved by the masses", or "y loved by the masses")
(36) People who had been bound by the planned economy for many years also came to their senses. ("Had been ...... bound" and "under ...... bondage" are mixed, either one will do.)
2, the sentence secretly change the subject. Sometimes the subject of the clause in the complex sentence, so that the original subject can not be and predicate with, but also cause confusion in the structure. For example:
(37) The old worker's words touched Xiaoqiu's heart y and he could not calm down for a long time. (The subject of the first clause is "words" and the subject of the second clause is "Xiao Qiu's heart", which is an implicit switch and causes confusion. Can be changed to "...... touched Xiao Qiu, so that his heart for a long time ......)
3, unclear levels. For example:
(38) Xinhua News Agency found that the yeast alanine transfer ribonucleic acid synthesis was successfully completed in Shanghai, the majority of readers attach great importance to the scientific community also attaches great importance to the strong reaction. ("caused a strong reaction" is an abstract phrase, should be said first, and then say the concrete; for scientific achievements, should be said first, "the scientific community" reaction, and then say "the majority of readers "
4, improper punctuation causes confusion. For example:
(39) The success of the film was due to the collective strength of the artistic leadership of the Film Bureau, the assistance of the original stage playwrights, and the dedication of the entire cast, all of which were new experiences I had never had before. (With the comma after "collective strength," the reader naturally takes the words "leadership," "assistance," and so on, as the object of "attributed to" but the reader does not take them as the object of "attributed to. "object, but the author's intention is to use the latter as the subject of "are", "power" must be followed by a period)
Fifth, unclear
Uncertainty
Uncertainty consists of two kinds of cases: One is "puzzling" and the other is "ambiguous". "difficult to understand" is a sentence expressed, but can not be read to understand what is said; "ambiguity" that is, there are two understandings of a sentence. Whether "difficult to understand" or "ambiguity" is the expression of not understand, not clear. Here are some examples:
1. For example:
(40) A visit to the Belt Ridge to see the chainsaw mill and the forest light railroad was the return leg of my trip. (How can a "visit" be a "homeward journey"? The author means "...... is one of the things I'm scheduled to do on the way home from my trip.")
2. Ambiguity. For example:
(41) The factory manager adopted the rationalization suggestions of the two workers, which greatly stimulated the enthusiasm of the entire factory staff to contribute their ideas. ("two workers" or "two suggestions"? Understanding creates ambiguity.)
(42) The county notified the mayor of the township of Zhao to report by the 15th of this month. (It can be understood as "go to report on the 15th/before") or as "go to report on the 15th/before")
(43) When you buy apples, the small children don't want them. (It can be interpreted as both "small individual apples" and "small children".)
3. The reference is not clear. For example:
(44) After thinking for half a day, she couldn't decide what to do, and finally decided to go to Aunt Wang's house, which was not far from her home, and let her accompany her home. (Who accompanied who? I think it was "Auntie Wang accompanied her.")
(45) Song Boss and Qi San reunited after a long period of time, talk to him, he gave him a cigarette ...... (who gave who a cigarette?). Can't guess.)
Sixth, illogical
The "illogical" here means that the meaning of the sentence does not make sense. Common types are:
1, self-contradictory. For example:
(46) He was one of the many who were spared. ("The dead" contradicts "spared".)
(47) Many of those who have achieved success in science and academic research have done so through tenacious and hard work under very difficult objective and material conditions. ("Where" and "quite a few" contradiction)
2, the concept of juxtaposition is not appropriate. Concepts that are juxtaposed with each other should be divided according to the same criteria. If the standard is confused, it will cause the size of the concept of juxtaposition of different categories of concepts juxtaposed to the error. For example:
(48) The farm is determined to increase production of grain, cotton and cash crops. ("Cotton" is a "cash crop" and the two cannot be juxtaposed.)
(49) Swimming tickets are divided into general tickets, visiting tickets, monthly tickets and seasonal tickets. The "visit ticket" is not a "game ticket" and cannot be listed with the "general ticket", etc.).
