My father has a Chinese character face, is neither burly nor fat, and is very strict but cares about me. My father writes 7 words. I thought my father didn't care about me at first, but it was only after that that I came to my senses.
that day, the weather was very cold. I am waiting for my mother to pick me up at the school gate. It's getting dark, and fewer and fewer students are waiting for their parents at school. I sat on a cold glass bench and looked at the sky silently. Suddenly there was a flash of lightning on the horizon, followed by a continuous drizzle. No, it's raining The thought flashed through my heart, and I immediately ran to the canopy next to the security room. It rained harder and harder, and I don't know how long it took. I almost fell asleep standing, and in a daze I seemed to hear my father's shouts, XX,XX. As the voice approached, I listened carefully again. Outside the school gate, my father's cry came again. Yes, it was my father. I saw dad. Dad is facing the classroom and his back is facing me. What a burly figure it is. But ... Isn't dad sick? Why did you come to pick me up? With this question, I can't help sticking my head in front of the school to take a closer look. It's really my father. XX,XX's father seems to have seen me, too. I went back and got my schoolbag and walked out of the school gate. When my father saw it, he gave me an open umbrella, turned around and left. I followed my father, listening to a few coughs coming from the front. My father didn't hesitate to pick me up with illness in order not to let me wait too long. I can't help crying when I think about it.
Before we knew it, we went home. As soon as we got home, my father asked me to do my homework. I said to my father, Dad, you are ill. Do you want me to buy some medicine? Dad waved impatiently and said, don't mind, it's dad's business. Go and do your homework. I had to do my homework under my father's harsh language. After a while, I suddenly felt something covered me. I turned around and saw that it was my father who put my cotton-padded jacket on me. Dad said gently: Be careful to catch cold. Say that finish and went out. All of a sudden, I felt a gushing emotion in my heart, and I couldn't help crying. Dad doesn't care about his health, but he cares about me. At this moment, I suddenly found that my father's back is so great.
although it has been a long time, I still remember it, especially the back of my father. 2. Writing about father+comments
Igniting the fire of fatherly love is not eternal for everyone, because when you are born, death is born with you, and every moment in life is moving towards death, so we can only seize every moment of life.
Horace told us: "Imagine every day that this is your last day, and the tomorrow you don't expect will be more enjoyable." This sentence is to let us cherish life and appreciate every day in life.
as everyone knows, life is disabled. Micro-viewing, life is short, only 6 to 7 years, at most 1 years. If there is any accident in the middle, I am afraid I will not live that long. However, how many people are really living for themselves? How many people have really found themselves? How many brains have you racked for climbing up? How much effort does it take to earn a lot of money? In fact, rather than making a lot of money, you are earned by money, because money has taken away your youth, time, physical strength and life.
only one life is the most precious wealth in life. Life is the most precious wealth in the world, because all wealth can be recovered, only life is only once; But many people would rather exchange it for those so-called wealth, but spend all their lives on fame, power or money savings.
On their deathbed, they were so regretful: "I only used my life, but never cherished or enjoyed it." It's good to be alive! However, people can't live forever. Life begins to die from the day it is born, and it begins to struggle with death for life.
So living is really not an easy task. In fact, we often don't know how much weight life can bear and how tough life is.
We are more aware of the fragility of life. Failure in exams, frustration in promotion, disharmony among neighbors, family conflicts, lovers' empathy, children's quarrels, brothers' quarrels, etc., and even many trivial things that can't lift chopsticks make people lose their rationality and lead to life crisis: suicide or murder.
Therefore, many profound philosophers lamented how fragile life is after summing up the life in various forms. Ancient boatmen had a saying, "Hell is under the planking."
There is only a gap between life and death, which shows the fragility of life and the possibility of disaster at any time and place. If we have this kind of consciousness, we will have "now is the last moment of life" in our hearts, and we will not panic no matter what happens.
I always feel that childhood is a beautiful and unforgettable dream. Childhood is an important stage in life, which leaves many people with beautiful memories.
