Today the blazing sun, the hot sun shines on the earth, but also our school's annual Parent-Child Games, everyone is very happy, because they can work with their own mother and father to come to compete for their respective collective glory.
To the sports center where we are going to the games, students in the teacher's lead into the venue in an orderly manner, our classmates are all in high spirits, high spirits in the heart only one wish: I hope that the games can take the first place in the class. The opening ceremony of the sports meeting began, the principal spoke on the radio and said: "Students, teachers, parents, hello, this year's annual Parent-Child Sports Meeting is now beginning! The whole school dressed in neat uniforms, line up neatly, in the sports ground walking up the square line, shouting their own class slogan, our class slogan shouted a particularly majestic: "1234, 1234! Able to write and martial arts, the first first! It's not me!" After the end of the square team ceremony, the intense Games began!
Today's sports meeting program can be rich, there are parents jumping long rope, parents and children over the obstacle relay race, and long-distance running 60 meters to 800 meters running ......
The most wonderful project is the parents and children over the obstacles relay race, Mr. Tang's gun sounded the race, only to see our class Wei Liangyu students holding the baton, across the obstacles, the baton to the next parent, our class cheerleaders are also cheering on the sidelines, the shouts of the students, the race is in the tense, and suddenly, one of the parents because of running too fast to lose their center of gravity and fell to the ground. Suddenly, a parent lost his center of gravity as he ran too fast and fell to the ground. Suddenly, one of the parents lost his center of gravity and fell to the ground because he was running too fast. The students on the sidelines froze, but the parent was not discouraged, endured the pain and continued to insist on the race, come on! Go for it! The students shouted even louder and the match was over! Our classmates and parents through their efforts to achieve a good second place.
Sweat and smiles flowed on their faces, honor drive in everyone's heart, although this Games everyone is very tired, but everyone is very happy.
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Wen II
Description of the scene of the composition
Scene composition description
In the composition of the students, often see such a situation: to remember a game, only write a few athletes how to race, and the whole game on the field and off the field of the audience's performance does not reflect the situation. Remember a hiking activity, only write yourself and one or two students how to climb the mountain, and the whole class collective mountaineering atmosphere is rarely described. Such a composition seems to be dry, monotonous, and lacks the flavor of life. The reason for this problem is due to the fact that you can't describe the scene. Then, how to describe the scene?
One, there should be a generalization on the surface, and there should be a bit on the description.
In the colorful life of elementary school, we tend to participate in many activities: soccer games, picnics, science and technology shows, homework exhibitions and so on. These activities are often prepared, purposeful, and attended by many people. In the essay, in order to recount the process of all the activities, it is impossible to describe all the participants one by one, which requires a "face" on the generalization. The "face" refers to the overall situation of the participants; generalization, that is, the use of simple language, outlining the performance of the participants, the environmental atmosphere and so on. But in a composition, only "face" on the generalization is not enough, there must be "point" on the detailed writing. "Point" is to participate in the activities of typical people and typical things; detailed writing, that is, to write the focus of the activities of the project, as well as to participate in the activities of what people think, do what, say what. Description of the scene only "face" and "point" skillfully combined to write, in order to faithfully reproduce the whole process of the activity. Please see the following fragment essay:
Kite Flying
The kite competition began, and the colorful kites flew up to the blue sky first. There were so many different kinds of kites, including the "Chinese coat", "one-legged swallow", "dragonfly", "goldfish", "butterfly", "goldfish", "dragonfly", and "goldfish", "Butterfly", "Monkey King" ...... they show their skills in the air, so that people are dazzled. You see that dancing "red butterfly" more colorful, it seems to be proudly said: "I am the king of butterflies, my beauty who can not compare." You see that the monkey king "Monkey King" is more than divine, hand holding a golden rod, two eyes flashing golden light, rocking up. Among them, Wang Weimin tie: "yellow coat" put the highest. He was calm and collected, slowly backing up and pulling back vigorously. The kite seemed to understand the owner's mood to participate in the competition, and flew more and more vigorously.
