The Red Star Shines on China is a documentary literary work written by American journalist edgar snow, in which a section is devoted to recording the Young Pioneers in the Red Army. Si Nuo wrote in the book:
They are always cheerful and optimistic. March for a day, no matter how tired, they will answer "yes!" " Whenever they meet someone asking how they are. They are patient, hardworking, intelligent and hardworking, so seeing them will make you feel that China is not hopeless. China's future depends on the Young Pioneers. As long as these teenagers can be liberated, developed and inspired, they will have the opportunity to play their due role in building a new world. I may sound like preaching, but seeing these brave young people. No one can fail to think that people in China are not born corrupt, but have unlimited development prospects in character.
"They" are 1936 China teenagers who grew up under the "Red Star". The red star shines, the heart does not change, and the stick moves forward.
As you grew up under the same "red star", please write a letter to them and talk about their feelings and thoughts.
Requirements: combine materials, choose a good angle, define concepts, define styles, and draw up titles; Do not copy or copy; Do not disclose personal information; Not less than 800 words
Analysis:
First, clear identity.
You-1936 teenagers
We-2021young people.
Second, the conditions:
? 1. Subject limitation: under the Red Star (that is, under the brilliant guidance of the producer of China * * *).
? 2. Time category: historical background
? 3. Focus on content: the significance and role of building a new China.
? 4. Character definition: A new young man full of energy and hope shoulders the heavy responsibility of rejuvenating China.
Third, material orientation.
? You-spiritual inspiration and guidance? -Pioneer of the revolution?
? We-walk forward with sticks and never change our minds-study and practice.
? Two generations-* * * have their own initial heart and mission-to fight for the future of the nation.
Fourth and third floors
They are always cheerful and optimistic. No matter how tired they are after marching all day, they will answer "Yes!" Whenever they meet someone asking how they are. They are patient, hardworking, intelligent and hardworking, so seeing them will make you feel that China is not hopeless.
Teenagers in (1) 1936-mental outlook and mood-happy, optimistic, hardworking, intelligent and diligent.
? 202 1 struggling youth-moving and thinking (guiding us forward)
China's future depends on the Young Pioneers. As long as these teenagers can be liberated, developed and inspired, they will have the opportunity to play their due role in building a new world.
(2) The teenager in1936-the teenager under the Red Star was liberated and played its due role.
? 202 1 young people-they should work hard in their minds that don't forget their initiative.
I may sound like preaching, but seeing these brave young people. No one can fail to think that people in China are not born corrupt, but have unlimited development prospects in character.
(3) 1936 teenager-fearless and strong, with unlimited development prospects in personality.
? The young people in 202 1 are full of vitality and hope, and strive to become promising China people who will lead the development of China.
? Since 1985 Red Star, the land of China has been thundered.
(Topic tip: Don't make much noise and little rain, try not to be too grand, as it is easy to write empty slogans, and look at the headlines of the People's Daily commentary. )
? -1936 a letter from a teenager in China.
China Youth1936;
? Hello, guys. Recall the past; Noisy smoke, troubled times; Look now, the country is safe, make it mine. At that time, the mountains and rivers were turbulent, and you were patient and smart, studying for the rise of China; At this time, the people are well-being, so we should be practical and calm, and be Chinese descendants. Your forward figure is our role model, and your red star rising in Ran Ran is our light.
Comments: Strong sense of dialogue, clear and practical, clear sense of identity and object. But pay attention to the word order.
According to the original: hello. Recall the past; Noisy smoke, troubled times, turbulent mountains and rivers, you are patient and smart, studying for the rise of China; At present, the country is safe, make it mine. People are happy and healthy, growing up under bright red stars. We must be solid, steady and diligent in casting columns.
China youth have a pair of hard bones. In order to save the nation and survive, you stand up and tell the aggressors and imperialist powers that the people of China will stand up with the persistence of "thinking about the country and guarding the wheel platform", the open-mindedness of "winning in a hundred battles in shining armor" and the courage of "dreaming of death and bravely rushing into the battlefield". The Chinese nation is not afraid of violence, dares to struggle, overcomes obstacles and can defeat all enemies. Now, because of protecting the people, we have no hesitation. The medical aid team in Hubei is full of young people, and the people's soldiers are not afraid to give their blood to defend every inch of the mountains and rivers on the Sino-Indian border. At any time, young people in China do not lack a hard backbone.
Comments: Combined with material limitations, the theme of the article is limited to the red star shining, with "hard bones" as the sub-argument, and the argument is strong. The mental outlook of "1936 Youth" is listed in a compound sentence, which is closely connected with the material and naturally transits. At the end, it emphasizes the hard backbone, strengthens the argument and expounds its connotation in combination with the reality relay.
Another note: "thinking about keeping the wheel platform for the country" means recovering lost ground. Use here is ambiguous, so use it with caution.
The courage to laugh? How many people should have fought in ancient times?
Tip: Accumulation is good, but we should understand its meaning and consider the applicability of context. This poem suggests using complex sentences.
