Write what?
1. You can write who you want to be. If you want to become a drop of water, a gust of wind, a cloud and so on.
You can write that you want to be someone. If you want to be a the Monkey King, a teacher, a magic pen, a goddess, etc.
You can write that you want to be an animal or a plant. If you want to be an eagle, a panda, a free fish, a towering tree, etc.
You can write what happened or what you want to do after you became something. For example, treating sick people and bringing them health; Turn into a magical tree and make the world green; Be a good goddess, fill the world with love and peace, and so on.
Write brilliantly
Click 1 to write vividly and concretely what happened or what you want to do after the change.
Although I became a teacher, I can't be too serious. Smile in class and be good friends with students after class. I will catch butterflies, crickets and birds with them.
The second point: cultivate a bold and reasonable imagination and imagine what will happen or what you want to do after you change.
If I change, I want to be a cloud. At night, I want to let the sun shine on me and become a majestic lion for a while; After a while, it turned into a blooming white chrysanthemum.
The third point: when writing about what happened or what you want to do after your change, write your true feelings.
If only I could really change! I will bring happiness and happiness to people all over the world, which is my greatest happiness and happiness!
If I changed.
If I can change, in the hot summer, I will become a sky-blue ice cream and send a little coolness to those hungry children.
If I can change, when I am tired of walking, I will become a bird and take away two clouds in the sky. One is a blanket to rest for a while, the other is an umbrella to cover the sun, and then fly to the destination like an arrow. (★ Imagine novelty: use clouds as blankets and umbrellas, and imagine novelty and fun. )
If I can change, then I will become a big tree and make fresh air for our city.
If someone comes to cut down trees, I will change back to human form, tell him the truth of "cutting down less trees and cutting down more trees" and persuade him to contribute to the creation of a sanitary city in Linyi.
If I can change, I will fly to the disaster site at the first time of Yushu earthquake, dance the Monkey King's golden hoop, uncover rocks, and rescue the victims trapped under the rubble, so that they can get out of danger as soon as possible. I will give holy water to the victims with dust from the Buddha, so that they can cure their disabilities and rebuild their homes in a short time. (★ Appropriate details: describe the process of fantasy disaster relief in detail, and sketch other aspects to be detailed and focused. )
If I can change, I will become a messenger of peace and persuade people all over the world to love our homeland. There will be no more quarrels and smoke. Let's join hands to enjoy the clear water and blue sky!
If only I could really change! Do you think so? (★ rhetorical question: the rhetorical question at the end strengthens the author's feelings, points out the theme of the article, and highlights the author's beautiful heart. )
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author imagined that he could become an ice cream, a bird, a tree, a disaster relief worker and a peace messenger, and expressed his good wishes. Proper selection of materials and rich imagination.
◎ Intention: The article adopts the general structure, and first talks about what I want to do after I become an ice cream, a bird, a tree, a disaster relief worker and a peace messenger. Finally, write your own feelings and point out the theme. Rigorous conception and clear structure.
◎ Language: The language of the article is simple, detailed and the theme is prominent.
If I changed.
If I can change, I want to be a kind goddess and make the world full of love. I want blind people to see this beautiful new world again, see red flowers and green grass, and see scenes they have never seen before; I want to make children happy without friends. I would like to be with them and play with them. I want to make sad people happy, let them forget yesterday's sadness, and let them have confidence and hope for the future. (★ Rhetoric of parallelism: At the beginning, use a set of parallelism sentences to briefly describe a series of "good things" that you want to do after becoming a good goddess to enhance the expressive momentum of the article. )
My neighbor is a person who needs help. His father died, leaving him and his mother alone. His mother is seriously ill, and the burden of family life is on his tender shoulders.