This fragmentary composition depicts the lively scene of a kite-flying competition. The author's observation is broad, observing many kites as well as the kite flyers. First, she describes the colorful and various kites in general so that readers can get a general impression, and then she describes the "Red Butterfly" and the "Monkey King" in particular. Finally, it focuses on the "yellow coat", which not only writes about the kites, but also writes about the people who fly the kites. Writing about kites and people emphasizes dynamic description. This makes the reader immersed in the scene, as if to see the scene of kite flying, but also the whole scene to hold up, strong highlights the word "competition".
To write a good scene, the observation of the field of vision to be comprehensive, not only to see a clear look at the overall situation of an activity, but also to be good at capturing the typical people and things, and then one by one to describe, in order to write the scene really, write vivid.
Second, there should be internal and external echoes, but also emotional expression.
Describing a scene, both to write the mood of the people participating in the activities, the expression, but also to write the reflection of the onlookers, inside and outside the scene intertwined in the writing, in order to better accentuate the environmental atmosphere. In the process of description, but also aptly write the character's feelings, experience. So there is a generalization on the surface, a bit on the details, there are inside and outside the echo, there are feelings expressed, you can describe a scene alive and well.
Pickleball
One afternoon, under the grape arbor on the campus, there was a crowd of students watching a pickleball game. There were two partners standing beside each of them: one was ready to count and the other was ready to time. At that moment, the referee, Mr. Zhang, raised the red flag and shouted, "Start!" Just see the participating students reach out and quickly up and down to shoot the ball, only to hear the ball on the ground to make a "pop" sound. "Come on! Go for it!" The onlookers were cheering.
The game was tense. Some racket high, some racket low, some inadvertently racket to the soles of other people's feet, caused a burst of laughter of the little friends. Xiaofang squatted and racketed the ball short. "One, two, three, four ......" As the counter reported loudly, she was fully concentrated, her eyes staring at the ball bouncing up and down, beads of sweat oozing from her head. Suddenly, her feet slipped and she sat down on the ground, and the ball bounced all the way up. Just as her classmates were sweating for her, she violently stood up again and continued to shoot the ball with her hand. "71,72,73 ......" The counting officer's report was getting louder and louder, and the onlookers let out cheers and laughter from time to time. At that moment the referee shouted, "Stop!" A wonderful match was over.
The referee, Mr. Zhang, announced, "Xiaofang tapped more times and won the first place!" The little friends ran to her and congratulated her.
Reading this piece of composition, we seem to appear in front of our eyes the tense, hilarious scene of shooting a pickleball. This fragment of the composition so can produce touching effect, is because the author not only describes the participating students "how to compare", but also aptly write out the onlookers "how to see". The first thing I'd like to say is that I'm not sure if I'm going to be able to do this, but I'm sure that I'm going to be able to do it, and I'm sure that I'm going to be able to do it.
Inside and outside the field echoed the writing, focusing on the finishing touch. In the beginning of the game, wrote "onlookers cheering", just this one, set off the tension of the game. When some of the youngsters tapped the ball at someone else's feet, "it caused a burst of laughter among the little ones." The cleverly echoed writing on and off the court makes us see how enthusiastic and tense the whole match was. When Xiao Fang, a student participating in the competition, accidentally sits on the ground, "the classmates sweated for her again." Changes in the field, causing changes in the feelings of onlookers, the two are always closely linked, so how good to write this wow!
Description of the scene, generally speaking, to write in detail the situation in the field, slightly outside the field of reflection, outside the field of reflection just to play a "dragon eye" role, this point, "eye" will shine, the whole clip will also send out eye-catching light. Write a good scene should also pay attention to:
1. Observation of a wide range of horizons to describe a scene, first of all, to observe carefully. In an active scene, there are many things are happening at the same time, so we should observe comprehensively and carefully. Both to observe the whole, to see the performance of the participants, environmental atmosphere, but also to see the typical people and things. This observation of a wide range of horizons, in order to obtain more composition materials.
