Overall these college entrance examination excellent narrative essay, present the following characteristics: 1. language vivid image. 2. characters full of vivid. 3. narrative ups and downs. 4. emotionally sincere and moving. In contrast, the candidates in the writing of narrative essays there are many mistakes, mainly manifested as follows: 1. writing a lack of portrait, language, psychology, action and other descriptions, so that the characters appear to be dry; 2. narrative is too bland, without emotion, lack of touching power; 3. expression is too monotonous, like plain water, tasteless.
So, how can I write an excellent narrative essay?
A multi-angle description method
The so-called multi-angle description method, that is, the object of the narrative of the comprehensive use of a variety of descriptive techniques for the multi-faceted view, multi-angle description, so that the scene of the characters visualization, three-dimensional. For example:
Example 1, the black general stood on the kitchen table, looking at me in a dignified manner, the rope on the leg has long been broken. It issued a triumphant chirp, high-pitched, loud and clear, but there is a kind of tiger whistling in the mountains and forests. ...... I approached it. It provocatively looked at me, toward the window and jumped down. (2011 Jiangsu Candidates' Refusal of Mediocrity)
Points out: there is both a description of the demeanor: "looked at it majestically," "looked at it provocatively"; and a description of the sound: "let out a triumphant chirp, high-pitched, loud, crisp"; and action description: "leaped, jumped". Although just a few dozen words, but through the multi-angle description method, a brave and fearless, do not succumb to the fate of the image of the cockerel on paper, its refusal to mediocrity can not help but let a person stand in awe of the spirit.
Example 2, I turned to leave, and my father is still standing silently in the doorway, standing on tiptoe looking at his son's figure that goes farther and farther away, "Don't forget to call home more often, and remember to pay attention to your body ......" (2011 Shandong candidates, "This The world needs you")
Comments: the father's look is "silent", "tiptoe" action reveals the child's reluctance, while the language description of the child's concern is revealed. The description of the three perspectives of the layers of progression, the image of the father's emotional changes. The description is real, natural and touching.
Example 3: In front of the crimson bar door is a three-stage shallow flat stone steps, a family cat is lying lazily on the stone steps, enjoying the mild sunshine before the arrival of noon. Occasionally a breeze passes by, the old cat gently ruffles the whiskers on its face with its front paws and gives out a "meow", then rolls over and falls into a deep sleep. (2011 Guangdong Candidate "Back to the Start")
Comment: A warm, peaceful and quiet picture comes from a vivid and delicate description. The cat is the center of the painting. It "lies lazily on the stone steps," "gently flicks the whiskers on its face," "lets out a meow," "sinks into a deep sleep," "and then goes back to the original point. "and fell into a deep sleep." There are gestures, movements and sounds. There is movement and silence, both in form and in spirit.
Example 4: Mr. No other hobbies, only a few mouthfuls of wine. Every meal a cup, never an exception. I remember when eating at the table, Mr. looked at the wine glass only remaining a small mouth, said thoughtfully: "Oops, just a small mouth left. To drink or not to drink, that is the question." Then the gentleman waved his hand again, "That's just it, just drink!" I wanted to say that I would honor you in the future, but then I saw the gentleman muttering, "If you want to drink from the next meal, then you will have something to look forward to!" I laughed out loud. (2011 Jiangsu candidates "refused to mediocrity")
Comments: a few words show a humor, not mediocre glorious image, language refinement, see the author's extraordinary language skills. My "laughter" is an indirect description, further emphasizing the image.
Example 5: Time has gradually given me the power to remember and forget. I used to think I couldn't understand him, but now I feel that my father is like a bright green leaf, the back of which is covered with a cloud, and when I turn it over, the veins of the leaf are clearly in front of me. The present is superimposed on the past, and what I remember is that early morning a number of years ago when he told me that sunflowers don't have tears. I, on the other hand, stood still with tears streaming down my face, waiting for his moist and warm embrace. (2011 Hunan candidates "sunflowers do not have tears")
Comment: "Now I feel that my father is like an emerald green leaf, the back of the blindfolded piece of the turn it over, the veins of the leaf clearly in front of my eyes," a beautiful metaphor, image of the writing of "my" psychological feelings. The beautiful simile, image of "I" psychological feelings, "tears flow" is a direct writing of my feelings. Psychological description and depiction, one inside and one outside, real writing "I" to my father's feelings of guilt, but also wrote the love of my father, read, sincere and touching.