Childhood is a stage that is destined for a person's life, so it is very important. I think childhood is like a piece of white paper. You should draw beautiful pictures yourself and create a bright future! Childhood is the best day in everyone's life, and it is also the day that is destined for this person's life, just as three years old is eighty.
my childhood dreams often haunt me. On the drawing paper of my childhood, one thing after another is often recorded, so let's talk about one of my interesting childhood stories! Once I went to the mall with my cousin. After going to the bathroom in the mall, I inadvertently looked at the house number. Who knows that my cousin and I both went to the men's bathroom. From this mistake, we can already see that there are many interesting things in childhood. 3. How to write parents' comments on primary school students' compositions
Highlights of primary school students' composition evaluation
1. You are very good at observing life and can keenly capture meaningful moments; You are a student with great potential.
2. The language of the article is fluent, and it also shows the teacher's feelings. You are the teacher's bosom friend. I hope we can learn from each other and gather a fragrant bouquet in the garden of literature.
3. Sorry, the teacher didn't understand this paragraph. Would you like to explain it for the teacher again? Thank you.
4. Your handwriting is neat and beautiful. Teachers should learn from you. If the material selection of the article is more novel, it will definitely complement the writing. what do you reckon ?
5. Great! Your article reproduces the simplicity and frankness of the Northeast people and makes readers feel refreshed. The language is extremely fluent, and the use of synaesthesia is particularly clever. Your writing style is conquering and appealing. Work hard and create more glory! 4. The Complete Collection of composition evaluation in Primary School
composition evaluation has both evaluation function and guidance function.
subtle comments can often arouse students' interest in writing, ignite their enthusiasm for writing and activate their creative thinking. Therefore, teachers must write composition evaluation carefully when evaluating students' compositions, so that composition evaluation has six "natures".
1. Accuracy When evaluating students' compositions, teachers should follow the age characteristics of primary school students in different periods and understand the laws of things, be correct and objective, and don't be arrogant at will, let alone seek perfection. Comments should be specific and clear, and the main problems in students' exercises should be grasped to make comments, so as to point out the direction for students and make them alert and gain something.
For example, when teachers find that students' writing style is unreasonable, they can't just write "sentences are unreasonable", but should specifically point out the root of the language disorder, what kind of faults it belongs to, how to avoid it, etc., and prescribe "the right prescription" like Hua Tuo. Second, the emotional teacher wrote that composition evaluation should infect people with emotion and discover his heart with his own heart.
You can call them by their first names, and you can also add a word "Xiao" affectionately to open your heart, like chatting at home, like catching up with relatives and friends, and every word touches students' heartstrings lightly. In this way, after reading the teacher's affectionate comments, students feel that the teacher is paying attention to him attentively, appreciating him with affection and discovering him with love, which can not only shorten the psychological distance between teachers and students, but also make the relationship between teachers and students harmonious and harmonious, greatly improving students' interest in reading comments.
I once taught a girl named Feng. The girl is good at everything, but she has been unhappy all the time, as if she was born out of laughter. Is it really natural, or is there something else? Several tentative conversations failed to get results.
Later, in the article My * *, she confided her regret that her brother fell into the water and died because of her negligence, which was simple and touching. After reading it, I wrote this comment: "Between the lines, I miss my brother. Simple language and simple feelings make people cry.
' There are unexpected storms in the sky, and people are doomed.' What's more, you were only a five-year-old doll at that time. How can you predict good or bad? The teacher thinks it's not your fault. You can't always live in the shadows.
Although parents have lost their children, it is also the best compensation to have a sensible daughter like you. They will feel happy! Teachers, classmates and your parents are really looking forward to seeing your bright smiling face! "After reading this comment, the girl was very moved. From then on, she gradually had a smile on her face. Third, the incentive "the number of children over ten is not as long as the prize."
Writing is the result of students' labor. Teachers should be good at discovering the bright spots in students' writing with a pair of discerning eyes. Even a vivid sentence, a vivid word and even an accurate punctuation should affirm their achievements with comments full of hope and enhance their confidence in unremitting efforts. For example, some students have a wide reading range and can use ancient poems and legends properly in their writing. Teachers may wish to send a sentence in their comments: "You are really a master of writing! Apply folk stories skillfully to the description of scenery. "
There are also students whose compositions are full of literary talent, which is obviously better than the students in the class. The teacher can annotate like this: "It is my pleasure to read your article. Maybe your name will become a household name in a few years." I think every child will be elated to read such a comment on writing.
