A sick sentence is a sentence with irregular language.? Identifying and modifying sick sentences? is a must-have test point in the college entrance examination paper every year. The following is a senior sick sentence modification lesson plan that I have compiled for you to read!
Senior Sentence Modification Lesson Plan Design:
Teaching Objectives
1, understand the causes of sick sentences and the basic types of sick sentences.
2. To master the methods of analyzing and modifying sick sentences, and to avoid the occurrence of speech defects in the use of language.
Teaching Focus
? Inappropriate word order? Confusing structure? Bad logic. The identification and modification of the three types of sick sentences.
Teaching Preparation:Multimedia.
Lesson time: 2 hours.
Teaching process
I. Introduction
1. Is there anything wrong with the following popular lyrics and jingles?
(1) I see, a mountain, a mountain and a river.
(2) And Mount Everest is the highest mountainside.
(3) I don't want to receive gifts this year, but I want to receive platinum.
Clearly:? The first is the river, which is a river, and the second is the river. is a river, can not be modified with the quantifier seat.
? Everest is a peak, not a mountain. is a mountain, not a hill.
Before saying ? The first is "no gifts", and the second is "no gifts". But then it says, "I don't accept gifts. I don't know what to say, but I don't know.
2, in the talk show, some of the sentences will often be in the host and guests of the random question and answer out. For example:
(1) Such a statement is simply empty, completely without factual basis.
(2) Is there any risk in investing in stocks in the current situation?
(3) We have a large population and the largest number of blind people in the world.
These three sentences, we do not feel a little awkward? What is it about them that is so strange?
Clearly: (1) the problem is? The little monkey eating twist? Full twist? (meaning completely upside down, completely out of shape).
Idioms? The idiom of "empty cave" is used to describe a situation in which there is no news from an empty cave. From Song Yu's "Wind Fugue" in the Warring States period, original meaning? There is a cave before the wind comes in? The idiom of "empty cave" is a metaphor for news and legends that are not entirely without reason. And this sentence is just the opposite of the meaning.
The problem with sentence (2) is that? Turning on electric lights in broad daylight? Redundant? Are? and? are the two forms of questioning. are two forms of selective questioning, and one of them is enough.
The problem with sentence (3) is that? Toad marrying swan? is not worthy? The main stem is? Number? is? Country? That doesn't make sense; and? The most countries in the world? does not make sense either.
II. Activities
(a) Diagnose? disease?
Below are some advertising slogans found in various media, we may want to sentence for these? The first thing we need to do is to check the pulse of these sentences.
The following are some advertisements found in various media, we might as well take the pulse of these sentences to see if they have?
Here are some jingles from various media outlets.
(1) Chinese and Western hosting style, strong ratings charm. (TV program)
(2)? Sleeping Pillow Natural Pillow? Let you improve your cervical spondylosis during sleep. (Medical supplies)
(3) The root of eliminating the smell of sweat is a two-pronged approach. (Cosmetics)
(4) This is an important reason why Junlai Restaurant drew the attention of the industry soon after it opened. (Catering)
(5) Bishengyuan weight-loss tea, with its unique weight-loss concept, has caused a fire in major cities. (Drugs)
(6) With anti-ultraviolet, anti-friction, waterproof, anti-static, to meet the requirements of indoor and outdoor environments. (Office equipment)
(7) Build a better building to show the charm of successful people. (Real estate)
(8) The future of communication will be more diverse, convenient and **** enjoy. (Cell phone)
The above eight jingles have speech defects. First, judge whether there are speech defects one by one according to the sense of speech, and then summarize the method of judging speech defects.
(Teachers organize and prompt students, judgment may be unreliable purely by the sense of language, must learn to judge some of the methods of speech defects. There are two ways for your reference.)
Clarify: First, the analogical method, that is, the imitation of similar sentences.
When the format of a sentence is qualified when in doubt, you can imitate the format of the original sentence to create a few other similar sentences to compare. If none of the imitated structures are valid, the original structure can be judged to be faulty.
Note: The form of the imitation structure should be consistent with the original sentence, the word class and order of the words should be consistent with the original sentence, and the important imaginary words in the original sentence should be retained.
For example, in the first sentence? Strong ratings appeal?