Tracking training 01 in the ancient poets to choose a person, play imagination, description, to "stick to" as the topic, write a paragraph. Requirements: Use the method of describing from multiple perspectives.
Second, the ups and downs method
"The text is like a mountain is not like flat", the narrative essay taboo flat. The so-called ups and downs method is the narrative can be used in the narrative, flashbacks and other narrative methods, or the use of suspense, ambush, and the writing techniques, so that the process of narrative twists and turns, intriguing. For example;
Example 1, the window through the early dawn, the sun shines west bridge. Tracing a glimmer of light, he opened his eyes wearily. "Father of the child! You can wake up!" The wife by the hospital bedside said excitedly. Looking around were standing full of people, but as if there was nothing he was looking for, he anxiously pursued: "child, child ......" (2011 Shanghai candidates "heart rain")
Comments: the opening of the flashback technique, set up suspense, attract readers to Good to avoid the flat monotony of the narrative, so that the plot of the article ups and downs, fascinating. It is a good way to avoid the monotony of the narrative and to make the plot of the article more interesting.
Example 2: It was an uncommon chicken. ...... It began to struggle, despite having its legs tied. ...It gave me a provocative look, took a long leap toward the window, and jumped. ...... It was like an eagle, soaring and landing magnificently and leaving leisurely. (2011Jiangsu Candidate "Refuse Mediocrity")
Comments: The narrative of this event can be described as ups and downs, the reason is that the chicken escaped the process of a series of twists and turns. And the author did a good job of describing it in vivid detail. In addition, the chicken's ultimate success in escaping can be said to be both unexpected and within expectations. Because "uncommon" and "provocative" have already set the stage for the ending.
Example 3: When the bearded man reappeared, he drew a crowd. "Ladies and gentlemen, this is my work." Said the man pulling the cloth off me. "Ah ...... stone - monkey!" The bearded man opened his mouth wide. (2011 Jiangsu candidates "refused to be mediocre")
Comments: unexpected results, so that the development of the story to change the established trajectory of development, not only let the story of the people surprised, but also let the reader enjoy the narrative ups and downs brought about by the psychological feeling of surprise.
Tracking training 02, please take "curiosity" as the topic, to set up the suspense technique to write a paragraph.
Third, the combination of narrative and discussion
A narrative essay, if only narrative and description, without a good argument, the article will be flat and weak. The so-called combination of narrative method is in the narrative and description of the text behind, set up a good one or two sentences of discussion, in order to collect the title, the subject, deepen the theme, sublimation of feelings of the effect.
Example 1, afterword: the magnificent arms can not afford the weight of the years, all can not forget can only first cross the past, and then in a life moment, they will suddenly wake up. Life is always between forgetting and remembering, allowing people to be grown. (2011 Shanghai candidates "heart rain")
Comments: after the body of the postscript, flashing philosophical punctuation, words of caution, infectious,. Not only the topic, but also to deepen the theme, sublimation of feelings of effectiveness.
Example 2: It rejects mediocrity and transcends the ordinary with the struggle of dying to survive. It belongs to nature. It should have left. I have nothing but respect for it. (2011Jiangsu Candidates' Refusal of Mediocrity)
Comments: A rooster waiting to be slaughtered, unwilling to be at the mercy of fate, bravely escaped. It is a chicken that is not mediocre. At the end of the article, these sentences of discussion reveals the significance of the incident, played a role in pointing out the title. And "for it, I only respect" sentence from the lyrical point of view sublimation of the theme.
Example 3: Tearing this place down would be destroying my roots, the roots of hundreds of old Guangzhou neighborhoods! But who will hear such a cry? The origin of life, the origin of culture seems to have become small compared with the fast-developing economy and the buildings rising from the ground. (2011 Guangdong candidates "back to the origin")
Comments: These sentences are full of deep emotion, not only the topic, and read thought-provoking, one because the previous narrative has reflected the author's love of the old street, very good for the discussion here to do enough to pave the way. Secondly, the contrast in these sentences, close to reality, contains philosophy, showing the author's deep insights.
