Dalian Maple Leaf International School Three Years and Two Classes Tian Meng
My hometown is in Japan. The scenery there is beautiful all year round, and it is a beautiful picture.
In spring, the trees draw out new green branches and grow tender green leaves; the grass springs up from the ground like a strong warrior; the little frog wakes up from its daze; and the little squirrel starts its labor work again.
In the summer, the sun showed its majestic face, as if it wanted to eat us up. In such hot weather the squirrels went to their holes to rest, and only at night did animals as bad and clever as wolves come out and move about.
Autumn is a colorful time for animals like squirrels, and it's Labor Day. Some critters lay their eggs in the grass so they don't freeze to death, see! She's so smart!
Winter is even happier! Some children saw the ice and jumped on it right away. The ice was empty, and they fell into the ice hole at once, so they all became soupy, and we laughed so hard that tears came out of our eyes. We got a little cold standing around, so I went to play climbing. The mountain was slippery so I always slipped. Then I slowly got the hang of it and didn't slip. We also found frog eggs. They are slippery in your hand, and there is a little black "bean" in the center, like a million little eyes.
Look! My hometown is beautiful!
Comments: very well written out of the characteristics of hometown scenery, read it can not let go of the volume, the article has a vivid metaphor, there are images of description, there are appropriate adjectives, there are interesting activities, scenarios, intriguing.
Instructor: Liu Yuxiang
Shuangfeng Reservoir
Dalian Maple Leaf International School Liu Xiaohun, Class 3, Year 2
There is a place called Fangzheng next to Harbin. There is a reservoir there called Shuangfeng Reservoir.
One summer vacation, I went there to play, and we stopped the car under the "highway". As soon as we got out of the car, we ran as fast as we could into the forest.
The car was like hell and the place was like heaven. Hell and heaven are not the same, one has fresh air and the other has stifling air. A skit I saw said, "It's the same place, but the difference is so big."
The second aunt picked up her lunch and said, "Where to eat?" We had long since gone to play and didn't even hear it.
Now the trees grew lush and green, their densely layered branches and leaves sealing the grove tightly. Millions of rays of blinding golden light were like sharp swords, one piece dark and one piece bright, and if the view in front of me was seen as a painting, it would surely make it to a national exhibition. I spotted a tree that had a crevice from which sprouted a small grinding mushroom of various sizes. I looked up, some trees without order, straight up into the sky, the tips of the trees shook in the air, as if they were talking, you say a few words, I say a few words, talking and laughing, some of them laughed at the fork in the road; some of them bent over in laughter; some of them laughed with tears coming out of their eyes, and some of them went numb in their mouths.
I saw the most beautiful scenery here - Shuangfeng Reservoir, the river that runs, straight hair ringing next to a small building. See how the murmuring river is like a group of musical groups singing a beautiful song.
Sometimes there are snow-white splashes of water, straight up and down, it is really amazing!
I love Shuangfeng Reservoir, especially the never-ending river and the dense groves.
Comments: You are in a state of passion when you write, so the article you write is too wonderful, the writing is amazing, the line is fluent, the use of appropriate rhetorical methods, the imagination is extremely rich. Read up to make reverie flying, such as in the Fengshan Reservoir, into the feelings of entry.
Beautiful Jinshi Beach
Alec
Today, my sister took me to Jinshi Beach, which is a beautiful place with beautiful scenery.
The trees there are strong, tall and dense, like a soldier practicing marching in unison, shouting, "One, two, one, one, two, one."
The most beautiful thing is the beach, the golden sand, the blue sea, and many small crabs crawling over, crawling over, like a small child playing "eagle catching chickens" it!
Then I saw a slippery little fish swimming around the reef, their eyes round, a little fish has been looking at me, may be like me!
Then we went to buy flowers, and a breeze blew over the flowers and they swayed as if they were blowing us away!
Then we went to the hunting ground, where all the animals were very smart, especially the monkeys, with their big eyes, long tails, sensitive noses, and red butts, very cute!
Then I saw a butterfly and a dragonfly, both of them chirping as if they were talking. Probably saying, "I'm so lucky today! One gave me food as I flew by on the road." The butterfly added, "You are so lucky! I, on the other hand, was unlucky; I had a fight with a friend at home today." The dragonfly said, "It's okay!" Then the butterfly and dragonfly flew away.