According to the original text: Red Star has glory, China youth has a hard backbone. In order to save the nation and survive, you stand up and tell the aggressors and imperialist powers that the people of China will stand up with the persistence of "living as an outstanding person", the open-mindedness of "crossing the knife and laughing at heaven" and the courage of "fighting several times since ancient times". The Chinese nation is not afraid of violence, dares to struggle, overcomes obstacles and can defeat all enemies. At present, the red star is dazzling. Faced with all kinds of difficulties, the young people in China have no hesitation in defending the people. The medical aid team in Hubei is full of young people, and the people's soldiers are not afraid to give their blood to defend every inch of the mountains and rivers on the Sino-Indian border. At any time, the backbone of youth is hard.
China's youth are full of energy. When poor and weak, China will stumble to catch up with the world. Zhan Tianyou built the first Beijing-Zhangjiakou railway in China, and Hou got through the blocked industrial alkali production; After the country became rich and strong, we went to the forefront of the world. Huawei's 5G leads the world, quantum communication breaks records, and China's high-speed rail reaches new heights. Behind these achievements, young people in China are standing. They are shining with red stars, creating great energy, and making "China No.1" become "World No.1" step by step. Young people in China have the energy of a red star.
Comment: The direction of "big energy" should be clear. At the end, there is an explanation of the understanding of The Red Star Shines, but it lacks profound meaning and broad sense. When listing the materials that young people are learning to make progress, we should also choose the appropriate materials to avoid raising the pen too high and appearing too empty. Talking about the ideological spirit of young people under the Red Star 1936, the following article should lead to the reality and life of themselves and contemporary young people, reflect the sense of the times, or compete with each other uniformly.
According to the original text: The red star shines, and young people in China have courage. When poor and weak, China will stumble to catch up with the world. Zhan Tianyou built the first Beijing-Zhangjiakou railway in China, and Hou got through the blocked industrial alkali production; The red star shines, work hard. At present, China has stepped into the forefront of the world, such as "Tian Kun" sea trial, "Chang 'e" flying to the moon, "Beidou" chess arrangement, "Kunlong" coming out of the water, the opening of the Hong Kong-Zhuhai-Macao Bridge, and China's voice in home diplomacy. It is exciting to list these achievements in this country. Behind these achievements, young people in China are standing. They are shining with red stars, creating brave energy and shining on the world stage step by step. It is precisely because young people in China have the energy of a red star and the initial intention of going forward bravely.
In 85, you raised the red star in the turbulent land of China. In the 265,438+0 century, the light still lingers and shines on our growth, so that we will not change our original heart. This year is the first year of the 14 Five-Year Plan. Stepping on the land you left behind and standing on the cornerstone you paved, China youth stood at a new starting point. Now you can not only enter Xinglin and go to the battlefield, but also repair cultural relics and plant green trees; Let "Moon Rabbit" catch the moon in September, let "Dragonfly" catch turtles in the five oceans, let hybrid rice enjoy the cool, and let "Nine Chapters" calculate quantum. No matter what job or industry, it is the youth force under the Red Star and the future of China that inspires the world.
Comments: This passage tries to explain the mission and responsibility given by Red Star, but it is more about the discussion of young people who write under Red Star 1936 about getting inspiration.
In 1985, you rose a red star in the turbulent land of China. 2 1 century, the brightness is still there. Let's grow up, let's not change our minds. This year is the first year of the 14 th Five-Year Plan, and we have stood on the cornerstone you laid and reached a new starting point. Enter Xinglin, go to the battlefield, repair cultural relics and plant green trees; Let "Moon Rabbit" catch the moon in September, let "Dragonfly" catch turtles in five oceans, and let "Nine Chapters" calculate quantum. No matter what job or industry, it is the youth force under the red star, the future of China and the thunder of the world; It is also your initial footprints that have given us a clearer direction, and your forward strength has given us new hope.
Following your example, we are determined to seize the opportunity, take advantage of the situation, live up to the charm, seize the day, and the youth in China will continue to move towards new goals. We are sure to write more wonderful stories about China under the red star.
Comment: The first paragraph echoes the last paragraph. The first paragraph puts forward the viewpoint, and the last paragraph reiterates the viewpoint. Pick up the baton and March forward, Do not forget your initiative mind.
Taking you as an example, we firmly believe that we will seize the opportunity, take advantage of the situation and live up to the charm. Seize the day, and young people in China will keep moving towards new goals. We are sure to take over the baton bearing countless spirits in your hands, Do not forget your initiative mind, and with the witness of Red Star, we will go forward and write more wonderful stories about China.
I am here to convey
welcome
Young Chinese
202 1 year
General comment: Complete the writing task of correspondence between two generations, and have a strong sense of dialogue. The material is developed with targeted historical events, including 1936' s historical exposition of teenagers and the exposition of modern youth actions, which embodies the relationship between "initial heart" and "baton"; The paragraphs are closely related to the key words "hard backbone" and "great energy"; Explain its connotation with facts. The emphasis and understanding of The Red Star Shines is not clear enough, and the metaphorical meaning of The Red Star Shines. The discussion on inheritance is not deep enough, or it focuses on material stacking and fails to elaborate.