To revise a sick sentence means to modify a sentence with a speech defect so that it does not change the original meaning and the sentence is more fluent. What are the judgment and modification of sick sentences? The following is my compilation of the judgment and modification of sick sentences, welcome to read
Judgment and Modification of Sick Sentences1
(a), tightening method. Commonly used method of grammatical analysis. First of all, the additional components of the sentence (determiner, gerund and complement) are removed, tighten the trunk, check the main in whether there is a component of mutilation, with the improper language disease; if the trunk is not a problem, and then check the local, look at the modifier and the center of the collocation of the language with or without the problem of the modifier of the internal order of the problem. For example:
The youth of the day is responsible for building our country into a four-modern socialist power in this century.
The main stem of this sentence is ? The youth is responsible for building into a strong country? From this main stem, we can see that the structure of this sentence is incomplete.
(ii) Analogy. Can not be sure of the fault of the sentence, in accordance with the original sentence format imitation of some shallow, easy to grasp the sentence to compare, you can more clearly see where the disease. For example:
This experience deserves the attention of educators, especially primary and secondary school teachers.
The original sentence structure is more complex, first compressed and simplified to ? This deserves their attention? , and then compare it to the structure of the sentence:? This is worth their learning? This is worth our visit? These three sentences are more than one compared to the daily saying. The word? The original sentence is to be replaced by the word ? Teachers' attention. in the phrase "teachers' attention". The word "of" should be deleted from "teachers' attention" in the original sentence. Delete.
(c), the sense of language reading method. Mobilize the sense of language, in the process of reviewing the reading from the sense of the statement of the problem, that is, according to the customary saying to see if it is not twisted. If the awkwardness is then analyzed and compared to identify the causes, to modify. For example:
Regardless of the extreme unfavorable climatic and geographic conditions, the mountaineers still overcame the national difficulties and climbed to the summit.
In the first part of this sentence, the word ?
In the first part of the sentence, the phrase "no matter what? are extremely unfavorable? is obviously not customary, the correct statement is? However? How unfavorable? Even though? very unfavorable?
(d), logical analysis. Some of the grammatical problems from the bad to find fault, it is necessary to analyze the rationale, which is the logical meaning of the analysis. Logical meaning of the analysis method from the concept, judgment, reasoning to consider whether it is appropriate, from the order of the statements before and after, the relationship between the sentences to consider whether it is appropriate. For example:
① the city, some people unscrupulous imitation of shoddy products?
② All the outstanding achievements of the people, are the hard environment in the training to become a talent.
The first sentence? Imitation of shoddy products? is not reasonable, should be changed to? Manufacture of shoddy products? or? imitation of brand-name products? The second sentence uses? All? All? which is a full affirmative judgment, is overstating the case and should be replaced with? should be changed to? should be changed to? Mostly? followed by the deletion of "all". All? The word?
Judgment and Modification of Diseased Sentences2
1.(2012?Fuzhou City, Fujian Province) The following sentences. The one without speech defects is ( )
A. The ability to write Chinese characters skillfully and standardized is the basic requirement for students to write Chinese characters in the Language Curriculum Standard.
B. Early in the morning of May 21, people in Fuzhou were able to see the spectacle of an annular solar eclipse as they wished.
C. Primary and secondary schools around the world have improved and established mechanisms for campus safety.
D. As Ms. Zhang Lili sacrificed herself to save her students, she was hailed by netizens as ? the most beautiful teacher?
Answer B
2.(2012?Lishui City, Zhejiang Province) Choose one of the following sentences that has no speech defects. (2 points)
A. It is indescribable that the school gave this task to our class, and we all had the glorious feeling.
B. After the graduation gala, Xiaoya's beautiful dance and melodious singing often lingered in my ears.
C. In ? Building a bookish campus? activities, the school magazine opened? Poetry Linglong thought reeds? and other small columns.
D. Perhaps, youth itself is a running account of growth, which needs to be carefully recorded and carefully collected.
Answer D
3. (2012? Linyi City, Shandong Province) The following sentences have a speech defect in one of the following ( ) (2 points)
A. Whether the student food is safe or not is related to whether the youth of our country can grow up healthily, which is an issue that must attract the attention of the whole society.
B. On May 28 this year, an earthquake of about 4.2 on the Richter scale occurred near Tangshan in Hebei province, and the tremor was also felt in Beijing.
C. In response to the escalating tensions in the South China Sea, China sent three marine law enforcement vessels to carry out escort missions in the waters of Huangyan Island.
D. By watching the CCTV program "Artistic Life", I learned that ? The big clothes brother? Zhu Zhiwen is a simple and easy-going person.
Answer B (? about? and? around? are duplicated in meaning, one of them should be removed).
4.(2012?Chongqing) The following sentence has a speech defect ( )(3 points)
A. The amount of oil consumed in a packet of deep-fried instant noodles is as much as 30 grams, which is the upper limit of oil intake per person per day.
B. Asteroid ?2012-DA14? will pass over the Earth and enter the geosynchronous satellite orbit ring in February next year.