At last I went home, it was a happy day!
Comments: The work vividly writes out the beautiful scenery of Jinshi Beach, the author's imagination is very rich, wrote his own unique experience, very children's life atmosphere.
Dalian's beaches
Wang Yang
Since I came to Dalian, I have fallen in love with this beautiful place, especially the sea wei...
On Saturday, I went to the beach with my father. When we got to the beach, I went to buy a swimming ring with my dad and swam in the sea.
After swimming for half an hour, we went up to the beach to pick up sea vegetables, after a while, my father and I were almost picking up a bucket of sea vegetables, my father and I picked up so seriously, all for the sake of drinking the sea vegetable soup made by my mother. After a while, a big wave rushed toward me, this big wave hit my feet, and it felt refreshing.
My dad and I played sandcastle again, my dad went to get shells for the windows, I stacked the sandcastle here, when my dad came back with the shells, I saw that there were all kinds of colors of shells, there were pink, snow-white, and yellow ...... I also brought a five-pointed star, and put it on the top of the sandcastle.
There are many more fun things to do in Dalian!
Review: your work has always been wonderful, can properly express what you see and hear, think and feel, language fluent, is a masterpiece!
Times Square
Ma Siqi
When I was a kid, on New Year's Day, my mom said, "Go to Times Square to see the fireworks."
I asked my mom, "Is it fun there?" Mom said, "You'll see how good it is when you go." I said, "Okay then!"
I went to Times Square with my mom, and when I got there, there was everything there, but I was satisfied and said, "Mom, you lied to me." Because there was nothing there that I liked. After a long time, I think Times Square is a good place, there are a lot of flowers and trees there in the summer, and there are a lot of insects in Times Square, some butterflies gather in the flowers like a lotus that is dancing, there are a lot of people in New Year's Eve, and there are some fountains. What surprised me most was the ice lanterns, white and white, with a light inside, like a Kongming lantern, I saw a dragon moving, with shining and glittering eyes and a red body.
The most interesting thing was a man chaining a small person to a wooden stick, which was nice to see. I think Times Square is a famous square and the best square in my mind.
Comments: The author wrote a realistic view of Times Square and the changes in my emotions, with fluent language and graphic descriptions.
Tai Ping Shan in Hong Kong
Zhao Yueheng
Today I went up to Tai Ping Shan in Hong Kong, the trees there are very lush, there is a lot of grass, Tai Ping Shan is very high, you have to take a cable car, I, my mom, my sister and my second uncle rode the cable car with me, we went up to the cable car, and there were a lot of foreigners on it.
Tai Ping Shan is very steep, and there are buildings on the hill, the buildings are all slanted. We rode the cable car to the Observatory, we looked down from the Observatory, wow! It was full of trees, green, yellow and red, not to mention beautiful.
There is also a telescope on the top, just put a coin into the telescope, I put a coin into the telescope, look, there is a small house.
The most interesting thing is that my mom wants to take a picture, I said, "Mom, you don't take a picture, I'm afraid of your camera lifted, that's not good." Second aunt was scared, she would not dare to take a picture, but mom still have to take a picture, I said, "Mom, don't take a picture, in case it is going to fall, we can't take a picture."
Isn't Hong Kong great!
Comments: the author of Hong Kong's Taiping Shan for a more detailed description, because the author visited the Taiping Shan, so the feelings are very deep, the work flow, if the scenery of the Taiping Shan more detailed description would be better!
School
Huang Zhirui
Our school is a happy and lively place.
In the spring, it's still a bit cold, but in a few weeks it won't be cold at all, and the green trees have sprouted young shoots, as pointy as grass.
Summer, this season is the one I want to come to the most because it's when the insects are the most abundant. When we played at noon, Jia Yi and I they took ants as an experiment, at first, I caught an ant, then I saw a spider's web and threw the ant on it. I saw a spider crawling out of a pine tree, and at once it tied the ant with its web, and because the ant couldn't breathe, it died quickly.
In the fall, there was a good harvest of fruit. There are a lot of fruits that I love to eat, so fall is also a wonderful season.