He can only earn money by working, and he can barely survive by going out early and returning late all day. He can't go to school and play like other children, and he is tired all day, but he has to pretend to be happy when he sees his mother. How he hopes that his mother will get better soon, and he can live like his peers ... This child is very poor. If I change, I will become a kind goddess, lend a helping hand to both of them, make his mother get better quickly, and make him as happy as other children ... (★ The article briefly describes a series of "good deeds" after becoming a kind goddess, and describes in detail the process of helping neighbors. There are details and highlights. Wrote a beautiful mind of a child. )
If I were a good goddess, I would make the world warmer and more lovely. I will make all people live a healthy and happy life and make people full of truth, goodness and beauty! (★ Sublimation theme: At the end, the author expressed his kindness that "everyone is full of truth, goodness and beauty", pointed out the center of the article, and the theme was sublimated. )
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author imagines herself as a kind goddess, who has extraordinary ability to help the blind, children and all those around her who have difficulties, and expresses a child's beautiful heart.
Profound conception, material selection close to life.
◎ Intention: The article first lists a series of good deeds that I want to do after becoming a good goddess, then describes in detail the cases of helping my neighbors, and finally expresses my own voice and sublimates the theme. Well-conceived and well-organized.
◎ Language: The language of the article is vivid and beautiful, the narrative is clear and concrete, and the feelings are true and natural. After reading it, I can't help feeling warm.
If I changed.
If I can change, I must become a strong and selfless tree. (★ Cut to the chase: The article starts with the topic and leads to the following. )
Now human beings are destroying the environment, and trees, flowers and grass are decreasing. Garbage can be seen everywhere and unpleasant smells can be smelled. Not only that, tornadoes and sandstorms have also become frequent visitors in this city. If I were a magical tree, I would use all kinds of magic to sow seeds in every open space in the world that needs trees with "tree wave". Before long, these seeds will become towering trees, which can resist tornadoes and sandstorms. I will also use the "clean wave" to clean up all the garbage and odors in the world, so that people can live in a green, clean and healthy environment.
If I were a magical tree, I would bear all kinds of fruits in spring, so that everyone could taste the sweet fruits. I will be full of flowers in winter, so that people can see dense clusters and colorful flowers in the days of dead trees and heavy snow.
If I were a magic tree, I would grow leaves with strange fragrance. When people are unhappy, they can forget all their troubles by smelling leaves. When someone wants to do something bad, smelling the leaves will give up the idea of doing something bad. When people are sick, pick a leaf and put it in the palm of your hand, and sincerely pray for an early recovery. (★ Imagination is novel: the author boldly imagines on the basis of reality, hoping to make spring fruitful and winter full of flowers, and treat people with strange leaves, which makes people forget their worries, novel and interesting. )
If I can change, I will become a magical tree and share happiness with others, because the happiness of others is my greatest happiness. Sublimate the theme: the end shows your good wishes, sublimate the theme of the article, and echo the beginning. )
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author expresses the positive theme of sharing happiness with others by describing what he wants to do after becoming a sacred tree. Material selection is typical and appropriate.
◎ Intention: The article starts with a topic, then describes it from three aspects: greening the environment, making the world have fresh fruits in spring and flowers in winter, and relieving people's troubles and diseases with leaves, and finally expresses the good wish to share happiness with others. Clever in conception and well organized.
◎ Language: The language of the article is simple and natural, and the narrative is clear and smooth, giving people a relaxed and happy feeling.
If I changed.
If I can change, I will become a lobster, a crayfish in a pond, and I will never be caught ashore. I want to play hide-and-seek with my friends in the water and be a free crayfish. (★ Beautiful language: The author used his imagination at the beginning to express his desire for freedom in poetic language. )
If I can change, I will become a lobster, a crayfish in the river, and will never be mixed into people's dishes. I will play with little fish sister, peck the children's feet gently, scare them ashore and be a naughty crayfish. (★ Accurate use of words: a word "peck" vividly shows the naughty of "I". )
If I can change, I will become a lobster, a lobster in the lake, and I will never be caught in the net. If a friend is caught in a net, I will cut the net with sharp pliers and let people go home empty-handed and be a smart crayfish.
