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How to make the characters in the narrative lifelike (1) 2008-08- 1720:53 How to describe the appearance of the characters?
In the game, guide students to observe the characters and learn to write their appearance.
Guess who he or she is? 》
1, indicating the observation order: figure, face [hair, eyebrows, eyes, nose, mouth], clothing;
2. Observe the students at the table and write them down.
3. Describe the appearance characteristics of "he [she]" before going to the podium;
4. Guess, guess a little red flower; If you guess wrong, tell everyone who it is, and then everyone will revise the article for someone (her) to make it clear how to grasp the characteristics of the character.
Guess who I am? 》
1, everyone knows their looks best, so let the students draw themselves in front of the mirror and describe them in words, with special emphasis on highlighting their uniqueness (without writing their names).
2. When the students are ready, I will ask someone to copy them on a unified piece of paper and hang them around the classroom, so that the whole class can guess the names according to the content.
3. Pick the right pieces of paper, and the number of pieces of paper will gradually decrease. Finally, there are some pieces of paper left. Everyone really couldn't guess, so I called these students out for everyone to observe and help them revise their articles. So as to improve students' writing ability.
Appearance description as the center.
Practice Writing (1): Seven Kinds of Sesame Officials-Health Commissioner (Description)
1, positive description: unambiguous. Xiaohong is the health Commissioner of our class. Although she is not a big official, she is not careless in checking her health. She raised her eyebrows, you are qualified; If she frown, you will be criticized!
2. Contrast: Xiaohong is short and thin. Small nose, small eyes, usually introverted, embarrassed to meet strangers, but especially careful in checking hygiene, no feelings.
3, positive contrast: Xiaohong does not lose height, and strives to be a top two. Her love of labor won the appreciation of her classmates, so she became the "seven-product sesame official" of the health director. She not only cleans the classroom often, but also manages it strictly and mercilessly. Students who don't pay attention to hygiene have been transformed by this little official.
Practice writing {2}: An embarrassing scene when a student is late and enters the classroom;
1, continuous action: knock ... into ... low ... rub your skirt ... look at your toes. ...
2, expression: red face ... unfortunately ... glanced at the teacher ... the index finger kept putting it on your mouth, which was embarrassing.
3. Language: "Teacher, I'm late." ; "The alarm clock didn't go off in the morning, and the whole family was late. Maybe mom and dad are also apologizing to the boss like me! " ; "My things are gone. It took me a long time to find them. I won't be late ... "
4, psychological activities:
{1} Xiaohong scolded herself: "Who told you to get up late? You really deserve it ... "
{2} Xiaohong is holding a rabbit in her arms and her heart is pounding-it's over, it's over, the teacher must criticize me!
Lian Xiao Bi {3}: Highlighting He Peng's "love for cleanliness", what should be added to the description of characters in the next paragraph?
He Peng has fine features and a pair of big eyes embedded in her white face. There is a red mole on the left corner of the mouth. Smile and you will see white teeth and dimples!
Supplement: The clothes he wears are always clean, and even the small handkerchiefs he takes out are neatly folded.
Practice writing {4}: Read the next physical description and complete the following exercise.
He (Zhu De) is a big guy with a belt around his waist and polished high-heeled sandals on his feet. Copper face, two eyes shining.
1, this passage describes Comrade Zhu De's {clothes} and {face}.
2. What are the characteristics of the characters written in this passage? {Hint: It depicts Comrade Zhu De's image of plain clothes, burly figure, firm expression and battle-hardened.
Practice writing {5}: How to write an appearance with the following personality traits?
1, cheerful and generous female monitor: 2, naughty king-Zuo Brahma: 3, introverted little girl:
When describing a character's manner, we should pay attention to the following four points: people's feelings are often reflected through manner. When writing a composition, if it can be used properly, the characters in it will be lifelike, and the article will be more concrete, vivid and vivid. When describing a character's behavior, we should pay attention to the following four points:
1, expression description should serve the characteristics of the characters. For example, "the fire lit up his steel face." One second, two seconds ... He stood like a giant with a firm light in his eyes. "
This description of Dong Cunrui's manner when explosives are about to explode fully shows his heroic spirit of dying.
2. Expression description is combined with character language. Dong Cunrui, for example, stared at the enemy's bunker with hatred in his eyes. The man ... said firmly, "Company commander, I'll blow it up!" This shows Dong Cunrui's strong hatred of the enemy and his attitude of requesting tasks.
3. The expression description is combined with the action description of the characters. For example, in the article Monument, when it was learned that the quartermaster who was in charge of military supplies and clothing froze to death during the March, "the general stood in the snow for a long time. His eyes are moist. The male ... slowly raised his hand to Mei Lan and gave a military salute to the quartermaster who was integrated with Yunzhongshan. "
The expression of "stupefied", "moist eyes" and the action description of "raising hands" and "saluting" show the general's reverence for this quartermaster who is dedicated to serving the public, benefiting others and giving selfless service.
4. Expression description should be combined with psychological activities. For example: "After the examination papers are handed out"
The test paper was handed out today. Along the way, I thought, "Dad will stare big eyes, pull a long face, strike the table, and scold me at the top of his voice:' You are getting confused, and I hurt you for nothing.' Dad will get more and more angry and come to me step by step ... "I can't help but touch my ears when I think about it-Dad always twists my ears before hitting my ass. I crustily skin of head pushed the door and entered the house, and my father was not at home! My mother and grandmother greeted me, and when I saw my dejected appearance, my mother quickly asked, "Who hit you or was criticized by the teacher?" I shook my head again and again, ran into the bedroom, threw the paper to my mother outside the door and locked the door. After a while, the door rang and dad came back. This time, he was unexpectedly not angry at all. Not only did he not spank me, but he also talked to me happily. Later, I learned that my father won the lottery today. Grandma has been very nervous and always pulls her leg. This time, he confidently knitted a sweater and said to himself, "Look at this father and son, crying and laughing for a while, just like the stock market!" I thought to myself: if only my father had been so happy as he is today!