For example, if you are skeptical about the structure in sentence (1), you can imitate a few similar structures to experience it. Like? Strong personality, strong temperament? etc. are not valid, so we can judge that the structure of "strong charisma" is not valid. Strong Charisma is also wrong. Another example is in sentence (2)? Improvement of cervical spondylosis? If you are skeptical about this structure, you can imitate a few similar structures to experience it. For example, if you have doubts about the structure of Improvement of stomach disease, improvement of cervical spondylosis, perfection of cervical spondylosis? are not valid word structures that replace the words in the original sentence with similar words, it can be assumed that the word "improve cervical spondylosis" is the same as "improve stomach". Improvement of cervical spondylosis? is also ungrammatical. Sentences (5) (6) can also be judged in this way.
The second is the tightening method, that is, tightening complex sentences.
If you have doubts about the eligibility of a longer sentence, you can first remove all the modifiers in the long sentence, and keep only the main part of the sentence (subject, predicate verb and object) to check whether the sentence is eligible.
If there is no problem with the subject-verb and verb-object combinations in the main part of the sentence, then check whether the branches (determiners, gerunds, and complements) are compatible with the main part of the sentence. If the main body and the branches and leaves are suitable for each other, then check the branches and leaves themselves for problems.
For example, tighten sentence (3) to ? The main point is that it's not about the words. is? The two-pronged approach? , it can be found that this sentence subject and predicate with the wrong, in fact, only? (The only way to stop the smell of sweat? (the root of the problem)? The only way to stop the smell of sweat is to do it both ways. is the correct match. Another example is the tightening of sentence (4) to ? This is (also)? The reason? , it can be realized that this sentence is missing the predicate verb, should be in the ? also? should be followed by? Yes? ,? This is? Reason? to make sense. Another example is to tighten sentence (7) to ? Building? building? The structure of the verb and object is fine, but then you examine the clauses as branches and realize that the multiple clauses in ? better? and ? good building? are semantically repetitive and not a proper expression.
Using? Analogies and? Judgement of the sentence is sometimes not independent of each other, but to be used in combination. For example, sentence (8) first tightened to? Communication? The communication will be? Diverse, convenient and *** enjoy? and the subject-verb structure is considered to be in order, but a further examination of the branches reveals that? More ****enjoyable? but you can't say it. In addition, we can make analogies by imitating similar phrases, such as "more *** enjoy, very *** enjoy", "very *** enjoy", "very *** enjoy". enjoy more, enjoy very much, enjoy most? are also unspeakable, so it is concluded that? More **** enjoy? is ungrammatical.
Third, explore: analysis of sick sentences, explore the cause of disease
know that, but also to know why, see the sentence is sick is not enough, but also should be this cause of the disease of the cause of these words is what. Can you summarize and summarize the above convenient types of etiology?
Clear: (a) improper collocation
is that there is no such collocation between the components and the components.
1, the subject-verb collocation improper
such as: (3) the root of the elimination of the smell of sweat is a two-pronged approach.
2, verb-object collocation improper
such as: (2)? Sleeping treasure natural pillow? Let you improve the cervical spondylosis in sleep.
(5) Besunyen weight loss tea with a unique concept of weight loss, in the major cities have caused a fire.
In (5)? caused by the fire? should be changed to? Fire up?
3, the qualifier and the center of the word with improper
such as: (1) the hosting style of the combination of Chinese and Western, strong ratings charm.
4, the gerund and the center of the improper
such as: (8) the future of communication will be more diverse, convenient and *** enjoy.
? More varied, more convenient? Yes, but ? More ****ed up? can't be said.
5, inappropriate collocation of prepositional objects
such as: the document fax machine to the distant recipient to send the text of the speed is really amazing.
Modify:? The speed with which the fax machine sends a document to a distant recipient is astonishing. to? to?
(B) component mutilation or redundancy
1, component mutilation
(1) predicate mutilation
Example: This is an important reason why the Junlai restaurant attracted the attention of the industry so soon after its opening.
Modify: ?
Modify.
Modify: add ? is?
(2) object center word mutilation
Example: anti-ultraviolet, anti-friction, waterproof, anti-static, to meet the requirements of indoor and outdoor environments.
Modify:? Antistatic? After the addition of? The role of?
(3) subject mutilation
Example: From ancient times to the present, the red plum has overwhelmed how many poets, plum poetry has become a traditional subject of poetry in China, symbolizing the strong optimism of the Chinese people, indomitable character.
Modify:? Symbolize? Before add the subject? red plum?
(4) prepositional defects
Example: These magnificent and peculiar poems, expressed in the fire of the sky, the sky into the sea, cosmic voyage, the vision of the moon, with the development of science, have become a reality.
