We can search for topics from the point of view of characters: parents, grandparents, grandparents, teachers and classmates ......
Before the assignment, we should Pay attention to the reports around us or in the media and collect examples of people caring for each other. For example, strangers who do not know each other help you to see a doctor when you are injured on a bicycle; friends who have not met before become your mentors and friends in learning and life by letters, e-mails, greeting cards, etc.; and moncler jackets for decades clean the yard's public **** hygiene ......
Fourth, the teacher told you a few key points to be grasped in this exercise.
1. Write about the most impressive thing in the interaction between the two people.
2. Details of the caring life between the characters.
3. The caring life details between the characters, the mutual dialog description.
4. The description of one's own mental activities.
5. To pay attention to a complete narrative of an event, the time, place, cause, passage and results of the event to write clearly and specifically.
6. Write your true feelings.
V. The teacher teaches you how to choose materials.
(l) First of all, the choice of material must be centered. We want to write "a thing that reflects that people care about each other", we should choose materials that can strongly illustrate, highlight and accentuate the center of the article "mutual care".
(2) Secondly, the material chosen should be typical. That is to say, the material chosen should be the most characteristic, the most representative, the most powerful expression of the characteristics of the characters, the most concentrated expression of the article's center of mutual care. A great writer once said, using the most representative typical examples, to illustrate the basic characteristics of the little ones, to give people the impression is going to be clear and understandable, but also will stand out.
(3) Selection of materials should also be true. This article should be used as an important criterion for choosing materials for writing essays. Learning to write a narrative essay should be written "real people", which is conducive to the level of composition to improve the right way. On the contrary, "avoid" the real people do not write, to "make up" to "make", for the composition level is very harmful.
Sixth, the teacher told you "some ways to write this exercise".
1. Through the event portrayal of characters, so as to express the true feelings. Such as the "poor" article, which is the famous Russian writer Lev? Tolstoy wrote a short story. The text recounts a cold windy night, Sanna and the fisherman took the initiative to adopt the late neighbor Simon's two orphans, a true reflection of the tragic life of the fishermen under the Tsarist regime, and praised Sanna and the fisherman would rather suffer than to help the good quality of others. The text is distinctive in writing and portrays vivid characters through the description of the environment and characters' psychology and dialogues. The environmental description strongly emphasizes the main character's quality of hard work and kindness.
2. Pay attention to the portrayal of the character's language, demeanor, action and psychological activities.
For example, in the article "The Poor", the description of Sanna's psychological activities truly shows Sanna's inner world, and portrays the image of a poor working woman who is full of love and willing to help others. The conversation between the fisherman and Sanna has a distinctive personality and aptly expresses the true feelings of the characters. The fisherman's words show his straightforward and helpful qualities. Sanna, on the other hand, responds carefully and speaks intermittently, which shows her nervousness and uneasiness and reflects her kind quality of loving her husband and sympathizing with Simon. For example, several descriptions in the text:
①Her heart was beating so hard that she didn't know why she had to do it herself, but felt that she had to do it.
"Doing this" refers to adopting Simon's two orphans and raising them to adulthood. Sana visits Simon and discovers to her surprise that Simon has died after a long illness, leaving behind two young children - one who can't talk yet and another who can just crawl. Confronted with Simon's tragedy, Sanna instinctively carried the two orphans back to her home. The words "I don't know why I did it" and "but I felt I had to do it" seem to be contradictory, but in fact, they reflect Sanna's kindness in sympathizing with the poor and caring for them.
3. The appropriate description of the environment has the effect of pushing the waves. Such as "the poor" article environmental description of the main character of hard work, the quality of goodness is strongly emphasized. The beginning of the article, it specifically describes a cold windy night ...... and her neighbors Simon's family, her husband has died, in this cold night, she also died of a tragic illness in the straw bed. The house was damp and cold, and the two unsupported children slept next to their dead mother. These descriptions are full of the author's feelings and make the reader y feel the tragic fate of the poor. The description of the environment in the text includes both the weather description and the description of the scene between Sanna and Simon. These descriptions of the environment from the side of the good qualities of Sanna and the fisherman.
4. The language is simple and the feelings are real. Such as "the only audience" a narrative of "I" in a music professor sincere selfless help, from no confidence to learn to play the violin, to be able to play for hundreds of thousands of audience in a variety of cultural evenings, praised the old professor love, encourage young people to become a virtue, expresses "I" to the highly respected and respected people. It praises the old professor's virtue of loving and encouraging young people to be talented, and expresses "my" admiration and gratitude to the respected old professor. The language of this article is simple, fresh and very beautiful. For example, the description of the scenery in the forest, "The forest was quiet. The rustling footsteps, sounds like a long and slow little order", beautiful and moving; the description of the old man's language, such as poetry, touched the "I" in the text, but also y touched every reader.
