1. Description of the composition review scene in class
"Come on, come on!" There was a cheering sound on the playground. This was from Class 4 (1) and Class 4 (2) The classmates are having a tug-of-war game nervously.
The two sides fought to a draw in the first two games. At the beginning of the third game, Class 4 (1) took the lead. I saw them all exerting all their strength like little tigers, holding the big rope tightly with both hands. , leaning back, pushing his legs hard on the ground. The students in Class 4 (2) were unprepared, and the big rope was pulled inch by inch. "Come on, Class 4 (2)! Come on, Class 4 (2)!" Shouts erupted on the field. Suddenly, a surge of energy came from nowhere. Some of the students in Class 4 (2) gritted their teeth, some tensed their faces, and some held their breath. They all widened their eyes and tried their best. I saw the big rope moving little by little in the direction of Class 4 (2). Suddenly, the rope stopped moving and the game entered a deadlock. At this time, the sound of cheering sounded again on the playground. Encouraging students waved small red flags and shouted rhythmically: "Four (2)! One two! Four (2)! One two!" After the two sides were in a stalemate for about seven or eight seconds, the students from Class 4 (2) worked together. , burst out with a huge force, pulled the big rope suddenly, and the red mark suddenly crossed the river boundary. "Class 2 is victorious! Class 2 is victorious!" The students sang and danced, feeling very happy. 2. Description of the scene of composition review in class
"Come on, come on!" There was a cheering sound on the playground. It was the students of Class 4 (1) and Class 4 (2) who were having an intense tug-of-war competition. .
The two sides fought to a draw in the first two rounds. At the beginning of the third round, Class 4 (1) took the lead. I saw them all exerting all their strength like little tigers, holding the big rope tightly with both hands. , leaning back, pushing his legs hard on the ground. The students in Class 4 (2) were unprepared, and the big rope was pulled inch by inch.
"Come on, Class 4 (2)! Come on, Class 4 (2)!" Shouts erupted on the field. Suddenly, a surge of energy came from nowhere. Some of the students in Class 4 (2) gritted their teeth, some tensed their faces, and some held their breath. They all widened their eyes and tried their best.
I saw the big rope moving bit by bit towards the direction of Class 4 (2). Suddenly, the rope stopped moving and the game entered a deadlock. At this time, the sound of cheering sounded again on the playground.
The encouraging students waved little red flags and shouted rhythmically: "Four (2)! One two! Four (2)! One two!" After the two sides held on for about seven or eight seconds, four ( 2) The classmates worked together and burst out with a huge force. They pulled the rope suddenly and the red mark crossed the river boundary. "Class 2 is victorious! Class 2 is victorious!" The students sang and danced, feeling very happy. 3. Ask the teacher to comment on this scene description composition
Hello! Thank you for your trust.
(The autumn breeze brings coolness,) September 1st arrived as scheduled amidst the expectations of the students. The new school year has begun again, and XX Primary School presents a peaceful atmosphere. At 9:30 am, XX Primary School held a grand opening ceremony and flag-raising ceremony for the first semester of 2008-2009 on the playground with the theme of "Experience the Beijing Olympics and Carry forward the National Spirit." Freshmen of Grade X and new teachers from XX Primary School attended the opening ceremony. (It is a redundant statement and has been deleted)
The opening ceremony (conference) kicked off under the auspices of the counselor of the brigade. The entire venue was solemn and solemn. (The word is too big and does not fit the description of the scene. deleted) in good order. Facing the rising national flag, the students (who neatly performed the solemn team salute) stood upright. From their attention to the national flag, we can see their love for the motherland and their longing for the new semester. The national flag is fluttering in the wind, and the Sixth Primary School is marching forward with head held high!
At the meeting, Principal X took stock of the achievements of the previous school year and commended a group of advanced deeds. He sincerely hopes that every one of us can seize every day of the new semester, use our diligence and perseverance to compose moving poems, and use our successful brushes to describe the most magnificent rainbow in life! Afterwards, Principal X, as the leader of XX Primary School, led all the teachers to solemnly swear an oath under the national flag. Make your own commitments. The team leader also led all the students to take an oath, hoping that the new semester would bring new experiences and new discoveries.