Tracking training 03 to "mid-autumn moon" as the theme, write a paragraph. The first is to use a combination of the two.
Four, full of feelings method
French philosopher and writer Denis Diderot said: "Without the quality of feelings, any tone of writing is impossible to move the heart", "where there are feelings, there is beauty". Narrative writing is especially true. The so-called "full of feelings" method, that is, in the narrative essay writing, to be full of feelings, or direct expression, or the scene of emotion, or emotion in the matter, in order to achieve infected readers, move readers, cause **** Ming effect.
Example 1 I carefully placed two fireflies on a wide green leaf. As they breathed in the scent of nature, they ignited that familiar glow-green light, so pure and so full of life. (2011 Guangdong candidates "back to the original point")
Comments: "careful" image reflects "I" afraid of hurting the fireflies of the subtle mood, and "so pure, but also so full of vitality "reflects" my "excitement, joy. The fireflies are full of love and care, containing but not directly exposed, is the lyrical characteristics of this sentence.
Example 2The moonlight was scattered on the ground through the treetops, and the scaly moonlight was as fragmented as a child's heart. Only the cuckoo with red eyes shouted from the trees, "Don't cry, don't cry ......." (2011 Shanghai Candidate "Heart Rain")
Commentary: Use the metaphor of sadness in the "scaly scattered moonlight", imitate the cuckoo bird's mournful chirping as "do not cry, do not cry," euphemistically and implicitly expresses the child's extreme sadness due to the accidental injury of his father, read it. Sadness, read. It makes people sad.
Example 3 indifference out of the corner of my eye a crystalline teardrop accompanied by raindrops, sliding down the face, smashed in the wet ground, broken into several petals: it turned out that my father loves me that way. I am sorry, father! I understand that for me, the world needs you, my father! (2011 Shandong candidates "the world needs you")
Comments: straightforward, expressing guilt and love for his father, the exquisite description of the accompanying raindrops, sliding down the face of the teardrops deepens the expression of feelings.
Tracking training 04 to "mother" as the theme. Write a paragraph. Requirements: full of emotion.
V. Detailed description method
Lev Tolstoy said, "Art begins with the slightest." "To the smallest" is the details. Details are the life of art. The so-called "detail description" method, is in the narrative writing, through the real vivid details, so that the narrative from superficial to profound, from boring to vivid, from bland to touching. Detailed description refers to the work of the character action, language, demeanor, psychology, appearance, as well as the natural landscape, the atmosphere of the scene and other small links or plot description.
Example 1: Suddenly, one day, a stone quarryman came to the barren mountain, circled around me, like a donkey pulling a mill, and touched my buttocks and exclaimed: "Good stone, good stone! Do you want to be mediocre for the rest of your life, or would you like to follow me to the earth?" The language is humorous and vivid, which makes people laugh. The language description of the quarryman not only points out the topic of the word "mediocre", but also further enrich the characterization. The vivid details of the description make the characters vivid and vivid on paper.
Example 2: Once, I picked up the old handkerchief and went to my mother's hospital bed, where she gently stroked the yellowed handkerchief for a while with the palm of her hand that could only move. Afterwards, she smiled and said, "I embroidered this for you when you were in the third grade. It was raining that night, and in order to buy a new handkerchief, you were more upset than the rain." (2011 Sichuan Candidate "Time is Passing")
Comments: From the subtle action of "gently caressing", the demeanor of "smiling", and the language description of clear memories of the past, it portrays the image of a gentle and friendly mother who loves her daughter dearly, and it also expresses the idea of "love" in a good way. It also expresses the theme of "time passes" very well.
