20 18 IELTS writing mock exam: healthy lifestyle of vegetarians
The topic of IELTS writing in this issue is health, and whether vegetarianism is a healthy lifestyle is discussed. The topic is: Some people think that being a vegetable is the only way to stay healthy. Do you agree or disagree? Some people think that becoming a vegetarian is the only way to stay healthy. Do you agree? For more corpora and opinions on IELTS writing topics, please see below.
The theme of this article is to demonstrate how to keep healthy.
Health category
The government has the responsibility to ensure that its citizens have a healthy diet, while others think it is the responsibility of individuals. Discuss two views and give your own. The government has the responsibility to ensure people's healthy diet, which is the responsibility of individuals. Discuss two views and give your opinion.
It is the responsibility of individuals and governments to keep writers healthy, but individuals should bear more responsibilities. (The way of personal health management is to strengthen exercise, health management and reasonable diet. )
The theme of reviewing the text is to demonstrate how to keep healthy.
Difficulties in writing
1. No problem.
2. No language
3. The expression is not wonderful
Writing strategy
Input and output of a wonderful corpus. Writing articles is like building a building. It needs drawings and raw materials. According to the understanding of writing, it is to find the layout of the article+choose words and make sentences. Corpus is a block of bricks, materials, cement and wood to create a perfect model essay. This is the most basic test of writing. The IELTS Writing Corpus integrates excellent reading resources and personalized original ideas.
An analysis of the reasons for China candidates' low marks.
1. The traces of template and recitation are too heavy to be believed to be original works.
2. Without literary talent, many expressions have become commonplace.
3. Weak foundation and many mistakes.
Analysis of two writing terms
A writer's favorite vocabulary
Fixed input
IELTS writing scoring standard
☆ Mission accomplished.
Analysis: whether the content is relevant, whether the position is clearly and effectively expounded, and whether the structure is logical.
Coherence and cohesion
Analysis: "Starting", "Success", "Turning" and "Harmony" between paragraphs can be completed by transitional words in tabular order.
Lexical resources (lexical resources)
Analysis: accurate words can add points. The brilliance of vocabulary lies in the individualization and diversification of expression.
☆ Grammatical scope and accuracy.
Analysis: the accuracy and richness of sentence structure; Length and complexity of sentences; Logic and form of language.
Five Steps of IELTS Writing
(1) Lexical substitution: replace the key words in the problem.
(2) Theme point of view: establish the writer's position or writing purpose.
(3) Thinking expansion: thinking about reasons to support refutation or explaining solutions.
(4) Text writing: The corpus prepared for text writing should be used flexibly.
(5) Check carefully: stick to the logic of writing; Grammar; Vocabulary spelling.
Concession rebuttal analysis: three-point concession and seven-point rebuttal (the view is not completely correct)
Concession refutes the layout of the theme
[Paragraph 1]: Background introduction+controversial focus+writer's position.
[Paragraph 2]: Concessions to the rationality of the original viewpoint (at most two points; The tone of others; My tone; Can be moderately refuted)
[Three paragraphs]: The irrationality of the original point of view of concession (two or three refutations)
[last paragraph]: clarify your point of view again+summarize the reasons.
In order to keep healthy, eating more fruits and vegetables may be an effective way, but it is not the best and only way.
Thinking expansion
Why can vegetarianism stay healthy?
1. Vegetarians should avoid sugar, fat and excessive calories.
Besides, fruits and vegetables are rich in vitamins, so eating more fruits and vegetables can really keep you healthy. However, what I want to refute is that excessive intake of fruits and vegetables will lead to unbalanced nutrition.
Why is vegetarianism not the only way to stay healthy?
1. In fact, just avoiding meat intake is not the best way to stay healthy.
First of all, strengthening physical exercise is a good way to keep healthy. Regular exercise can make people relax, enhance immunity and improve health index.
Secondly, the combination of work and rest is the guarantee of a healthy lifestyle, because in the face of fierce competition, many modern people are overworked, which actually has a subtle influence on their health. Therefore, effective rest, such as arranging a trip or getting together with friends on weekends, will also make people feel happy, lead a sweet life and contribute to people's health management.
Original corpus
1. Happiness lies in health first. Health is the source of a happy life.
2. Vegetarian = people who like to eat vegetables or fruits.
3. Vegetarian = people who always avoid eating meat.
4. It is the only way.
5. Stay healthy = stay healthy = start a healthy lifestyle = have a complete lifestyle v Stay healthy.
Fan Wen appreciation
[Paragraph 1]: Background Introduction+Author's Position
Happiness lies in health first. Health enables us to face professional challenges energetically and coordinate family life optimistically. The awareness of a healthier lifestyle has caused many people to change their eating habits, which explains the increase of vegetarians. In my opinion, eating fruits and vegetables may be an effective way to keep healthy, however, it is not the best and only strategy.
The analysis of my position is that my firm belief is, I want to express my views. ...
Expand the scope of … in …; as for ...
[Paragraph 2]: Concession clause
In fact, I have to admit that people who consciously avoid eating meat can help them embark on a healthy lifestyle to some extent. More precisely, vegetarian eating habits help people avoid eating too much sugar, fat and calories. At the same time, a large number of fruits and vegetables are rich in nutrients and vitamins. However, what I want to refute is that excessive consumption of fruits and vegetables may lead to imbalance in nutritional value.
Start a brand-new lifestyle and start a healthy lifestyle.
However, what I want to resist is ... however, what I want to refute is ...
[three paragraphs]: rebuttal paragraph
In fact, as far as keeping healthy is concerned, there are still many shortcomings in not eating meat. Other methods should be explored. First of all, strengthening physical exercise is also a commendable way, because regular physical activities help us to relax our bodies and relax. Therefore, a person's immune system can be improved and a person's health index can be improved. In addition, modern people usually have to face fierce competition and great pressure, whether studying or working. In order to stand out, many people burn the midnight oil, which harms their health. In this sense, striking a proper balance between rest and work can also ensure people's health management. For example, staff or students should be urged to arrange holiday trips or get together with friends from time to time.
The analysis of leaves is not ideal ... far from satisfactory.
Work late into the night.
[Last paragraph]: Make your point clear again.
Finally, I reiterate my belief that regular physical activity and reasonable timetable will play an indispensable role in helping people keep healthy, although reducing meat intake may be effective in some cases.
Finally, I reaffirm my belief ... in short, I reiterate our position again.
Play an indispensable role in ... ...
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