The types of sick sentences in elementary school language are mainly the following nine
1
Compositional mutilation
With certain necessary components missing in a sentence, the expression of meaning is incomplete and unclear.
For example, "A lot of good things were done for the sake of the class community." It is not clear who did many good things.
2
Inappropriate use of words
Because of a poor understanding of the meaning of the words, it is easy to use the word in the range of the size of the word, praise and blame and other aspects of the improper use of the word, especially near-synonyms, the use of associated words, resulting in a sick sentence. For example, "He does things calmly and arbitrarily." "Arbitrary" is a pejorative word, which should be changed to "decisive".
3
Improper matching of words
Some words in a sentence cannot match each other in meaning or they do not match each other in a sensible way, which violates the custom of the language and results in a sick sentence. This includes the improper use of some related words.
For example, "At the gala, we heard pleasant singing and beautiful dancing." The words "heard" and "beautiful dance" obviously do not go together, and should be changed to "At the gala, we heard pleasant singing and saw beautiful dancing."
For example, "If we live a rich life, we shouldn't waste it." Obviously the correlative is used incorrectly, it should be changed to "Even if we live a rich life, we shouldn't be wasteful."
4
Contradiction
In the same sentence, the meaning expressed before and after is contradictory, resulting in unclear meaning.
For example, "I reckon he must have got this question wrong." The first half of the sentence estimates is not sure enough of the meaning, and the second half of the sentence is sure that he is wrong, then there is a contradiction, in the end, what is the situation? It is not clear. It can be changed to "I estimate that he made a mistake in this question." or "I concluded that he was wrong on this question."
5
Word Order Reversal
In general, the word order inside a sentence is fixed, and when the word order is changed and the position is reversed, the meaning of the sentence will change, even causing a sick sentence.
For example, "The language interests me." The positions of "language" and "I" have been reversed and should be changed to "I am interested in languages."
6
Repetitive and wordy
In a sentence, the meaning of the words used is repeated, making it wordy and cumbersome.
For example, "He ran into the classroom with great gusto and announced the good news about the spring trip tomorrow." In the sentence, "giddy" and "elated" both indicate that he was happy, so one of them can be deleted.
7
Conceptual ambiguity
This refers to the conceptual ambiguity of the words in the sentence, inappropriate attributes, and confusing attribution of scope and size.
For example, "The Great Wall of China, the Forbidden City Museum and the Nanjing Yangtze River Bridge are monuments to which Chinese and foreign tourists aspire." Here, "Nanjing Yangtze River Bridge" does not belong to the "monuments", the attribution concept is unclear, should be changed to "the Great Wall of China, the Palace Museum is the Chinese and foreign tourists aspire to the monuments."
8
Illogical and illogical
Some words in the sentence are not clear, the use of the wrong, or the meaning of the expression is not in line with the matter of fact, but also easy to cause sick sentences.
For example, "When the rice was ripe, the fields were green with a harvest." The rice was a golden color when it ripened, whereas the sentence describes a turquoise color, which is out of context.
9
Unclear reference
The reference is unclear and ambiguous when more than one person or object appears in the sentence.
Pronouns are divided into personal pronouns [I, you, he (she, it), we ......], demonstrative pronouns [this, that, here, there ......] and interrogative pronouns [who, where] three kinds of pronouns, unclear pronouns refers to the use of pronouns is wrong. There are two main types of such sentences. One is that a pronoun replaces several people or things at the same time, resulting in confusion of reference. The second type is the misuse of indicative and interrogative pronouns.
For example, Liu Ming and Chen Qing are good friends, and he often asks him to play soccer. --The phrase "He often asks him to play soccer" should be changed to "Liu Ming often asks Chen Qing to play soccer".
Symbols and functions of revising sick sentences
1. Deletion sign: It is used to delete words, punctuation marks, words, phrases and long sentences or paragraphs.
2. Recovery number: also known as the retention number, used to recover the deleted text or symbols. If you recover more than one text, it is best to mark the recovery number under each word to be recovered.
3. The opposite number: used for adjacent words, phrases or phrases to switch places.
4. Correction number: the wrong words or symbols corrected to the correct.
5. Add number: add new words or symbols between words or sentences or paragraphs.
6. Emphasis sign: dedicated to praise well-written words and sentences.
7. Tip No.: dedicated to problematic words, phrases, sentences and paragraphs, prompting the writer to analyze the mistakes and correct them on his own.
8. Transfer number: used to transfer words, punctuation marks, words, sentences and paragraphs from a distance.
9. start paragraph number: a paragraph is divided into two paragraphs, indicating that another paragraph.