5. Look at the world from a child's point of view. Such as "listening with the heart" a text, the text using the children's perspective to observe things, selecting some ordinary trivia to show the quality of the characters, the language is simple and natural, ordinary contains deep feelings, read real believable, vivid and touching. The text utilizes the technique of "before and after" in many places. For example, in the fourteenth natural paragraph, "Susan? Can you tell me how to spell the word 'repair'?" and the seventh natural paragraph "'repair' how to spell the word"; the fifteenth natural paragraph "She was silent for a moment and said, 'I hope your finger has healed'" with the fifth natural paragraph, "I said to the elf, 'I'm home alone, and I hurt my finger with a hammer ......'"; the last paragraph, "Tommy, I'm going to the other world to sing" and the tenth paragraph, "Do you know, this cute little bird It is going to sing in another world". This writing makes the whole text hierarchical, rigorous structure.
Seven, the teacher for you to outline writing.
Relationships→Specific examples→Ending
This method requires us to explain the relationship between the characters at the beginning of the article, and then recount the specific examples, and finally point out the characteristics of the characters to reveal the theme.
Character relationship: here is the beginning of the article, refers to the relationship between yourself and the character to be written. The first thing you need to do is to make it clear that you have a relationship with the person you are writing about. The who here can be any character.
Specific examples: this is the key paragraph of the essay, to be specific. It refers to the specific narration of one or two things. In the process of narration, pay attention to seize the character's action, language, demeanor, psychological activities and other aspects of the characteristics of the detailed description, to be able to choose the life of the amorous details to describe the example. If you narrate a thing, you should explain clearly the circumstances of the matter, how it started, how it went on, and how it ended up, and you should write it step by step in a specific way. Pay attention to highlight the characteristics of the characters written, with "I" set off the characters written. The examples in the text should be "I" and another character at the same time, is the development of the activities of the two characters. In the development of things to show the development of the character's ideological qualities of the characteristics.
Features: here is the end of the article, you can simply point out a characteristic of the character, can also be used in a lyrical way, through the tone of praise to point out the characteristics of the character.
Eight, excellent work please enjoy.
After school, Xiaojun and Xiaogang were walking on the road. Suddenly, the sky was covered with dark clouds and thunder rolled, and it looked like a heavy rain was coming.
Squadron leader Xiaogang remembered that his class teacher, Ms. Yu, was still grading homework at school, and she didn't have an umbrella with her because it was still sunny when they went to school in the morning. So Xiaogang busily said to Xiaojun, "Let's hurry up the country and take an umbrella to Teacher Yu!" Xiao Jun nodded. Just as the words were finished, a clap of thunder rolled by, followed by pea-sized raindrops snapping down.
Small Jun reached home and found his raincoat and put it on. At that moment, Xiaogang also came out of the house, with an umbrella in his hand, and looked for Xiaojun, and the two of them walked towards the school.
The clouds rolled in, the sky was dim, lightning flashed and thunder roared, and the rain poured down. Xiao Gang and Xiao Jun advanced in the rain. The wind, blew the umbrella in Xiaogang's hand, and the heavy rain wet his clothes. The wind, at times, lifted Xiao Jun's raincoat, and at times sent rainwater into his neck collar, which flowed down his spine. On the road, rainwater flowed horizontally. Xiaogang and Xiaojun, with their heads in the storm and their feet on the muddy path, were traveling with difficulty. They only have one thought: quickly send the umbrella to Mr. Yu's hand ......
They finally ran into the school, and gently pushed open the door of the office. Ah, Ms. Yu was still correcting her homework, she was so concentrated that she didn't seem to notice the rumbling thunder, flashing electricity and heavy rain outside the window. The footsteps of the two of them walking into the office, though very, very light, she sensed it. Teacher Yu turned around, when she saw Xiaogang and Xiaojun, immediately stood up, said: "rain so heavy, you ......" words did not finish, she understood, because she saw his two students drenched, saw Xiaogang's left hand of the umbrella that raised , saw the anxious and concerned gazes of her two students. "Quick, come here!" Teacher Yu was too late to receive the umbrella and hurriedly picked up a dry towel and wiped the rainwater on Xiao Gang and Xiao Jun's heads. Teacher Yu's eyes were red, tears blurred her eyes.
"Teacher, here you go!" Xiaogang handed the umbrella to the teacher. Teacher Yu took the umbrella. Ah, this little umbrella, it's so heavy, so heavy! "Thank you!" Teacher Yu choked, his voice was very low, but Xiao Gang and Xiao Jun sounded so clear and loud. Xiao Gang and Xiao Jun, stood silently in front of the teacher.
"Mr. Yu, goodbye!" Xiaogang pulled Xiaojun, turned around and went out the door. The two small figures disappeared in the heavy rain.
The teacher chased them to the door and looked at the rushing rain ......
Rumbling ......There was thunder in the distance. This thunder rolled through the hearts of Xiaojun and Xiaogang, and rolled through the heart of Mr. Yu ......
Find strengths to talk about experience:
The young author of this article uses the method of beginning with a rain scene, and then specifically recounts a specific instance in the rain, meticulously describes the passage of the two students who gave the teacher an umbrella, and finally ends with a rain scene end, make the article first and last echo, wonderful.
I cut my mom's nails
In a few days, it will be Women's Day. The class teacher, Mr. Zhang, called on everyone to go home and help their mothers to do a meaningful thing. After school, I ran home in a hurry, thinking: What should I do for my mom? Sweep the floor? My mom had already scrubbed the house spotless. How about cooking? Mom was already waiting for me to eat.