If I can change, I will become a lobster, a big lobster in the sea, and I will escape from the mouth of a big fish. I want to get into my dear coral sister's arms, watch the big fish swim past stupidly, proudly dance and sing on the stage with coral sister, then travel around with my brothers and sisters, settle down at will and be a carefree lobster. (★ Appropriate details: describe yourself as a carefree lobster in detail, write something else slightly, with appropriate details and prominent points. )
If I can change, I will become a lobster, and I will be the happiest lobster.
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: Based on reality, the author chooses lobster as his description object, which is close to life and quite innovative.
◎ Idea: The author hopes to be a lobster and a free, naughty, smart, carefree and happy shrimp. The concept is novel and unique, giving people a unique reading experience.
◎ Language: The language of the article is fresh and poetic. Each paragraph begins with "If I were a lobster"
Sentence patterns give people a very neat, catchy and full of charm.
I want to be a teacher.
Teachers are hardworking gardeners and engineers of human souls. I love teachers, so I want to be a teacher.
I stood on the podium, facing the innocent and lively children, opened my books and led them into the ocean of knowledge. I told them this article like a story in vivid language. They listened attentively, and when I talked about happiness, a lovely smile appeared on their little faces. They frowned again when I talked about sadness. (★ Detail description: The description of the students' demeanor shows that after I became a teacher, the class is fascinating. )
"Ding Lingling ..." The bell rang, and I took them to the playground to play the game of the eagle catching the chicken. The "battle" began, and the cunning "eagle" ran around for a while, making the "hen" and "chicken" breathless I shouted to the stragglers, "Be careful, don't fall behind!" When catching them, "hen" led "chicken" to rescue ... the children's laughter echoed on the playground. (★ Scene description: Through the description of language and actions, the scene of "I" playing games with students during the break is vivid and lively. )
When I become a teacher, writers, scientists, athletes and movie stars will all be my students. As a song goes, "If there were no teachers, where would there be ancient civilization?" ? Where is the light of wisdom? Where can there be social progress without teachers? Where is the hope of mankind? Ah! People's teachers are the most glorious and teachers' profession is the noblest. "(★ Quoting rhetoric: The lyrics quoted here praise the profession of teachers and highlight the central idea of the article. )
I really hope that the day when I go to the podium to be a teacher will come soon.
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author thinks small, fantasizes that he is a teacher, imagines that he is based on reality and writes about his most familiar campus life. The selection of materials is close to life, and the description is substantial and concrete.
◎ Intention: The article starts with the topic, then describes the lecture on the podium, leads the students to play games between classes, and expresses their expectations at last. Complete conception and clear thinking.
◎ Language: The language of the article is lively, with detailed details, which vividly shows the image of a good teacher who gives lively lectures, loves students and teaches students in accordance with their aptitude.
I want to be a fairy.
I want to be a fairy. I want to turn all roads in the world into inflatable roads, so that children will not feel pain when wrestling, and cars will drive fast and save fuel on inflatable roads.
I want to be a fairy. I want to make clouds into all kinds of things, such as ice cream, roast duck, beautiful clothes and colorful cities. ...
I want to be a fairy. I want to insert a pair of colorful wings for everyone who wants to fly. People with different personalities have different colors of wings. In this way, it is not so difficult to make friends.
I want to be a fairy, and I will make everyone have a unique special function, such as great power and extraordinary height.
I want to be a fairy. I will take the students and teachers who are taking a history class to the history part to learn and let them experience the scene at that time.
I want to be a fairy. I will transport the necessities of life on the earth to various planets, so that people can live on various planets. (★ parallelism rhetoric: parallelism paragraphs make the article look neat, read smoothly and have momentum. )
If I am a perfect, kind and lovely little fairy, then the world will become a paradise!
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: material selection is eclectic. The young author's imagination involves both naive fairy tales and sci-fi contents such as space planets, which makes the article colorful and fascinating.
◎ Ideas: The topic is very attractive. "I want to be a fairy", which was once the fantasy of many girls, can be used to arouse the voices of countless girls.
◎ Language: The language of the article is beautiful, and it is really touching to express my desire to be a fairy in poetic language.