10. And paragraph number: the next paragraph of text after the above, indicating that it should not be subparagraphs.
11. indentation number: the top of a line of text shrunk two cells, indicating that another paragraph, the text is postponed.
12. Forward No.: text forward or top frame.
Modification of sick sentences is a way to find, generally need to master the "one read two find three change four check".
One read, read through the sentence, to clarify the original meaning of the sentence. The original meaning is the main meaning of the original sentence to be expressed. The premise of modifying the sick sentence is not to change the original meaning of the original sentence, only to clarify the original meaning of the sentence, it is possible to correctly modify.
The second find, to determine the disease of the sentence. To modify the sick sentence, we must first find the sentence of the disease, to determine the cause of the disease. Generally we can help find the disease based on several common causes of sick sentences that we have learned.
Three changes, the right medicine. According to the disease of the statement and the cause of the disease, after careful thought, using the method of adding, deleting, adjusting, switching, etc., hands on the wrong place to correct.
Four checking, after the correction, you have to reread it once or twice to see whether all the faulty places have been modified, whether the modification is appropriate, and whether the willingness ......
Modifying Sentences Exercise
Modifying Sentences I
1. This is a happy, pleasant and joyful class meeting.
2. The teacher suddenly slowed down gradually.
3. After this outing, the investigation was very inspiring.
4. In order to avoid similar accidents in the future, we must improve our safety system as soon as possible.
5. His kind words and kind face floated in front of my eyes at times.
6. Increasing quality is the top priority of language teaching reform.
7. The winning or losing of this ball game is not only related to the team's reputation, but to the honor of the school.
8. Seeing this exhibition made me have a lot of feelings.
9. Only socialism can save China.
10.As soon as the incident happened, the class teacher studied it with the class committee and decided to have an education on the issue.
11.Summer in Xiaoxinganling is a beautiful place.
12. I saw the movie "Shining Red Star" yesterday.
13. He is confident that he will be able to learn the computer well.
14. At present, the general public's concept of environmental protection is rather weak, and it really needs to be greatly improved.
15.Primary school students should love the habit of reading from childhood.
16. Uncle of the People's Liberation Army shot down five enemy planes and three warships.
17.Complacency is a hindrance to learning.
18.These are relics unearthed in the Tang Dynasty.
19. The panel discussion was violent.
20.The park has a new ride built with the aid of two British aid.
21.I reckon he must have got this question wrong.
22.He ran into the classroom with great gusto and announced the good news about the spring trip tomorrow.
23.Listening to the report made us know a lot of things.
24.In winter, the cold wind whistled and shivered.
25.Even if you are a genius, you can't be separated from your teacher's training and education all the same.
26.The author of "Grassland" was written by Lao She.
27.If you keep a diary, your writing ability will improve and expand rapidly.
28.This kind of unloving labor and arbitrary waste is shameful.
29.We need to enhance our confidence and methods of overcoming difficulties.
30.The cock of dawn is the signal to get up.
31.We have to correct our shortcomings and mistakes seriously.
32.Reading more good books can enrich and improve our knowledge.
33.Language Learning for Primary School Students and China Youth Daily are my favorite newspapers to read.
34.Pioneers should love the motherland and public **** property.
35.No difficulty can frighten the young pioneers with strong will.
36. Listening to the report, I was educated.
37. The rice was ripe and the fields looked like a green carpet.
38.I couldn't help but laugh out loud.
39.I often see Xiao Ming working out in the morning sometimes.
40.Because Lao She loved flowers and kept many of them.
Correcting Sentences II
1. No matter how hot the weather is, everyone still insists on exercising.
2. I have successfully carried out the task given to me by the company commander.
3. After the education, the victims were made to sharpen their eyes and increase their awareness.
4. Students must obey the traffic rules to prevent don't have accidents.
5. During the class, Xiaohua's eyes were on the teacher without turning away.
6.I bought a pen, ruler, eraser and stationery and rushed home.
7. Though you study even better, there is no reason to be proud.
8. Martha was wearing a blue windbreaker and a yellow hat.
9. With hard work, Xiaodong's sloppiness in doing problems has improved compared with before.
10.The square was crowded with many uncountable people.
11. After treatment, Xiao Ming has recovered his health.
12. Since the reform and opening up, there have been great changes in China.
13. It was very educational to hear what the teacher said.
14. I have visited most of all the sights in the Summer Palace.
15.In the deep mountains of the northeast, earth coal kilns are sparsely scattered everywhere.
16.He sat attentively, listening intently to the teacher.
17.After the composition is written, we have to learn to correct the incorrect typos.