Another example is, "Congratulations, another excellent work has come out! Careful description of inner activities and clever care before and after prove that you have mastered certain writing skills. From your composition, I seem to see Bing Xin in the 21st century! " Such comments not only affirm students' flexible use of writing skills, but also make them experience the pleasure and satisfaction of successful writing, make them feel that they are the masters of writing, thus stimulating the enthusiasm and initiative of writing, and establish the belief of writing for being a man in the depths of their hearts.
fourth, enlightening. For the students' exercises that do not meet the writing requirements, or the phenomenon of nonstandard language in the text, teachers should give instructions-use enlightening comments to guide students to think independently and actively explore, so as to find problems in their own compositions and improve their ability to analyze and solve problems. For example, a student in the article "I learned to swim" failed to write down the process of learning to swim, only wrote: "I can't swim at first."
My father patiently taught me a method, so I swam according to my father's teaching method, finally learned to swim, and I went home happily. " I wrote a comment next to this passage: "I'm so happy for you. Your swimming skills have improved greatly. Your father is really good!" I also hope to learn, but after reading your article carefully, the teacher didn't find your father's trick, which makes people feel sorry. "
instead of directly pointing out the shortcomings of students' composition with "the content is not specific" and "the key points are not prominent", we use enlightening language to arouse students' thinking and recognize the shortcomings in the article. After reading the comment on writing, the student immediately revised his composition and wrote down the method of teaching swimming by his father.
V. Interesting The famous Soviet educator Svetlov said, "The most important and first assistant of a teacher is humor." Lively pupils like to learn from lively and interesting language and realize truth through laughter.
a profound and humorous comment can not only create a pleasant learning situation, but also achieve an effect of "thinking after laughing". For example, "full stop stared at her round eyes, raised her eyebrows with quotation marks, wailed and started to cry:' My master, how can you ignore my proper position in the text?' "Such a comment is given to students who use punctuation incorrectly, and the composition is teased to the end, which can prompt them to" set things right "immediately after laughing.
Another example is that a student wrote such a detail in his composition: "I saw an old man coming from a distance, his hair was gray and his face was wrinkled ..." I wrote him such an eyebrow criticism: "Are you clairvoyant or wearing binoculars?" As a result, the whole class circulated it, and such mistakes rarely appeared in students' exercises in the future. Sixth, discussion students' writing is to look at this colorful world with their own eyes, often expressing unique understanding. Teachers can't arbitrarily modify according to their own subjective ideas, so that the beautiful innocence and childlike interest in the article disappear in the revision.
in the students' homework. 5. How to write parents' comments on primary school students' compositions
Do it well. Write this way: I am very pleased to see that you have been studying hard.
I hope to make persistent efforts and make further progress. You have great potential. Give full play to it.
You are good. We are proud to be your parents. You will definitely exceed our expectations.
keep working hard! It's not ideal. Write it like this: Don't criticize. Say to the child: this must be accidental.
it's probably caused by carelessness. You will do well.
don't push. Encourage and trust children to do well, and children will do well by themselves.
Let children know that reading good books is his responsibility, not the responsibility of parents. The future and life belong to the children themselves.
no matter how much parents love their children, they can't take the place of their children in their life. Tell him that those who study well and those who don't will come to the social hierarchy.
Tell him that you have 1% confidence in him. As long as he works hard, he will get excellent grades. Don't specifically urge him to make his own arrangements. If you specifically urge him, it will be a presumptuous guest.
children will think zhidao is your business to study. Even if he did it under your supervision, he thought he was studying for you, not for himself. Then once he lost your supervision, he wouldn't study. Can you supervise him for a lifetime? Children must be encouraged to make progress and do better.
Children who grow up with encouragement are full of confidence and keep improving. We should learn to be parents who applaud their children. 6. Tell me about my dad's composition and finish his comments < P > If the world is a blue sky, then everyone is a piece of clouds in the sky; If the world is a trickling stream, then everyone is
a dripping spring in the stream; If the world is a crystal clear pond, then everyone is a free fish in the pond; If the world is a colorful flower, then everyone is a bit of pollen in the flower;
If the world is a clear water drop, then everyone is a never-ending water molecule in the water drop; If the world is one