2. Describe the typical to be detailed scene description, focusing on writing a good typical person, a typical thing, a typical fruit, a typical thing. Seize the typical to describe in detail, carefully portrayed, can not be used in one or two sentences with the past. Meticulous description, that is, to portray in detail the character's demeanor, movement, language and psychological activities. Only by describing the typical in detail can we highlight the focus of the scene and leave a deep impression.
3. Narrative organization should be clear description of a scene, pay attention to consider what to say first, after what to say, and then say what, sentence to sentence, layer to layer to be clear. According to the needs of the article, you can first general, and then said; can also be divided first, and then said in general. No matter how the material is arranged, it should be clearly organized.
[Example]
Enjoyable recess
The clear bell rang, and students flocked out of the classroom like birds to the playground to participate in their favorite recess activities. Playing table tennis is the students' favorite activity. Look, the table is surrounded by students. A small ping-pong ball like a bullet, straight down on the case of Xiao Gang, then, only see Xiao Gang agilely back a few steps, with the paddle gently cut, the small ping-pong ball rotated and flew to the other side of the case. "Good shot," a burst of applause erupted from the small audience.
"Throwing sandbags" is a game that students love to do. On the playground this group, that group, play more energetic! You see, the two sides of the bag throwing students work closely together, to the middle of the students to launch a fierce attack. Who is that? He's so agile in dodging the sandbags! Oh, it's Mei. She's dodging left and right, jumping around. Suddenly, the sandbag flew from behind, and she turned around and grabbed it with a "moon fishing". "Victory! Victory!" The students yelled happily, jumping and jumping, their hearts were so happy!
"Thunder from the sky!" The volleyball player shouted as he served the ball fiercely, and a volleyball battle began in the middle of the classroom!
Our classroom activities are so colorful!
[Commentary] The short article***writes about three kinds of activities, both detailed and abbreviated. But there are two points that should be noted:
(1) In addition to these three activities, there must be other activities, which should be summarized in the front of the article.
(2) What direction the three activities take place in the playground should be explained.
Tug-of-war
"Go, go, go!" The playground resounded with the sound of cheering, this is the four (1) class and four (2) class students are in the tug-of-war game of tension.
The first two rounds of the two sides into a one to one draw, the third round just started, four (1) class preemptive, only to see them one by one like a little tiger to make all the strength, hands clutching the big rope, body backward leaning, legs stomped hard on the ground. The students of class 4(2) were not on guard, and the big rope was yanked over inch by inch. "Go class four (2)! Go Class Four (2)!" A chorus of shouts erupted from the field. At once, I don't know where a force came from, some of the students of Class 4(2) gritted their teeth, some tightened their faces, some held their breaths, and all of them stared with round eyes and used all their strength. Only to see that the big rope little by little to the four (2) class direction to move. Suddenly, the rope did not move, the game into a stalemate, at this time, the playground sounded cheering again. The students who were cheering waved the little red flag and shouted rhythmically: "Four (2)! One two! Four (2)! One-two!" After the two sides held each other for about seven or eight seconds, the students of class four (2) united their hearts to help each other, bursting out with a huge force, pulling the big rope violently, and the red flag crossed the river boundary at once." The second class won! Class 2 won!" The students sang, jumped, heart very happy.
[Commentary] This article focuses on the exciting scene of the third game, the performance of the two sides of the game, but also the audience outside the field. The four (1) class pulled "the big rope inch by inch", then, "the big rope little by little to the four (2) class direction", and finally "the rope did not move, the game into a stalemate! "The whole process is clearly explained. In this way the whole scene of the tug-of-war was written.
The scene of the two classes pulling hard on the rope during the tug-of-war is described in different ways. Four (1) class "hands gripping the rope, leaning back, legs stomping hard", four (2) class "some gritted their teeth, some tense face, some hold their breath, each staring round eyes". This way the words are not repeated.