Modify:? The revealed? After the addition of? The first part of the sentence is "The first part of the sentence is the first part of the sentence.
Modification: add "to" after "expressed".
2. Compositional redundancy
(1) The subject is cumbersome
Example: For the benefit of the people, the revolutionary forefathers gave up their precious lives.
Modify:? Revolutionary forefathers? and? They? and "they" are duplicated. They? Delete.
(2) The predicate is cumbersome
Example: Some people seldom travel by car or boat, so they are particularly sensitive to stimuli, which can easily lead to motion sickness and seasickness.
Modify: ? The result is that the person who is sick is not as sensitive to the stimulus as the one who is sick. and? and "seasickness". Repeatedly, the word "motion sickness" is used in the same way as the word "dizziness" in the same sentence. and "halo" are duplicated, and "halo" is not a part of "halo". Delete.
&n bsp; (3) The gerund is cumbersome
Example: Before the time for the meeting arrived, delegates from all over the world entered the room one after another.
Modify:?
Modify. or?
Edit:? Delete.
(C) Inappropriate order
? Inappropriate word order? is the improper placement of words in a sentence.
1. Multiple determiners of nouns are not in the proper order
e.g.:Many residents of the neighborhood came to see the show.
Modify:Many residents of the neighborhood came to see the show.
2. The verb is not in the right order
e.g. The seminar was jointly organized by Peking University and Shandong University at the end of May this year.
Modify: This seminar was jointly organized by Peking University and Shandong University at the end of May this year.
3. Inappropriate placement of false words
Such as: if we can not seek truth from facts, the cause will be lost.
Modify: If we fail to be practical, the cause will be lost.
The rule is that when two clauses of a compound sentence have the same subject, the related words should follow the subject; when the subjects of the clauses before and after are different, the related words should precede the subject.
4, contrary to the time, space or logical order of arrangement and development
such as: because the meeting was held in a timely manner, to promote the work, seize the key, solve the problem.
Modification: As the meeting was held in a timely manner, seized the key, solved the problem and promoted the work.
(D) structural confusion
1, mixed format
That is, the two formats are mixed together to form a sentence, resulting in a sentence semantics is not clear.
Such as: the heavier and busier the work, the more you have to insist on learning and updating knowledge.
Revise: mixed?
Modify: mixed? The more you do it, the more you're going to be able to do it. It should be changed to: the work is heavy and busy, but also insist on learning and updating knowledge.
Another example: the company's turnover in the first half of the year compared with the same period last year, an increase of 25%.
Modification: mixed?
The revision: mixed? Increased formatting and? With? Compared with? Should read: the company's turnover in the first half of the year compared with the same period last year increased by 25%.
2, the middle of the road
That is, before and after the two sentences should be used in the same sentence and miscellaneous use of a different sentence.
Such as: when it comes to words, he talks better than anyone else, but does worse than anyone else.
Modify: before saying? The first is to say that he is not a good speaker. do? It can be changed to: when it comes to words, he speaks more beautifully than anyone else, but when it comes to doing, he does worse than anyone else.
Another example: after the primitive man created the "Song of Evil Xu" in the labor, the oldest song that has been handed down is the "Song of Play".
Modification: After the primitive man created the "Song of Evil Xu" in his labor, he created many other songs, among which the "Song of Playing" is the oldest song that has been handed down to the present.
3. Mixed Composition
Example: The school gave this task to our class, and we all had the indescribable feeling of honor.
Modify: to read? We all have an honorable feeling? Or? The feeling of honor in everyone's heart is indescribable?
4, the structure of the cumbersome
Example: The examination room is located in the ancient hall held.
Modify: ? was ? held? is a redundancy, delete it.
(5) illogical
It means that the meaning of the sentence does not make sense.
1. Inappropriate concepts
(1) Wrong concepts
For example, writers carry out revolutionary struggle through their own creations, and the novels, poems, essays and cartoons they write and draw become the weapons of mass struggle.
Modify:?
Modification: "Writers? The concept of "writer" does not include poets or cartoonists. should be changed to "artist". Artist?
(2) Stealing the concept
such as: people in old age, gray hair thinning, wrinkles all over the face. These manifestations are the physical weakness of the old age brought about by the old age.
Modify: the first? The first is "old age". refers to old age, the second? The second one is "old age". but refers to the elderly.