3, pull the cause and effect. For example:
(50) He is not interested in mathematics, science and chemistry because he has a preference for the subjects. (The latter is a specific manifestation of the former, not a result.)
(51) Because he came from the north, his ideas were fundamentally the same old set. (There is no causal relationship between the former and the latter.)
4. Subject and object are reversed. For example:
(52) The name Edison is not unfamiliar to our young students. (It should be "Students are familiar with the name Edison.")
(53) The mood of study last year is quite different from that of this year. (Comparison of a first and a later two things, generally always the latter as the main body, so it should be said: "my mood of learning this year and last year ......")
5, negative improper. For example:
(54) No one can deny that excellent academic performance is not achieved by diligent study. (There is a triple negation, and the whole sentence expresses the negative meaning, which is just the opposite of the intended meaning.)
(55) Of course, the play also promotes feudal ideas such as karma, so who can deny that the play has no negative influence? (The rhetorical question itself is also a double negative, so this sentence expresses a negative meaning which is not intended.)
6. Unreasonable. For example:
(56) In the afternoon, after a thunderstorm, a beautiful rainbow appeared in the western sky. (The rainbow appeared in the direction opposite to the sun, and rainbows in the afternoon can only appear in the east.)
(57) If you study hard, you can get into a good university. ("Studying hard" is not a sufficient condition for "getting into a good college.")
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Common Types of Diseased Sentences
1, not much order
(1) Our country is now self-sufficient in the production of cotton. (The position of the definite article and the central word is reversed, and should be changed to "the cotton produced")
(2) In the lounge many teachers talked with him enthusiastically yesterday. (多层状语语序不当，表对象的介宾短语一般紧近中心语，应改为 "热情的同他交谈")
（3）The document gives detailed regulations and insightful explanations on some issues in the economic field, both theoretically and policy-wise. (The words are not in the proper order; "profound explanation" should be followed by "theory" and "detailed provisions" should be followed by "policy". ".)
2. Inappropriate collocation
(1) As the spring wind blew in a gust, the tree branches swayed, and the moonlight and shadows of the trees shook together, making a rustling sound. （The moonlight does not make a sound.)
(2) After she finished the movie, she announced that she had officially retired from acting. (verb-object collocation inappropriate, "career" can not "quit")
(3) This is a highly competitive exam, and you have to work very hard to beat the other competitors. (The words "not" and "talent" cannot be used together.)
3. Component mutilation or redundancy
(1) Mr. Lu Xun created miscellaneous writings in the struggle, which became a wonder of literature and art. (lack of subject, change "created" to "created")
(2) He then took the initiative to participate in the handling of social catastrophic accidents, defuse the risks and stabilize the responsibility of social life. (缺少谓语，在 "参与 "前加上 "承担")
(3) As long as you are diligent and willing to work hard, you can't be defeated by any kind of problems. (lack of object, add "determination" after "willingness to suffer")
(4) The rest of this is an over-analyzing idea. (redundant, "anxiety" is to think, can be deleted "the idea of")
4, structural confusion
(1) cough expectorant tablets, which is the main ingredient is the farther, Platycodon grandiflorum, mother of pearl, ammonium chloride and other preparations. (It should be "the main ingredient is ......" or "it is formulated from ......", either one or the other. )
(2) Do you know how many people have to work hard to publish a translation before it reaches the readers? (The two sentences "to publish ...... efforts" and "a translation ...... meets" are said in one piece)
5. Uncertainty
(1) The director, deputy director and other bureau chiefs were present at the commendation ceremony. (It is not clear whether the other bureau leaders are leaders of this bureau or leaders of other bureaus.)
(2) The Palestinian guerrillas were well prepared for the Israeli attack. (Whether "Palestinian guerrillas attacked Israel" or "Israel attacked Palestinian guerrillas" is unclear.)
6. Illogicality
He was one of many who were spared. (If he was "spared", he didn't die, so how can you say "one" of the "dead"?