When Principal
Commending these outstanding role models on the first day of school is to allow students to have newer prospects and goals in the new semester, so that the flower of learning in our school will bloom more and more brilliantly.
The holding of the opening ceremony marked the beginning of a new journey for X Primary School. I believe that each of us, X Xiaoxiao, will have new goals and new gains in the new year, because we firmly believe that: Six Primary Schools are wonderful because of us, and we are even more outstanding because of X Xiaoxiao!
Comments: The sentences are smooth, the level is clear, and it can show a certain literary talent. But the overall feeling is not like a composition describing the scenes of the new semester, but more like a speech, a record of the opening ceremony, and the aforementioned conference theme "Experience the Beijing Olympics and Carry forward the National Spirit" is not fully included in the article. reflect. As a composition, the description is relatively empty. We should increase the description of the mental outlook of teachers and students, rather than focusing on the content of the leader's speech.
Sorry for any inappropriate remarks! Chinese Language Teacher Chen 4. How to guide students in scene description teaching design and teaching reflection
The picture of life composed of certain activities carried out by certain characters at a certain time and place around certain events is scene.
The scene is the place where the character is displayed, the link that promotes the development of the event, and the center where the significance of the event is displayed. The word "scene" is relatively unfamiliar to primary school students.
There are many such scenes of life. In children's writing, the key point is to guide "combination of points and aspects" to write good scenes. The spectacular scene of breaking through the ice.
"At this time, the other swans seemed to be stunned by this move. They stood there blankly, looking at the 'icebreaker'.
Only heard "Crack - crack - crack -", the ice cracked a small crack, and then another crack... The ice finally collapsed, and a small ice hole appeared. This tenacious ice-breaking warrior. 'I continued to flapping along the edge of the ice hole, and the water surface was slowly expanding.
A few swans came to help, and soon the entire group of swans, about a hundred or so, were involved in breaking the ice. . They worked so unitedly and happily! The water surface continued to expand. From time to time, there were sounds of "Kelu - Keli - Keli" on the lake. The exciting labor chant 'Brothers, come on! Let's work together, come on! '" This scene describes the old swan's feat as "point", and all the swans coming to participate in the ice-breaking work is "face", and the enthusiastic labor The description of the scene compares the cheerful cries of the swans to labor chants, which makes it cheerful, enthusiastic and extremely contagious. After learning this lesson, I guided the children to recall "Have you ever seen a scene in life where everyone worked together to complete a task? Tell me. 5. Commentary on the scene description exercise in unit 8 of the fifth grade volume 1
This afternoon
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What is heard in the school is not the sound of reading
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but the sound of reading in waves. Cheering sound
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It turns out that the "June 1" tug-of-war competition is being held on the playground at this time
"Come on, come on." !
"There was a cheering sound on the playground, and the third and fourth grade students were nervously engaging in a tug-of-war competition.
As soon as the competition started,
Three The classmates in the first grade took the lead.
I saw them exerting all their strength like little tigers.
Holding the rope tightly with both hands,
their bodies
He leaned back,
his legs hit the ground hard
The students in our class were unprepared,
The rope suddenly moved across the middle. Click,
Move slowly towards the third grade. At this time, the cheering students couldn't help it, and the shouts became louder and louder.
"Come on, fourth grade! Come on, fourth grade!
"They
stomped their feet and waved their fists, as if they were also members of the competition.
Suddenly, the classmates in our class didn't know where they came from. With a surge of energy, they gritted their teeth, grimaced, and stared, using all their strength to pull the rope this way, watching the rope move towards the midpoint little by little.
Suddenly, the rope stopped moving, and the students in our class did not show weakness. The competition entered the persistence stage. At this time, there were shouts and shouts again in the playground. The student who led the encouragement waved a small red flag and shouted rhythmically:
"One, two,
Come on! One, two, come on!