As I was eating and pondering, I suddenly saw my mom's hand. Oh, there it is! I mysteriously said to my mom, "I'm going to do something for you today!" "What are you going to do for mommy?" Mom asked. "You'll find out later." I said.
I quickly finished my meal, fetched a basin of warm water, brought soap, and said divinely, "Mommy, I'm going to cut your nails. Come wash your hands first." Mom was surprised and said, "What's wrong today? Has the sun come out of the west? Our little baby is going to help mommy!" After saying that, mom obediently put her hands in the basin. I began to wash it. Once I touched my mom's hands, I felt as if they were old pine bark, strings of lumps and bumps. I held up my mom's hand and asked strangely, "Your hand, why is it like this? Not like my hands are white and smooth." Mom smiled and said, "My silly daughter, mom's hands were the same as yours when she was little. Now that you do more work, your hands will naturally become 'old'." Listening to my mom's words, I understood: "Isn't it my mom who does everything in the house now? In order for me to go to this first-class school in the city, how much pain she has suffered! Mom is a textile worker, the salary is not high, in addition to working eight hours a day, but also often go outside to do cleaning hourly. Mom, you've worked so hard! I must study hard and live up to your expectations of me ...... When the water softened my mom's nails, I carefully cut them. Suddenly, mom's hand trembled. I rushed to see, it turned out to be cut into the flesh. I was embarrassed and said, "Does it hurt, mom?" Mom encouraged me, "I don't hurt. Don't be afraid, take your time." So I plucked up the courage to continue cutting. This time I was more careful, see clearly before I pushed.
In this way, I finally finished cutting my mom's nails. Suddenly, my mom smiled. I suddenly felt like a grown-up.
To find the advantages of talk about experience: this article is written to cut my mother's nails, seems to be a small thing, but it makes "I" y educated. Why? Because mom's hands are hard to witness - "every thing at home" is done by mom; in order to let "me" read on a good school, "but also". In order for "me" to go to a good school, "she often went out to work as a cleaning bellhop". With the determination to live up to his mother's hope, with the love of his mother, the young author carefully cut his mother's nails ...... The article is novel, skillfully constructed, and the language and details of the description are true. Vivid, specific and touching. It can be seen that the small author is not only a person with a heart, but also a good child who understands and is motivated.
A sweater
"Bell ......" a crisp bell rang through the boiling campus. The students immediately returned to the classroom and waited for the teacher to come to class.
Today it happened to be a language test. The wind was blowing outside the house and it was a bit chilly sitting in the classroom. The students are all wearing thick, only I only wear a single coat. Mr. Huang saw, came over and asked me: "Why are you only wearing a single coat?" I smiled and didn't say anything.
The test began, and all the students buried their heads and answered their papers carefully. At this time, I looked up and suddenly realized that Ms. Huang was standing in front of the podium, taking off the one sweater inside that could only keep her warm, and putting on her coat again. She took the sweater and walked to me, kindly said to me: "You can't do it like this, it's too cold to wear one piece of clothing, how can you insist on taking the test? Come on, put this woolen sweater of mine on, it will be more or less warmer, lest you catch a cold." After saying that, she put the sweater on me. I said, "No, I'm not cold. You can't stand it if you put it on me." The teacher, no matter how I pushed back, insisted on draping the woolen sweater over me, and said, "I am the teacher, you are the student, in school, I am your mother." Ah, what kind words. I felt extraordinarily warm as I wore Mr. Huang's woolen sweater, but I also grumbled to myself from time to time. In the morning, why did I get up late? I really hate myself, in a hurry, I forgot to wear a sweater ......
Dismissed the class, in the hallway a cold wind blowing on my face, cool. Mr. Huang is only wearing two singlets, how can he stand it? I rushed to the office, took off the woolen sweater to let her put on, but Ms. Huang a pull me, said seriously: "Quickly put on, go home on the way to the freezing disease how to do?" Said, and give me to put on, I can no longer restrain their feelings, tears blurred my eyes, looking at Mr. Huang motherly smile, I was too excited to speak.
Walking on the way home from school, a gust of cold wind came, but I felt warm as spring. An ordinary sweater, full of how many caresses ah!
To find the advantages of talking about experience: reading this article, feel very touching. The article did not use gorgeous words, but showed the teacher to the students of a piece of true love. The article on the characters of the language, action writing natural, smooth, simple. For example, "Put this woolen sweater of mine on, it can be warmer more or less. Lest you catch a cold." "At school, I am your mother." It specifically shows the teacher's love for the students. The words used in the text are accurate and express the characters' thoughts and feelings better. For example, "Suddenly found Mr. Huang standing in front of the podium, took off a woolen sweater that could only keep me warm inside ......" here "could only", "Mr. Huang Regardless of how I excused himself, he insisted on draping the woolen sweater over me." The "hard" here vividly expresses the teacher's care and love for his students. The end of the article points out the theme, explaining that the sweater is warm, the teacher's love is even warmer.