Second, the basic method of modifying sick sentences
1, to understand the several common types of sick sentences, especially the "Examination Instructions" pointed out that the six types; inappropriate order, inappropriate collocation, components of the mutilation or redundancy, structural confusion, ideological uncertainty, illogicality. Be familiar with the conventional methods of changing sick sentences.
2. The purpose of modifying sick sentences is to make the sentence expression accurate and the statement understandable. When revising a sick sentence, the original meaning must be retained and not changed out of shape.
As soon as I walked into West Lake Park, I saw colorful flags flying and loud singing in the park.
This sentence is guilty of improper collocation, "colorful flags" can be seen, "loud and clear singing" can not be seen. Modify this sentence, not because of the improper collocation of the "loud and clear" deleted, because the whole sentence is to be from two aspects to show the park's lively and extraordinary, delete "loud and clear" on the original meaning of the sentence to change. The sentence can be changed to "a walk into the West Lake Park, you can see the colorful flags fluttering, hear the song loud and clear".
3, from a grammatical point of view, seize the main body of the sentence. Whether it is a single sentence, compound sentence, seize the main body of the sentence, also seized the basic meaning of the sentence, in the change of the sentence is conducive to retain the original meaning. Catch the main stem should pay attention to identify whether the main stem is faulty, such as whether there is a component of the mutilation, the subject of the predicate, verb-object collocation and other faults, to be corrected first.
The negligence of the director of the grain store made 40 tons of wheat moldy and spoiled. The higher-ups decided to give him an administrative demerit and compensate for part of the financial loss in order to take the law seriously.
The main body of this sentence is "The higher leaders ...... decided ...... and compensated ......" obviously Contrary to the meaning of the whole sentence, the person who "compensated" should be the director of the grain depot for negligence, not the higher authorities. Should be added in front of the "compensation" "order him".
4, from the lexical point of view, to see whether the sentence modifier with the center of the sentence is appropriate, the sentence of the real word, the use of words is appropriate.
After language class, Huang Xiaojing handed her teacher two essays that she had completed outside of class.
The number words in this sentence are inappropriate, and the word "two" should be changed to "two". Instead of "two tables" and "two lamps", say "two tables" and "two lamps".
5, from the logical thing to start. Secondary school text although there is no chapter dedicated to the introduction of logical knowledge, but in the modification of the sentence but often need some logical knowledge. Usually should pay attention to some basic knowledge of logic. Some of the sentences in the logic of the fault, modify the logical point of view to be considered.
The car sped down the winding mountain road, like an arrow out of a string.
"The arrow that leaves the string" is straight ahead, while "winding" is zigzagging, and the metaphor in the sentence is illogical. It should be changed to "The car raced down the highway like an arrow off a string."
The conventional ways to revise a sick sentence are to add, delete and switch words.
Three, choose, imitate, change the sentence
A meaning, not only can be expressed in this kind of sentence, you can also choose another kind of sentence to express. For example, "we finished the book" can also be said as "the book was finished by us"; "there are a lot of things in the store" can also be said as "there are a lot of things in the store". There are a lot of things in the store" can also be said as "There are a lot of things in the store". However, due to the different tone, mood and color of different sentences, the rhetorical effect is not the same. Therefore, according to the needs of the expression of speech composition, carefully choose and change the most appropriate and expressive sentence to express. There are many kinds of sentences, such as active and passive sentences, affirmative and negative sentences, general and special sentences and so on. Mastering the law of various sentence changes, you will be able to choose the most appropriate sentence to serve the expression of the content of the idea.
1, the affirmative sentence into a negative sentence
The same sentence, can be used to express the affirmative sentence, can also be used to express the negative sentence, but the latter than the former to be lighter. When changing an affirmative sentence into a negative sentence, be careful not to reverse the meaning of the sentence.
The building looks good.