" Other cheering students also shouted.
The two sides were in a stalemate for about seven or eight seconds. The students in our class worked together and burst out with a huge force and suddenly pulled the rope.
Over,
The red sign suddenly crossed the river boundary.
As soon as the referee's whistle sounded,
the fourth grade students dropped the rope,
all jumped up.
"Oh, we won! We won!
"The cheering classmates also ran over, everyone hugged each other, shouted and jumped, so happy
Forget it. 6. Comments on the composition of scene description,
2. The description of scene and atmosphere adds a lot of color to the article; ... briefly describes the wonderful place; combines the points with a brief introduction of the situation, and naturally transitions to the next paragraph; Situation Description arouses suspense; makes full use of language, action, and psychological description to make things concrete and vivid. Briefly describe the antecedents and foreshadowing. You can add dialogue or some psychological description to this part. It is more appropriate to change... to..., which will naturally connect the previous and the following. The detailed description highlights the qualities of the characters and is touching. The narrative is mixed with scenes to express feelings and feelings. The anthropomorphic language makes the article more lively. The description of the appearance is very interesting and highlights the cuteness of.... The introduction incorporates one's own thoughts. , contagious. The method of listing numbers and giving examples is very vivid. The transition is natural and each paragraph is explained clearly. This part refers to the examples in the text. The language is too flat and can be modified appropriately to make the language more vivid. Used Metaphors, personification and other rhetorical techniques vividly describe the beauty of... This part can also be expanded to write. Seeing the big from the small, expressing... The metaphorical sentences are used appropriately. Ancient poems are added to make associations, and they are full of charm. ... and... form a distinct Contrast, highlight... It is impressive that primary school students can have such an experience. The metaphor of... is used wonderfully. Multiple senses are used, and the description is very careful. The language of childish anger is very interesting. The characters' behaviors are added to make the picture vivid. The article is right ...the atmosphere is fully rendered and just right, and the key points of the article are...delicately and vividly depicted. The intention is lofty and admirable. ...It is realistic and contains simple and profound philosophy. It is invigorating and emotionally exciting to read. ...The close-up shot is unique and full of interest. The full text is full of childlike innocence and makes you feel cordial when reading it. This article is full of ***, and you can feel the author's love for... from between the lines. The full text has clear layers and smooth sentences. The case description is vivid, specific, interesting, and consistent with the previous metaphor... Finally, the author uses a few words to express his emotions towards..., which is touching. The language of the article is fresh and lively, and the description can capture the essence of things. The main features are short and concise, worth reading. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life, and makes people feel more intimate when reading it. The beginning of the article is novel and has the effect of preempting others. The reader can have an impression of the characters as soon as they meet. The article is coherent and forms a complete image. The article can describe things in fresh and interesting language. Between the lines, it is full of the true childishness of childhood, with endless laughter and laughter. It can be regarded as an excellent article. It is detailed and brief, and the reality and reality are intertwined. This is the essence of this article. Two major features...the content is richer and more vivid. It makes full use of the writing method of combining movement and static, supplemented by metaphors, personification and other techniques. Through the description of vivid and vivid language, the readers feel as if they are in a dream. The characters are described at the end. The praise is sincere and touching. Pay attention to observing specific things and develop appropriate imagination. This is the success of this article. The article blends emotions into the scene, expresses emotions while depicting the scene, and is good at using metaphors to make it more vivid. The article is vivid and concrete, making people unable to read it.
I hope you will adopt it, thank you!
I wish you good health and progress in your studies! 7. Composition guidance for scene description
Scene description is a description of the overall situation of the activities of many characters at a specific time and place.
It is often a comprehensive application of narrative, description, lyrical and other expression methods, and is a concentrated expression of natural scenery, social environment, character activities and other descriptive objects. Common ones include labor scenes, battle scenes, sports scenes and various meeting scenes.
