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A possible version:
Life is like a mirror. When you smile at it, it will smile back at you. I was moved by a group of children this year. Here, I want to tell you a story about Lin and He Xiuxun who were born in Enshi, Hubei. The two children whose mother died took good care of their old grandmother when their father went out to work. When I heard their stories, I couldn't help crying because they were too young and kind.
I'm Li Lei. I am as old as my brother and sister. I have a big exam in the third year. I feel a lot of pressure because there is something wrong with my homework. I want to learn from these two brave children. I will regard the problem as a challenge. I will talk to my teacher about my problems and ask for help. I also want to face the challenge bravely. At the same time, I will learn to take care of my parents and myself.
Test analysis: Candidates should first carefully read the previous tips, carefully examine the questions, and determine the center of the article. Pay attention to the style, person and tense of the article and introduce how to face the pressure of the senior high school entrance examination and the difficulties in learning as a junior high school student. At the same time, we should choose appropriate conjunctions or transitional words to make the article coherent. Warm reminder: candidates must carefully check whether there are omissions, spelling mistakes and punctuation misuse.
The highlight shows that this essay does not use a lot of phrases, which shows that the student has a solid English foundation. For example, I am as old as my brother and sister. I will take the problem as a challenge. I want to learn from these two brave children. I also want to face C. Hallenges bravely, and at the same time make the expression of the article richer, more logical and more organized.