Example 3: My father's hand was gripping the strap tightly, and I silently lowered my head to see my father's worn-out shoes were already soaked through, and his pants legs were wet for most of the time. The more it rains, the heavier it gets. (2011 Shandong Candidates "This World Needs You")
Comments: From "my" point of view, I saw my father in the rain: "hand gripping the strap" "soaked ragged shoes "" wet half of the pants leg ". This is a detailed description, which portrays the image of an honorable father who lives a hard life and whose mind is still focused on his children even though he is drenched by the rain. The environmental description (the rain is getting heavier and heavier) strongly emphasizes the image of the father and the unsettled mood of "I". Although the statement is brief, but through the details of the description is very good to express "I" to my father's feelings: the world needs you. The world needs you. At the same time, it's also a clever way to get to the point.
Tracking training 05 to "evening study, a small flying insect ......" as the beginning of a paragraph. Requirements: detailed description.
Sixth, string of pearls method
If the rich and vivid material is a pearl, then the clue is a string of pearls. The so-called "string of pearls" method, is to set up through the entire text of the clues, the text of the characters and events organically linked together, so that the article is clear, clear hierarchy. The arrangement of the clues usually have the following forms: 1. to the theme as a clue. 2. to the characters as a clue. 3. to the things as a clue. 4. to the central event as a clue. 5. to the "feelings" as a clue. 6. to the "feelings" as a clue. 7. to the "feelings" as a clue. 8. to the "feelings" as a clue. 9. to the "feelings" as a clue.
It should be noted that, no matter what kind of clues, must be from the expression of the central idea of the article and reflect the intrinsic connection between the material, flexible and skillful to determine.
Example 1, one, five dumplings ...... poor Qu Yuan ah, you probably will not think of the original in honor of your dumplings have become our cultural "mascot" right? Please forgive me, I'm just a mediocre candidate, I have to reject my mediocrity through the college entrance examination. Second, a pigeon ...... poor "natural child" pigeon ah, please forgive me, I'm just a mediocre candidates, I have to reject my mediocrity through the college entrance examination it. Third, a tree ...... dear tree ah, please forgive me, I am only a mediocre candidates, I have to pass the college entrance examination to reject my mediocrity it. (2011 Jiangsu candidates "reject mediocrity")
Comments: the article set three subheadings, naturally forming three parts, in each part of the back of a sentence of argument to point out the title. The theme word (rejecting mediocrity) contained in all three arguments is the clue of the whole text. Taking the theme as a clue not only makes the article well-organized and clear, but also directly deducts the topic. This method is worth learning and applying.
Example 2: For many years, an old handkerchief has been treasured in my desk drawer. ...... Decades have passed by in a hurry, and that old handkerchief seems to be a special gift to me from the years. ...... Once, I picked up that old handkerchief and came to my mother's hospital bed ...... Mother's memory of it was surprisingly clear! ...... I hope that I, like that handkerchief, will still be able to treasure the warmth of affection and retain a true self while slowly aging with time. (2011 Sichuan Candidate "Time is Passing")
Comments: This article takes the thing (the old handkerchief) as a clue throughout the whole text. The old handkerchief brings out the memories of childhood, but also treasures a warm affection, and thus also has a symbolic meaning. "The reason why the old handkerchief is "old" is that it is the result of "the passage of time". The setting of the clue "old handkerchief" reflects the author's careful and exquisite conception.
Example 3I curiously squeezed over to see, ah, it was two fireflies! ...... I snapped out of my memories, everyone had dispersed, and I was the only one left still staring at the fireflies. ...... I summoned up the courage to say to the classmate who caught the fireflies, "Can you give me these two fireflies?" ...... I carefully placed the two fireflies on a wide green leaf. ...... I suddenly felt that we were like fireflies ...... was the night, the streaming fireflies into the dream, I returned to the origin. (2011 Guangdong candidates "back to the origin")
Comments: this article is the central event as a clue: found fireflies - memories of fireflies - to fireflies - to Releasing fireflies - dreaming of fireflies. This clue makes the structure of the article level is extremely clear, so that the grouping of the article is not branching, for the expression of the theme plays a good role.