Winter, too, is my favorite season to build snowmen and have snowball fights, look! How happy those kids are having fun!
This year can be really happy and joyful!
This is my life at school!
The United States
Tian Jincheng
There are so many great places to see in the United States, let me tell you.
I traveled there, and the guide told us that there is a tree that can live up to 70 million years, and it is still alive, and there are some animals that grow on the desert plants alone, and there are a lot of plants, almost as much as a very, very large pasture, which should be 30 kilometers. That's what I found in the Valley of Death. I also found animals that were raised by rich people and lived in villas.
I also went to the Grand Canyon. At that time, I met my sister Wang Xing. We went to the Grand Canyon, ah! I thought it was a big mountain, but it was just a small mountain.
We went to another mountain, I don't know the name. It was very tall, more than three times the size of the school building, and the West Grand Canyon was three to four times the size of the Grand Canyon.
Then we went to the West Grand Canyon, which was too high, and there was a strong wind, and I was too timid to yah next to it, so I took pictures with my dad. The first thing you need to do is to get a good look at the mountain, and then you can see the "glass bridge". Then go to see the "glass bridge". There is also a helicopter to go, I did not go, because it is too expensive, so did not go.
This is the process of my four-day tour.
Comment:The author traveled to the United States and wrote about what he saw and heard. "Traveling ten thousand miles and reading ten thousand books", the writer has gained a lot of insight in traveling, so he can write a beautiful article rich in true feelings.
The Lushun Snake Museum
Gao Jianguo
Today, we are going to the Lushun Snake Museum.
I was so happy that I could not wait to go there, but I had not eaten breakfast yet.
After breakfast, we set off, and in a short while we arrived, we immediately bought tickets, bought tickets and went in.
Just inside, I saw the scenery is very good, there is water and trees, can be beautiful.
The most attractive thing is the lovely baby snakes, baby snakes a have a posture, look at this one, lazily lying there; look at that one, a motionless.
There were the most frightening and exotic animals in the caves. The cave in front of us was a lizard cave with many lizards. I found the two-headed turtle in the lizard cave. This turtle had two heads and looked like a monster.
We went back to the poisonous snake area. A dozen or so snake strips are infected with the city's disease, but the venom is poisonous. Some could even poison a person's eyes.
Finally, I returned to the development zone. Until now, I still tell my classmates about the snake museum I went to.
Review: The work is a real writing of the scene "I" saw in the snake museum, in the writing of the posture of the snake, can be modeled on the text of the writing style, this learning method is very good!
Scenes in Xinghai People's Home
Ye Zhixin
Our Xinghai People's Home is a neighborhood where there are a lot of flowers, grasses, and trees, which look like a lot of happy little elves.
There are maple trees, sycamore trees, and ginkgo trees ......
In the fall, the maple trees are full of little elves, some of which are green and some of which are red. They were joyful and happy, and the maple leaves danced on the branches of the maple tree's mother. Now they are happily, one by one, falling to the ground, jumping for joy. As if saying, "We don't need our mommy now, we are free." Look! How happy they are!
The little elves on the branches of the mother ginkgo tree are also very happy. They were fanning their little fans on the branches of the mother ginkgo tree, as if they were blowing the wind to the mother ginkgo tree! The elves are happy, happy, happy to play on the branches of the ginkgo tree, how free!
How like the maple leaves are the children of the mother sycamore tree. The little girls are singing and dancing on the branches of the mother sycamore tree, like a group of dancers singing and dancing! Singing a nice song!
They must be very happy.
Comments: the habit of writing in anthropomorphic writing to write about the autumn scenery of the people of Xinghai, write their own observations, experiences and feelings, this writing habit is very good!
The hill on the side of our house
Yu Haifei
The hill on the side of our house really looks like a small turquoise velvet ball from afar. On the way to the top of the hill there would occasionally appear a few small black and shiny squirrels, which were about twenty centimeters long, and its tail took up half of its body.
I also saw a very strange tree on the way, which also had a root, but when it reached the top, it was in half.
When I got to the top of the mountain, I looked to the east, and skimmed over a neighborhood that was the endless sea. And I called out to the east.
There are all kinds of trees on the mountain, like willows, like pines, acacia trees ......