(3) Mixed concepts
For example, the ship not only sailed faster than other ships of the same kind, but also was equipped with cannons and all kinds of weapons.
Revise: ? Cannon? is subordinate to? Weapons? should be changed to ? and equipped with a variety of weapons such as cannons?
2, judgment is unreasonable
(1) self-contradictory
such as: he was one of the many who were spared.
Revise:? The victim of the attack was a man who died in the attack. and? Spared? is a contradiction in terms.
(2) Incorrespondence
e.g. The rapid growth rate is directly proportional to the length of the daily feeding period.
Revision: This rapid growth rate is related to the length of the daily feeding time.
(3) Negative inappropriate
Such as: we should study the traffic laws and regulations carefully to prevent traffic accidents from happening again.
Modify: put ? no longer? to read?
Modify: replace "no longer" with "again".
(4) Inverted subject and object
For example, at that time, the newspaper had very little contact with me.
Revise: At that time, I had very little contact with newspapers.
3. Illogical reasoning
The so-called reasoning is to deduce the conclusion from the known premises. If the premises and the conclusion are not necessarily linked, it is illogical reasoning.
Such as: the collection of material is not rich, it can not be compared and identified, it can not find typical examples, and even cause the number is not allowed, the name does not match.
Modification:? The material is not rich? With? The number is not allowed, the name does not match? There is no necessary connection, because the number is accurate, whether the name is consistent, is the problem of material reliability, not the problem of less material.
Senior Sentence Modification Lesson Plan Practice Questions:
1. The one without speech defects is ( ) (08Jiangsu Volume)
A. The development of any civilization is a process of collision, fusion and exchange with other civilizations, and a completely closed environment can't bring about the progress of civilization, but only leads to its decline.
B. The implementation of paid use of plastic bags is mainly to cultivate people to minimize the use of plastic bags through economic means, which will undoubtedly have a positive effect on reducing white pollution and purifying the environment.
c. The Olympic torch summiting Mount Everest must overcome the unfavorable special climatic conditions such as low temperature, low pressure and high winds, and fully consider the various difficulties that may be encountered by mountaineers when they reach the summit.
D. The Beijing-Shanghai high-speed railroad, which will be completed in 2013, will not only optimize the structure of rail transport in the eastern region, but also help rail transport and other modes of transport to form complementary advantages.
2. In the following sentences, the one that has no speech defects is ( )(07Jiangsu Volume)
A. It is only through the inheritance, enhancement, and sublimation of the excellent artistic traditions of the Chinese nation that new forms of art and aesthetics have been born and developed by artists from one generation to the next.
B. According to the person in charge of the State Intellectual Property Office, the continuous and rapid growth of domestic patent applications shows that the public's awareness of patents and the level of research and development in China are constantly improving.
C. The Sutong Bridge was built with the original intention of bringing the north and south of Jiangsu closer together and further promoting the implementation of Jiangsu Province's development strategy along the river, which is of great significance.
D. Global greenhouse gas emissions reductions, regardless of the magnitude, offer the possibility of slowing down the constant rise in the Earth's temperature and the continued rise in sea level.
3. The one of the following sentences that has no speech defects is ( )(05江苏卷)
A. People's sadness lies in the fact that they don't know how to cherish when they should, and they lose the chance to cherish when they do.
B. This time out competition, I? m sure to persuade your teacher to go with you so that you won't be too nervous and can play better.
C.? The new curriculum standard? requires that in teaching, the teacher's role should be changed from the traditional ? full of water? to participants and facilitators of student learning.
D. Many people take advantage of the long vacation travel, how to avoid legal rights and interests are not infringed upon, the relevant departments have made relevant tips.
4. In the following sentences, the one without speech defects is ( )(04Jiangsu Volume)
A. Some people think that scientists bury their heads in scientific research all day long and do not ask about family affairs, which is a bit unsympathetic, however, the fact is the best illustration of this prejudice.
B. All kinds of confiscated money from government law enforcement agencies must be surrendered in accordance with the law and cannot be retained for their own use, and their source of funding can only come from the state's financial allocations.
C. At dusk, standing at the top of the hill, looking far away, only to see the water and the sky at a flashing lights, where is the famous tourist attraction? The ancient water town of Dongpingzhuang.
D. Many elementary schools now allow students to drink water, go to the bathroom, and even interrupt the teacher's lecture, which have traditionally been viewed as a violation of discipline, have been corrected.