announcement
This ferry is the largest on the Qingxiang River. There are many vehicles and pedestrians passing by, and the waiting time is often very long. In order to reduce waiting time and strengthen ferry management, the following provisions are made:
First, those who need to ferry across the river must buy tickets, which cost 50 cents per motor vehicle; Non-motor vehicle triangles; Twenty cents for pedestrians (children under one meter are free). Those who don't buy tickets can't take a boat.
Second, passengers must obey the command of the staff and get on and off the ship in an orderly manner. All kinds of vehicles should be unloaded at designated places to ensure the safety of the ferry.
Three, are not allowed to carry flammable, explosive and corrosive substances on board. In violation of regulations, those who board the ship without permission and do not carry articles with them will be fined from 5 yuan to 25 yuan as appropriate.
Four, where the transition traction livestock, to fixed points, and tickets, each head (only, horse) triangle. Poultry and piglets carried in baskets, baskets and other containers are free, but the quantity cannot be too much.
Five, after the ferry started, the boatman should not walk back and forth; Motor vehicles must be turned off; Livestock must be guarded.
Six, the boat must take good care of the ferry and its equipment, damage to compensation.
Seven, in violation of regulations or unreasonable boarding, do not listen to the command, interfere with the normal navigation of the ferry. If the circumstances are serious, it shall be handed over to the public security organ for punishment according to law.
Qingxianghe ferry management division
Year, month and day, 19.
The notice has the following problems:
1. Language selection is not entirely appropriate.
Running an enterprise often has many languages to choose from, but only one language is the most suitable. What is announced here is the management regulations of a ferry, which is to announce the matters that should be observed or known within a certain range. There is nothing wrong with using notifications. However, measuring the accuracy of stylistic choice depends on whether a more suitable language is available. In official documents, there seems to be no more suitable language than notice, but in other agency affairs, there is a more suitable language, that is, "passenger notice" "Notes" is not a formal document genre, but it is widely used in stations and docks, and its practical effect is very good. The content in this article, written on the bulletin board and hung in the ticket office and waiting hall for a long time, is better than forming a formal document. Therefore, there is nothing wrong with the language chosen in this paper, but it is not the most appropriate.
2. The structure is chaotic
In this paper, there are two different sequences. One is the time sequence of ship transition, which is divided into buying tickets, waiting for the ship, boarding, transition and disembarking. The other is the primary and secondary order of objects on board, mainly including passengers, vehicles and livestock. People should be respected, followed by the other two.
If the contents are arranged in chronological order, let's talk about the ticket purchase first, and complete the ticket purchase instructions at one time in the order of people, cars and animals. Then he said that you should not take flammable and explosive products with you. Next, the problems that should be paid attention to when waiting for the ship, the order and position of boarding, the problems that should be paid attention to when the ship is sailing, and the problems of disembarking are discussed in turn. In each link, if people, cars and livestock are involved, they should be arranged in the order of ancestors, cars and livestock. Finally, how to punish violators.
You also want to arrange them according to different transition objects. Then, first, we will talk about the various regulations of the main transition object-people, focusing on how passengers should buy tickets, how not to carry "three products", and how to wait for and board the ship. Then talk about how to buy tickets, boards, places, stalls and other matters. Finally, how to buy tickets and get on the boat for livestock needs someone to look after them. There are many things about people, so you can list a few articles. One car and one livestock can be done. This structure is also orderly.
However, the structure of this article is rather confusing. The first article talks about the purchase of tickets for people and cars, and the purchase of tickets for livestock was not mentioned until the fourth article. Also, the second one is about getting on the boat, but the third one is carrying the "three products" hard. Obviously, the chronological order is reversed. Article 5 The requirements for turning off the motor vehicle and taking care of the livestock shall be clearly stated in the boarding terms, or separately stated in the special terms for different transition objects, and put forward together in the precautions after starting, neither in chronological order nor in classified order.
3. The language meaning is unclear and the logic is poor.
The following are brief comments on some language problems:
"There are many passing vehicles and pedestrians", the word "pedestrians" should be changed to "passengers", and "passengers" should be put in front.
"In order to reduce waiting time and strengthen ferry management", literally, these are two purposes of issuing the Notice, but logically they cannot stand scrutiny: reducing waiting time should actually ensure that the ferry sails on time. Isn't this an aspect of strengthening ferry management? How can it be tied with the strengthening of ferry management and still rank first?
"Anyone who needs to cross the river by boat" is too refined, so the word "guest" is enough. At the end of this article, "People who don't buy tickets can't go by boat" is a simple repetition of the previous article and should be deleted.
The meaning of the statement that "all livestock are hauled to the designated warehouse" is unclear, but it should be said that "livestock should be transported to the designated livestock warehouse and taken care of by the owner".
"Poultry and piglets carried in baskets, baskets and other containers are free, but the quantity cannot be too much", in which "too much" is a vague word and the boundary cannot be determined. It is necessary to define the quantity limit so that the work will not be passive.
Although there are many mistakes in this article, it is not difficult to revise it.
Notice on Handling the Swimming Certificate in the Swimming Pool of the Institution
Each directly affiliated unit of the organ:
The institutional swimming pool is scheduled to implement the voucher admission system on June 1 day. The relevant certification matters are hereby notified as follows:
1. Time for application: 8: 00- 16: 00 on May 20-25.
2. Application place: Room 808, 8th floor, Office Club.
Three. Registration target: healthy cadres and workers in municipal organs. The applicant must issue a medical certificate from a hospital at or above the county level.
Four. Application method: Each unit receives the health certificate, certificate workbook, handling fee (5 yuan per person) and 1 bareheaded one-inch photo, makes a form to register and affix the official seal, and assigns special personnel to handle it.
Family members' swimming certificates are handled temporarily in the swimming pool with their ID cards and health certificates.
Hereby inform you
Tianhe district government taiyangshen club
December 12, 1995