The mountain also has a nice name, called "the sea swears by the mountain".
There is also a place to play chess at the bottom of the mountain, where there are Xiangqi, Wuzhiqi, and Weiqi ......
I really like the "Sea Vows Mountain Alliance"!
Comments: The work uses a lot of good words and phrases accumulated in the language class, vividly writes the characteristics of the plants and animals on the hill, and the level of the work has been greatly improved.
My hometown
Wang Yuwen
My hometown is in Jinzhou.
In spring, a jujube tree in our hometown is full of small turquoise leaves, and the willow tree awakens to the call of the spring breeze, and its braid is blown by the wind, and the braid flutters with the wind.
In the summer, my brother and I caught dragonflies outside our door. Once, he and I accidentally bumped into each other while catching dragonflies, but we didn't catch any. In the morning my uncle and I took a bottle and a big cake to the creek to go fishing. My uncle opened the bottle, we put the cake in the bottle, and then threw the bottle into the water, in a short while there were seven or eight small fish in the bottle, my brother and I were very happy, even the small fish smelled the smell have come.
In the fall, the leaves all fell to the ground, my brother and I have collected them.
In winter, we went back to the creek to cut the ice away, then water flowed out of it, and the water level got lower and lower, and after a while the water ran dry, so we plugged it up. When it snowed, we built snowmen and had snowball fights.
This is our hometown.
Comments: The assignment writes about the scenery, people and things in the hometown. The author's language is more fluent, the narrative ability is stronger, and he is better at using words. Writing essays should be good at writing one's own thoughts and feelings, and there is great progress in this aspect.
The Maple Tree on Our Campus
Sixian Guo
Our campus has a wide variety of strange trees, and the most numerous tree is of course the maple tree. I used to wonder why our campus has the most maple trees. Then I suddenly realized that we are the students of Maple Leaf Elementary School, and of course we are countless "maple leaves"!
In the spring, the children of the maple tree become green and have a very special shape, like countless little embers!
Summer, we were happily playing downstairs, and found the maple leaves were looking at us with their little eyes, and saw the little maple leaves changing color and turning red! I used a good word - red hot.
More interesting is in the fall, the students happily play under the maple tree, some jump rope, some hide and seek, some play soccer, some tell stories and jokes ...... but we did not see the maple leaves are quietly flying down from the body of the mother tree ah!
I love maple trees.
Comments: The author chose the material very well, wrote about the maple leaves often seen in their own lives, and wrote their own understanding of the unique meaning of the maple leaves of the maple school maple leaves, the language is fluent, fluent, is a masterpiece!
Winter in my hometown
Lv Guihao
My hometown is a world of ice lanterns in winter. Every winter, my hometown carries out an ice lantern conference.
Once you enter the door, you will slip and fall, and after you slip and fall, you will see all kinds of ice lanterns, the lights are colorful, in the distance to see the colorful, many foreigners are playing and taking pictures. There is a forty-meter-long slide in the Ice Lantern Corridor with a light box inside, isn't it exciting?
On one occasion, I couldn't wait to go up, I had a little shiver when I touched the ice, but slowly I got used to it. I got to a bend in the road that went around and around much like a big disk. I went down and went to the warm house to warm up.
This winter, the World University Winter Games were held in Harbin, my hometown in order to meet guests from all over the world, many new ice and snow stadiums, don't you want to travel to Harbin?
Comments: The assignment writes about the winter in the author's hometown, which he y loves, and writes about the ice lanterns in his hometown, and he is able to seize the characteristics of the scenery to write, and the level of his composition has been greatly improved!
Flowers in the classroom
Ni Yanzi
We have several pots of flowers in the classroom, they are hanging orchids, chiseled flowers, and green roses.
This morning, Ms. Liu fertilized the flowers. Ms. Liu cut a pot of flowers and pressed some flowers in a vase in order to make more flowers.
But the pot of flowers that Mr. Liu cut was probably still crying, right? I bet it used to have a long braid, but now it's just one.
The orchid said proudly, "It's just a haircut or two, why are you so stingy?"
"I'll make people laugh if I don't have a braid."
The director opened the door and said, "Your class is becoming a botanical garden." I'm sure the little flower pot and the cut one laughed, and so did Mr. Liu.
