The title of the composition: Swimming in the Park on the Sea
Key words: 450 words for the fifth grade of Park Primary School
Number of words: 450 words for the composition
This article is suitable for: fifth grade primary school students
Source of the composition:
This essay is a 450-word essay about the fifth grade primary school students. The title is: "Swimming in the Park by the Sea". Welcome Everyone is encouraged to contribute. I have been to many places, but I think Zaihai Fangfang Park in our hometown, Lianyungang, is the most beautiful. In the afternoon, the composition teacher took me, Gu Zimeng and several other classmates to visit Zaifanghai. When we arrived at the sea side, we saw the grassy hillside covered with clusters of wild flowers of different colors. Some flowers are as red as fire, and some are as white as snow. Butterflies and fairies are dancing among the flowers. It is really beautiful. We looked into the distance, and the vast blue sea appeared before our eyes. There are many tourists on the beach, and laughter and laughter can be heard from time to time. We rushed to the sea excitedly, took off our shoes and ran into the water. Gu Zimeng said: "Be careful, it's slippery!
" As she said that, she fell down, and she patted her wet face. The pants mouth said "Oops-Oops!
" but her red face showed excitement and pride. I tied my hair in a ponytail and followed closely, hoping in my heart that I would also have such a happy fall!
I thought, I had such a good time today, I will write this composition well when I go back!
Famous teachers commented: "The sound of laughter comes from time to time" should be the place. "We rushed to the sea excitedly", it should be the ground. "I took a tumble", the stroke should be slippery. "But exuding excitement and pride" is not the right expression. Excitement and pride cannot be described by exhaling. The sentence can be written as: The face is full of excitement and pride. "I had such a good time today" is what I deserve. The scene description part is very good, meticulous and calm, which makes the short article unfold in a calm atmosphere. The middle part should be appropriately relaxed, and the things to be described should be written slowly. Don't be too hasty, which will make the detailed expression unable to be highlighted. (Xuele China Distinguished Teacher: Teacher Ma Bin) 2009-7-19 21:40:00