Tracking training 06 to "road" as the theme, write a composition outline. The following are some of the most important things you can do for your child
Seven, beautiful language method
The old saying: words without text, line without far. "Wen" is "literary". Relative to the thesis, narrative essay is more concerned about the "elegance". The so-called "beautiful language" method is to make the narrative essay in the language of literary style, to attract the reader's eye, so that readers have a sense of pleasure. To "beautiful language" must be done: words vivid, flexible sentences, clever use of rhetoric, the text has meaning.
Example 1: A familiar figure fell, a mountain called father collapsed. The sound of the fall was not loud, only making the fallen cornstalks groan and squeak, but it shattered a child's heart into sand. （
Comments: The fall of the father, compared to the collapse of a mountain, the image of the father in the child's heart of the lofty position, but also write out their own heart because of the father's deep remorse and great sadness arising from the accidental injury. The strong contrast between "the cornstalks groaned and squeaked" and "shattered a child's heart into sand" wrote the child's inner self-reproach and sadness to the extreme. The phrase "cornstalks groaned and squeaked" is particularly graphic, imitating the sound of falling cornstalks, but also the pain of the father's fall, and the role of the child's inner sadness. The text is concise and rich in meaning, giving the reader a clear and strong impression.
Example 2: The horn of the charge broke through the sky, and the small battlefield of 9×10 was filled with smoke and nitrous in an instant. Sprinting chariot charging into battle, destroying cities and fortresses, prima donna; fierce artillery killing machine hidden, "the mountains hit the bull", the wind; Mercedes-Benz steed across the sun chasing the moon, lying in the groove hanging horns, galloping across the country. And I, a mediocre soldier huddled alone in a corner of the battlefield. (2011 Jiangsu candidates "refused mediocrity")
Comments: "wolf smoke" "smoke" "charge" ", destroying the city" "primus inter pares" "killing opportunities hidden" "fighting cows across the mountain" "mighty winds ""Chasing the moon across the sun,"" "Crouching in the corner,"" "galloping across the board," which is a whole sentence, showing the author's deep language skills, but also vividly expressed the "The chessboard" on the scene of the fierce fighting. "I, a mediocre soldier huddled in a corner of the battlefield alone", is a loose sentence, the image of a soldier's lonely mediocrity. The combination of whole and prose forms an extremely strong and sharp contrast. There is a whole sentence and prose sentence momentum contrast, but also "small soldiers" and "cars, horses, guns" on the combat ability of the contrast, this contrast for the following write small soldiers are not willing to mediocrity, the courage to fight to make the pad.
Example 3, when the lone chariot face me and my brothers can only helplessly laugh at themselves "since ancient times, two fists can not beat four hands", when the mighty artillery lost the support of the gun rack in front of me unbeatable, when the "spring wind horse hooves fast" of the war horse inadvertently When I lock the way, tied to the horse's feet, when I tore through the solid defense of the ShiXiang, when I wielded the spear pierced the chest of the enemy general, I read in his eyes the loss, read out the fear, but more is not understand and shock. (2011 Jiangsu Candidates' Refusal of Mediocrity)
Comments: Comprehensive use of prose and quotation. The prose sentence shows the helplessness, incomprehension and shock of the enemy's vehicles, horses, cannons and generals, thus contrasting the great energy generated by the soldier's unwillingness to be mediocre, which is in line with the theme of "refusing to be mediocre". The quotes "Since ancient times, it is difficult to beat four hands with two fists" and "The spring breeze is so happy that the horse's hooves are fast" strengthen the above effect and also show the author's literary style.
Example 4The more "ten" years of the past, the more "shepherd boy" waved his whip. When school was over, I was always "nephews playing lanterns - according to the old", waving the whip, holding the rope, yelling the cattle, went to the mountains. (2011 Sichuan Candidate "There is always a kind of expectation")
Comments: "The past is more than a decade away, the 'shepherd boy' waving his whip" is a paraphrase of Mao Zedong's poem "The past is more than a thousand years, Wei Wu waved a whip", clever and witty, showing the author's high language literacy and strong language skills; hysteria "nephews playing lanterns - according to (uncle) the old" makes the language seem vivid and humorous. makes the language seem vivid and humorous. And "waving the whip, holding the rope, yelling cattle", short sentences, lively and bright, read catchy, very rhythmic.