It still smelled good, even without the braid.
The teacher gave the flowers green leaf fertilizer to eat, I said why the leaves are so green? It turns out that it is eating green leaf fertilizer to eat.
We can have freshness with green plants and nature.
Comments: the author's composition level has been greatly improved, the language is vivid, imaginative, and very children's life.
Pu Jia Zhuang
Uyunqiqi
Pu Jia Zhuang is right next to my house, and it is my favorite place.
Every summer vacation, my dad and I went to Fu Jia Zhuang every day. I just walked to the seashore, a huge wave came straight to me, as if a little doll, tired of playing go to the beach to find their mothers. Sometimes the waves get a little grumpy. The last time I got out of the water, a wave knocked me back to the beach. I told the wave that it should behave, and it seemed to get angry, and then another wave came, as if to say, "You haven't paid me for playing on me! I'm doing this for your own good, knocking people who can't swim to the beach." I can't help it, that's probably what it's doing. I swam inward and it seemed to get angry again. "You're still a kid now, it's too dangerous to swim in, get back in!" Then another wave knocked me back to the beach. I had to play in the sand on the beach, it seemed to be off again, I was almost making a mountain of sand when it broke the mountain I had built with a huge wave. I couldn't take it anymore, but as soon as I talked about it, it came with a wave. Every time I fell, I was covered in sand.
Although it does this, it makes my life full of fun.
Review: The work writes about the unique scenery of Dalian Fujiazhuang, using the anthropomorphic writing style, so that the waves and the game "I" dialogue, both the change of mood of the waves, but also write out my happiness, very vivid.
Our Backyard
Liu Mei
One day I went to the backyard, where there were lots of fun things to do, because it was winter and all the insects were hibernating.
When I got to the backyard, I noticed that between two of the trees, there was something sticky and disgusting like a spider web. I thought it was a spider's web at first, but the more I looked at it, the less it looked like a spider's web, and the more it looked like a spider's web, the less it looked like a spider's web, and then I couldn't help but ask my science teacher, who laughed and said, "That's the silk that caterpillars spit out."
"A caterpillar spitting silk?" I was curious because I hadn't seen a caterpillar spit up silk before, and caterpillar silk is a nasty solid, the same shape as a marshmallow.
Then I noticed some white snowflakes floating in the sky. Before long, the ground was covered with a thin quilt, and after a while, a thick blanket was spread all over the ground.
Not long after, class was in session. I walked back to the classroom from the snow-covered backyard. The snow was as soft as a blanket.
Comments: I wrote about the scenery in my backyard with great affection, especially the part about "the silk spit out by the caterpillar", which shows children's unique observation and experience, and it is very successful!
Our campus
Weng Qiaoyang
Our campus is colorful.
In the school there are many flowers and plants, and trees, such as the maple tree, that has maple leaves on it like our chubby little hands.
There are also many trees, in these, my favorite is the willow tree like the branches of the acacia, the branches hanging down, can be really like our little girl's pigtails ah!
Look! Our campus is like a botanical garden!
Our dormitory is beautiful from a distance!
In the spring, the grass turned green and beautiful, and the willow tree wanted to be beautiful, so it said to Grandma Wind, "Grandma Wind, give me a haircut!" Grandma Wind nodded and said, "OK!" With a click, Brother Willow said happily, "The cut is done." And Grandma Wind disappeared.
Our campus is as beautiful as heaven!
Comments: the work has improved a lot, using the image of the metaphor to write the maple leaves, the dragon's claw acacia. Willow and the wind is also very interesting conversation, written out of the child's innocence and interest.
The four seasons of the campus
Huang Timlin
Early in the morning, I went to the campus and saw the spring flowers blooming, suddenly a breeze blew by, ah! What a fragrance! This is cherry blossom.
I walked on the playground and saw the flowers were blooming, as if they were competing with each other!
Oh, it's spring! The days are going by so fast.
Summer was here again, and the boys were playing soccer in the playground, and they were so hot they took off their clothes.
The cicadas in the trees called out "Mockingbird, Mockingbird" as if they were cheering for the team. Suddenly a gust of wind blew, and the flowers and grasses swayed to the left and to the right, as if they were cheering for the other team.