C. All localities should include the Xinhua Dictionary in the purchase of books for newly built farm houses in 2012.
D. Rare fish that once disappeared within the Songhua River have reappeared, which has excited local fishermen.
Answer C (lack of object)
5. (2012? Binzhou City, Shandong Province) The following sentence has no speech defects in one of the following sentences ( ) (2 points)
A. Students write essays, to have a true sense of feeling, do not make up by the lake.
B. The architect's excellent work and unique design have been adopted by the organizations concerned.
C. In the final of this World Cup, China will fight with the United States for the first and second place.
D. In recent years, he has recorded about 600 pages of text.
Answer D
6.(2012?Tongren City, Guizhou Province)The following sentence has no speech defects ( )
A. Through this post-disaster reconstruction, we fully realize the importance of unity and unity of purpose.
B. The sign of a sanitary city lies not only in the cleanliness of the environment, but also in the sanitary quality and civilized consciousness of the general public.
C. In the vicissitudes of the next five thousand years, the Chinese land of the powerful politicians, learned and wise scientists continue to emerge.
D. The report lists a large number of facts and accuses human beings of destroying nature and killing animals indiscriminately.
Answer C
7.(2012?Jiangxi Province) The following sentence has no speech defects ( )(2 marks)
A. The beans and wheat on both sides of the banks and the water plants at the bottom of the river were caught in the watery air and puffed up.
B, The ability to stop the release of inflammatory molecules in the brain is key to reducing the symptoms of dementia.
C. As an intangible cultural heritage of the Chinese nation, the Yimen Meilian Opera can be regarded as a living fossil of Chinese theater.
D. On that river, the local fishermen still keep the one-legged rowing boat.
Answer C
8.(2012?Zhuzhou City, Hunan Province)The following sentence has no grammatical defects ( )(2 points)
A. Sugar is potentially harmful and addictive, just like tobacco and alcohol.
B. There is no one who can't be touched by the heroic deeds of the most beautiful teacher Zhang Lili.
C. The peppers planted by Grandpa Li were basically sold out.
D. Reading famous books is an effective way to enlighten the mind and cultivate the sentiment.
答案D(解析：A缺宾语，句末加? the substance?B Negative words are not used properly, remove? C inconsistent, remove? C. It's inconsistent. or? all?)
9.(2012?Meishan City, Sichuan Province, Volume A)The one of the following sentences that has no speech defects is
A.Midsummer in Meishan is a good place for traveling and leisure.
B.A good attitude to study largely determines whether students' performance can be improved.
C. Judging from the current tense situation in Syria, we have to think that world peace is still far away from us.
D. Developing and conceptualizing special industries will enable Meishan to integrate into the Tianfu New Area at the fastest speed.
Answer C (A: subject-object collocation is inappropriate; B: inconsistency (one side and two sides can not echo at the same time) D: inappropriate order)
10. (2012? Ziyang City, Sichuan Province) The following sentences have no grammatical problems and are clear in their meaning (3 points)
A. Through the study of the Lei Feng report, it has made us further set up the ideology of serving the people wholeheartedly.
B. In learning, our teachers asked us to think independently, explore actively and cooperate with each other.
C. In order to prevent similar collapses of school buildings from happening again, the Education Bureau has taken many safety measures.
D. Several school teachers approached Mr. Liu Chenghui to exchange views on overcoming learning difficulties.
Answer B
11.(2012?Lanzhou City, Gansu Province) The following incorrect modification of the sick sentence is (3 points)
A. Jeremy Lin's career in the NBA is just beginning, and has conquered hundreds of millions of viewers with his magical performance.
Modification: delete ? Being?
B. At the Shanghai Home Appliance Expo, Haier launched the world's first air conditioner that can remove PM2.5.
Modify: should put ? first? moved to ? can remove?
C. In the spring, Lanzhou's major parks reveal the freshness and beauty of nature, making it a good time for people to go on spring trips.
Modify: put ? become? to be? The first is that the parks in Lanzhou have become the best places for people to visit in the spring.
D. By continuously consuming yogurt drinks containing 1073R-1 lactic acid seedlings, the chances of students getting influenza will be effectively reduced.
Modify: Delete? by ?
Answer C
12.(2012?Dezhou City, Shandong Province) The following passage has two speech defects, please correct them in the original text. (2 points)
The Jinxiuichuan Scenic Area is located in the combination of the city and the new city of Hedong, which is 10 kilometers long and the water is 200 meters wide. There are mainly wooden bridges, pebble beaches, gaming platforms, motorboats and other classics. During the day, five bridges fly over the east and west, magnificent. At night, ten thousand lights competing with each other, lights and bridges, green trees, blue water as one, the ideal place to enjoy the night scenery.
Answers (1) will? Motorboats? Delete. (2) In? night view? Add ? This place is?
13.(2012?Anshun City, Guizhou Province)The following sentences have no speech defects and the meaning of the sentences is clear:(3 points)
A.Anshun is a beautiful city, and in summer it is a good season for people to escape from the heat and stay cool.
B. Scientists have recently announced that they have found a more efficient way to use nuclear energy to make hydrogen.
C. Currently, global water use is growing twice as fast as the population, which has led to a serious shortage of water resources.
D. Effectively reducing the burden on farmers is the key to the possibility of building a new socialist countryside.
Answer C