When using a negative sentence, you can say "The building's appearance is not ugly", but you can't simply add the negative phrase "it's not nice" and say "The building's appearance is not nice. ". That would be a negative sentence, but it would reverse the meaning of the sentence.
The sentence could also be expressed in double negative, which expresses an affirmative meaning, as "I have to admit that the building looks nice." The meaning is the same as in the original sentence, but the tone is stronger.
2, long sentences into short sentences
In the face of a complex long sentence, first of all, we must find out the main body, and then to distinguish between the main part of the sentence or the branches and leaves part of the complexity of the complexity of the part of the sentence into clauses, the long sentence will become a short sentence.
①The distant peaks and pine slopes of the Taibai Mountains in the western part of the Qinling Mountains, and the bamboo forests, villages and towns in the upper reaches of the Weihe River Plain, are all now covered in the bewildering spring rain.
The main part of the sentence is "The distant peaks and pine slopes, the bamboo forests, villages and towns are covered in a blanket of spring rain." The complex part is the subject, which is filled by parallel phrases. We can take the parallel phrase apart and have it form several clauses with the predicate, turning this long sentence into the following short sentence.
The distant peaks and pine slopes of the Taibai Mountains in the western part of the Qinling Mountains are now covered in a vast spring rain, as are the bamboo forests, villages and towns in the upper reaches of the Weihe Plain.
②While we were advancing from the burning land of Shandong to the Central Plains, a magnificent picture of the great march of history unfolded on the vast territory of our motherland under the majestic Shanhaiguan Pass, on the vast North China Plain, between the rivers of Han and Huaihe in the longitudinal water network, and on the hilly and sandy Northwest Plateau. The main body of the sentence is "a magnificent picture of the march of history, in our vast motherland unfolded on the map", the subject of the front of the five gerund, the gerund with the predicate combination, you can form several clauses.
While we are advancing from the burning land of Shandong to the Central Plains, a magnificent picture of the great march of history is unfolding under the majestic Shanhaiguan Pass, on the vast North China Plain, between the rivers, the Han River and the Huaihe River, in the hilly and sandy Northwest Plateau, and on the vast expanse of our motherland.
3, short sentences into long sentences
To summarize several short sentences, organized into a long sentence, the main thing is to find a central sentence, and then the contents of the other sentence as a sentence component organized into this central sentence. When transforming, pay attention to the smoothness of the sentence.
Transform the following 3 sentences into a single sentence without changing the content.
①We must unswervingly develop our socialist economic construction.
②We have to stick to the policy of self-reliance as the mainstay and striving for foreign aid as a supplement.
③We have to study and introduce advanced foreign technology.
Taking ② as the center sentence and ①③ as the determiners of the long sentence, it is written as follows:
We should unswervingly adhere to the policy of developing China's socialist economic construction mainly through self-reliance and supplementing it with striving for foreign aid, and learning and introducing foreign advanced technology.
Words can be adjusted, deleted or added when organizing a sentence, but they cannot change the meaning of the sentence.
Imitation of a sentence means writing another sentence according to certain requirements based on the sentence provided. Imitation should be careful that the sentence written is as much as possible the same as the provided sentence in several ways, the self-explanation is roughly the same, the sentence style is the same, and the structure is also roughly the same. For example, fill in the appropriate statements on the horizontal line in the following passage, which should be in accordance with the content and form a prose sentence.
Write a book with friendship, a thick book. In the book: friendship as pearls, we *** with the embellishment, linked into a string of brilliant necklaces; friendship as , we , , friendship as , we , .
The example sentence used a metaphor, the imitation of the sentence should also be used on the metaphor, the metaphor should be followed by the sentence with the metaphor is related to the content of the content to be in accordance with. The question requires that the imitation sentence should form a prose sentence together with the example sentence, and the structure of the imitation sentence should be the same as that of the example sentence. Imitation examples are as follows: friendship as colorful silk, we *** with the tailoring, sewed into a piece of gorgeous clothes; friendship as oil, we *** with the color, depicting a piece of wonderful scenery.