Scene description in the composition
Scene in the composition is generally inseparable from the description of the physical object, first by the description of the environment, and then to the physical object to play association. Scene composition is an important part of the composition as a whole, in order to comprehensively improve the writing level of students, students must master its writing skills. So how can you write a good scene in the essay? Here I will talk about my own point of view:
1. More observation. Do a life of the people, observe more around and around the things, as far as the eye can see is a scene. The scene is as big as the whole life sketch, the whole world changes; small as a grain of rice, a pen, a close-up of an ant, or even smaller and bigger. And we can only choose one or two scenes as the focus of description. There are so many students do not know what to choose to write, or choose but do not know how to express. Only so the problem, that is because he did not pay attention, did not use a sensitive mind, in the delineation of the scene interface to pay attention to stop. If you treat the things around you, "out of sight, out of mind", careless, walk around, then you will never write a good essay.
2. Truthfulness. The first thing you need to do is to draw an interface and hold the attitude of truthfulness to describe the scene, just like a painting, factual and realistic to "draw" out the physical object. This is the basis for beginning writing and for learning to be a human being. For example, "the whole family eating together" is a scene that the artist has to "copy" on paper with lines and colors. And we write an essay, it is necessary to use words to describe it, how to let others see the real image of it, that the only way, only with vivid words, appropriate words and phrases to put it "real" to describe it. For example: the whole family at dinner time to show the expression: grandpa's kindly, grandma's kindly, dad's funny, mom's kindly, "my" naughty, and that under the dinner table, wide-eyed waiting for the chicken bones of the little poodle and so on.
3. Play imagination. We've chosen a scene, and we've "sketched" its basic appearance on paper. The next step is how to make it interesting? Painters can mobilize the change of color, to make the "sketch" vivid, and we write, we have to open the brain, play association, even if it is super-imaginative, as long as it is reasonable to make their own writing in the eyes of others into a tasty delicacy, it is worth the hard work. For example, in the scene of the family dinner, we can use our imagination through the expressions of the whole family. Grandparents, mom, dad, me and the greedy dog, obviously this is a happy family! Then we take it a step further and imagine what the whole family said at dinner. Did someone tell a meaningful story, or did they get some praise? Of course, I said, "look at the scene to write essays", in real life "scene", but three-dimensional, living, changing movement in kind, which requires us to use a sensitive mind, good understanding of the heart, always to capture, experience, in order to understand the scene to write a good! The first time I saw this, it was a very good idea for me to go back to my old school!
Scene description in the composition
Scene description:
It is the description of large-scale social activities attended by many people or scenes of life, fighting, labor, entertainment, reflecting the face of the society and the various aspects of life, and reflecting the macroscopic natural phenomena.
Scene description, that is, the author to take a meaningful life scene or natural landscape, fully mobilize the various senses to observe and experience from multiple angles and directions, to do with the "eye" to see, with the "ear" to hear, with the "heart" to feel, with the "eye" to see, with the "ear" to hear, with the "heart" to feel. "Heart" feeling, so that the observed scene into the brain into the heart, and then with simple language, the use of metaphor, hyperbole, anthropomorphism and other rhetorical devices, to see, hear, think of writing down in accordance with a certain order, to give the reader a real sense of being there. When writing, we should do a combination of point and face, focus, clear organization, can write their own inner feelings, so that the characteristics of the scene is more prominent, the image is more distinct, the emotion is more touching.
Example:The National Day is coming, the street is a bustling scene. People come to the city center square in groups of three to five, joyful, in the night of fireworks and candles, the night of the festival of lights, jumping ah, singing ah, children with a lantern, shuttle in the gorgeous buildings, their delicate face bloomed a flower, some playing eagle catching chickens, some playing handkerchiefs, some playing hide and seek ... ... ...What an exciting and nostalgic time!