Autumn is here. The butterflies are tired of flying and are resting at home. But there are still some butterflies, and those are the fallen leaves.
The maple trees have red maple leaves, red as the torches of the Olympic flame.
Snowflakes fluttered in the winter, laying a thick, snow-white quilt on the earth.
I love the beautiful campus.
Comments: The campus in your writing is both beautiful and full of life. You can use your own language to describe the cicadas' helpers and the maple tree, which characterizes both the scenery and the vibrancy of the campus. Imagination is rich.
Beautiful little pond
Hou Xiaoyu
Below our house, there is a little pond.
The small pond is very deep and wide, about four or five meters wide, two or three meters deep, there are small fish, frogs, and many people go there to play, some people go there with a little snack for the small fish to eat, if you go up, there is a dolphin show, there is only one dolphin, some people if you bring a small ball, and then throw it down, it will be with the nose, and then make a whole body strength a top! The dolphin will use its nose and then make a whole body strength a top, the ball came up again, sometimes, it will also sing, clap ...... it if the performance is very good, the coach will give it two fish, my downstairs small pond fun, right?
There are all kinds of marine animals in the small pond under my house, and I like the small pond.
Commentary: The work writes about the appearance of the beautiful little pond, and write about the dolphin show there, and the use of anthropomorphism writing method, writing image, vivid! If a little more original would be better!
The Four Seasons on Campus
Yingyue Zhang
The campus is beautiful all year round.
In the spring, new tender green leaves grow on the branches of the trees, and some small wildflowers open up with the help of raindrops, creating a beautiful campus.
In summer, the campus was especially hot. The hot sun hangs in the blue sky, and some students play games under the trees and some play soccer on the playground.
Autumn, there are many, many fallen leaves on the ground, the leaves just fell down like a bunch of yellow butterflies are rushing home.
In winter, snowflakes drifted down everywhere, like a group of little angels.
This is the campus of the four seasons of the year, the campus of the four seasons of the year is not very beautiful ah?
Comments: the work of writing the campus of the four seasons of the year, written out the characteristics of the seasons, language fluent, vivid. It would be better if they were more detailed!
Our classroom
Liang Fangyuan
Our classroom is filled with green plants.
They all look different, some look like curtains, some look like dense hair, and some look like moss. My favorite flower is the "American orchid", its turquoise leaves, coupled with red flowers, forming a beautiful "flower", which reminds me of a pot of flowers in my house, which also has red flowers, but it's not an orchid.
Looking at all the flowers, I can't help but call the classroom "the classroom of flowers"!
I suddenly felt as if I were a beautiful flower, and when the breeze blew past me, I danced, not only me, but all the flowers in the classroom were dancing, just like a beautiful maiden. When the wind passed, I stopped dancing and stood there quietly, enjoying the warmth that Uncle Sun brought me.
After a while, I came to my senses, I was not a flower!
Comments: The assignment writes about the environment of our classroom, mainly about the flowers in the classroom, with careful observation and rich imagination, it is written brilliantly!
School
Jaichi
Our school has beautiful scenery all year round, and many parents send their children here.
The school is colorful in spring, spring flowers and trumpet flowers compete with each other, one has a posture, the tender yellow spring flowers are the same color as bananas, and the purple trumpet flowers look like a trumpet.
In summer, it is very hot, we play games in the sunshine, some play soccer; some play tennis; some play sports equipment; and some walk laps. The ants were the most interesting in summer. Huang Zhirui and Huang Timlin caught one ant each and competed to see whose ant climbed higher. Huang Zhirui won and Huang Timlin lost because his ant fell to the ground and died.
In the fall, the maple leaves are red and yellow, and when you step on them, they click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click.
In winter, snowflakes fly in the air, I want to eat the snow, but I end up drinking a bellyful of cool air. In winter we have so much fun building snowmen and having snowball fights!
Isn't our campus beautiful! Wouldn't you like to come to school here too?
Comments: Your essay is wonderfully written, with a conscious use of various writing styles, and very subtle use of words, such as "click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click, click" and "one has a posture". The scene is a blend of their own feelings, such as "many parents to send their children over", "drink a stomach of cool air" and so on.