18.In labor, our hands get dirty with mud.
19. I whispered when I heard the news.
20.There were only about seventy-two people present at the meeting.
21.One of his hands was almost completely frozen.
22.The campus is planted with many trees such as moonflowers, begonias, sycamores, pines and cypresses.
23.There are so many toys in the children's store, including blocks, cloth dolls, electric trains, soccer balls and so on.
24.On Sunday, the students brought bread, eggs, apples, bananas, cooking utensils and food for a picnic.
25.She wore a bright red scarf and a snow-white shirt.
26.I read all day this morning.
27.Wang Ping and Li Hua developed a deep friendship.
28.The number of goods in the market is now much higher.
29. The students said that yesterday's activity was a pleasant day.
30.On the first day of the opening of the fair, many people, including workers, peasants, soldiers, students and women, came to attend.
31.It was not until the second half of the 19th century that it was discovered that corals were predators living in the sea.
32.When the Eight-Power Allied Forces invaded China, they burned and sacked the Yuanmingyuan in the western suburbs of Beijing.
33.After visiting a machine factory and a children's toy factory, they said in unison, "This factory is really advanced in equipment."
34.Last year China's oil output was one of the largest in the world.
35.These descriptions show the main character's humble and simple image.
36.Under my teacher's education, I corrected my attitude and method of study.
37. The students listened to the teacher's lecture with gleaming eyes.
38. Beneficial birds such as swallows, woodpeckers and frogs all specialize in eating pests and are good friends of mankind.
39. Today is my little cousin's fifth birthday.
40.Lanlan's spirit of helping others is worth touching.
Answers
Modify Sentences I
1.Remove ", pleasant, joyful"
2.Remove "suddenly" or "gradually "
3. Remove "after"
4. Remove "avoid" or "no longer"
5. After "kind words" add "ringing in my ears" " ," to "," remove " , "
6. "Increase" was changed to "raise"
7. "But rather "changed to "and"
8. "Watched" was removed
9. "On" was changed to "only"
10. "This question" was changed to "classmates"
11. "Summer in Xiaoxinganling " was changed to "Xiaoxinganling in summer"
12. "" was changed to ""
13. Remove "can"
14. "Improve" was changed to "strengthen"
15. "To be" was followed by "foster "
16. Remove "and three warships"
17. Remove "on"
18. Remove "unearthed "
19. "violently" changed to "fiercely"
20. "Two British-aided" changed to "two British-aided"
21. Remove the word "must"
22. Remove the word "giddy"
23. Remove the word "make"
24. Remove "whistling"
25. Change "but" to "also". "
26. Remove "the author of" or "wrote"
27. Remove "and expand"
28. p>28. Add "the behavior of" after "wasting"
29. Remove "and the method"
30. The word "rooster" has been changed to "rooster crowing at dawn"
31. "Correct" has been changed to "correct"
32. "and improve"
33. Remove "《小学生语文学习》"
34. Add "爱护" after "and". "
35. remove "everything"
36. add "I" after "and"
37. Change "green" to "golden"
38. Remove "can't help"
39. Remove "sometimes "
40. change "and" to "so"
Modifying Sentences II
1. "No matter" changed to "in spite of"
2. "practiced" changed to "accomplished"
3. Remove the word "made "
4. Remove "don't"
5. Remove "without turning your eyes"
6. "and" Change "and" to "and so on"
7. Change "although" to "even though" and "but" to "also"
8. "and" followed by "wearing"
9. "Progress" Change to "decrease"
10. Remove "many, many" or "countless"
11. Remove "the disease of "
12. Remove "in"
13. Add "I" after ","
14. Remove "mostly"
15. remove "sparsely" or "starry"
16. remove " concentrated" or "concentrated"
17. Remove "incorrectly"
18. "Our hands soiled the mud. "changed to "the dirt soiled our hands"
19. "I" changed to "we"
20. removed "around"
21. remove "almost"
22. "trees" changed to "plants "
23. remove ", soccer"
24. remove "and food"
25. "and " followed by "dressed"
26. Remove "morning"
27. Replace "profound" with "profound"
28. "Quantity" was changed to "quality"
29. Remove the activity of "the "
30. Remove "and women"
31. "It was only when the coral was discovered" was changed to "The coral was only discovered "
32. "Eight countries" was changed to "Britain and France"
33. After "this" add "two"
34. Remove "the volume of oil exports"
35. "Image" was replaced by "personality "
36. "and" changed to ", improved learning"
37. "Gleaming" changed to "concentrated"
38. remove "and frogs"
39. "Birthday" changed to "birthday "
40. "Touched" changed to "Learning"