Example:To celebrate the arrival of the New Year, our school held a unique tug-of-war. Just as the referee blew a whistle, the match began in full swing. The first match was a preliminary match, our class against class 5(3). The students were very nervous, always worrying about losing again, and the cheerleaders had long been shouting slogans: "Fifth (2) class, go for it!" The cheerleaders had already started chanting, "Go for it, class 5(2)!" The sound of cheering rose and fell like the waves of the sea. Our class participants all had high spirits, and with a burst of energy, we pulled Class 5(3) over the center line at once. "YH!" our class cheered for the victory in this preliminaries.
It was time to move on to the second final, our class versus class five (1). I saw that the students were sweating, gritting their teeth, holding their breath, ready to pull down the other side; the students watching the game were full of anticipation, holding their breath, pinching a sweat, and hated not being able to help them. At this time the whistle sounded, "Go!" "Go!" Cheering sound constantly, the original quiet field boiled up again. The students in our class were like drunks, moving from left to right, from east to west, and it seemed that they could not hold on any longer. Cheerleaders cheering sound louder and louder, the players heard the voice of the shouts of support, as if injected with stimulants, all of a sudden came to energy, they stomped their feet, a force, the five (1) class pulled out of the center line.
Woohoo! A rare first place! Our class got first place for the first time! The whole class was so happy that they were going crazy! Some people dancing, some people shouted "YH! So, busy while a windy and sunny weather, revisit the childhood charming creek. A few old willow, graceful posture, the wind whipped willow branches such as the old man's beard. The river is slightly knitted, rubbing a curve of golden light. Sparkling waves, reflecting the sparse silhouette of the willow. If it is summer, the river is like a kind old man, put us in the river, gently caress. At night, it will be sound asleep in general, so that everything feels warm and quiet, pulp sound alas, pull me back from the good memories. In front of this late autumn river, in the valiant autumn wind as a dry and thin old man, deep and solemn. Yellow leaves fall into the water, floating with the waves. The river gently kissed the gentle and sentimental sandbanks, seems to be for it to wipe the trauma. The two sides of the willow is no longer branches and leaves, but the branches and leaves are few ......... everything seems to be sick, even the dead grass, even the sand dunes, even the surrounding that was once towering unyielding poplar, elm trees. But I clearly saw the strong bones of the river, unyielding personality and high dignity.
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Essay 3
Tinking bell ......Whenever I hear this wonderful dismissal of the class bell , I reflexively think of the ten minutes of joy between classes.
The class is over, the teacher's voice to set up today's homework, full of students only more than ten people listening, the rest of the people have long been accomplishing their own great work. For a time, the classroom hundred, as far as the eye, fifty-six faces, fifty-six flowers ...... one-half of those who asked the teacher to stay which assignments, one-quarter of those who rushed to the WC to talk about the world. The rest were paying attention to a small concert run by the kindly man a.k.a. JJ Lin.
The so-called "there is no tiger in the mountain, the monkey called the king". At this point, the classroom was abuzz like a pot exploding. Alas, it is really a bit of faction, idol small king Ren Junjie show off, but the shortcoming is that there is no equipment, everything seems to be simple. Ren Junjie took a broom as a guitar, a highlighter as a microphone, began to perform, he cleared the reprinted from the hundred percent network, please keep this mark cleared his throat, heralded for his accompaniment of the iron brothers ready. You see the old Han floating around leisurely like a ghost. "In your heart, fly ...... freely." Heh, it's really divine, Old Han is shorter, like a flea in the crowd, he sings more and more vigorously, so self-absorbed that he closes his eyes, like a victorious general walking through the triumphal arch. "Thank you all ......", the narcissism made his voice very loud. He tossed his head and struck a cool pose. His "hardcore fans" were thrilled, cheering and booing as the ten-minute recess came to a climax.
Ding bell ...... class began, the noisy classroom immediately quiet, like the surging tide began to ebb. Students returned to their seats, as the ten minutes between classes so that everyone's nervous thinking has been effectively cushioned, students again concentrate to meet the new classroom.
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