To describe a scene to express a specific atmosphere, a single expression and writing technique is not enough. It is necessary to comprehensively use narrative, description, lyricism, discussion and other expression methods, as well as a variety of expressions such as foil and symbolism. Technique, in order to turn the scene into a vivid and contagious picture. When writing a good scene, you should pay attention to the following four points: First, you must clearly explain the background of the scene, such as the time, place, environment, etc., so that people know what social or natural environment the scene takes place in.
Second, we must write the specifics on the basis of writing the overall situation. When writing a scene, we must have an overall summary of the scene so that the reader has an understanding of the overall appearance. But the scene should also have key parts. This part should be written in detail and concretely, so as to be a little bit comprehensive.
Third, write the atmosphere. Atmosphere is an emotion or feeling that people see or feel in a certain environment. No matter what the scene is, there will be an atmosphere. For example, the celebration scene has a happy atmosphere; the competition scene has a tense atmosphere; the farewell scene has an inseparable atmosphere, etc.
Fourth, the scene must be written in order. A scene is a comprehensive picture composed of people, things, scenes, and objects. It is impossible to write them all at the same time with just a few strokes. Therefore, when writing scenes, you must arrange the order.
Generally speaking, scene description can be arranged from surface to point. For example, when describing the celebration of Teachers' Day, you can first write about the overall atmosphere of the celebration, outline the "face" situation, and then write about the performance of the principal, teachers, and classmates respectively.
In this way, everything can be combined and organized clearly. Scene description is to describe the scenes and situations of the event in detail and with emphasis.
The key is to write the proper atmosphere in the description of the scene, and to show the wonderful scenes one after another, so that people have an immersive feeling. Classic example of scene description 1. "The driver is of medium build, about forty years old, with a dark, fat face, a short beard, and glasses. At first glance, you can tell that he is a good uncle who is calm, enthusiastic and decisive.
The doctor said that the condition was very serious, which scared us to the core. The doctor said that according to the hospital's regulations, we should pay the money immediately and then the operation could be performed immediately. The bald middle-aged man gloated and said: 'Who is his? Father, hurry up and pay, otherwise you will die.' In the hall, the child was still lying on the bench in the aisle. The bald middle-aged man shouted to the driver: 'You are the child's father, so hurry up. Go and pay.
'The driver handed over the only 110 yuan he had to the toll booth without hesitation, but the money was only a quarter of the hospital's rescue fee, and another 330 yuan was needed. Ten, the crowd was in a state of excitement. A tall girl among the primary school students said: "We will also pay for it." The primary school students who were watching all took out the money to buy breakfast.
< p> The number of people donating money increased sharply, and the outpatient department was surrounded. Only the bald middle-aged man refused to give money. A small child childishly asked: "Fat uncle, why don't you show some love?" ? The driver also asked: "Everyone is out, why don't you do something?" The middle-aged man glanced at the driver and said contemptuously: "I am a laid-off worker, please go back and find three thousand dollars." , so as not to leave any sequelae.'Suddenly, a tall female classmate suddenly screamed: 'He is Uncle Wang from my unit building. He is a contractor. He treats your buddies to eat, drink and have fun at Yangchun Restaurant every day. , playing cards and chasing pigs, costing thousands of yuan every time...' The bald middle-aged man was speechless after these words. As time passed by, the injured child suddenly screamed and screamed. Blood spurted from the mouth and spilled on the ground.
At this time, the hospital director Chen also donated one hundred yuan. The doctors present were moved! The patient was also moved! ! People donated money to help, which amounted to more than a thousand yuan. The bald middle-aged man sneered and said to the driver: "Your child can be saved." The nurses got busy and pushed the operating cart quickly. Went to the emergency room, the nurses gave me the injections, I treated them, and she washed the wound. The child's bleeding stopped, and the wound was treated with eight injections in a row.
The middle-aged man swayed to the hospital bed and said to the master: 'Your child can be saved. ''Yeah? ’ The driver replied, ‘Every man with a conscience is his father! ’ The bald middle-aged man looked at the child. He was shocked that it was his child. He felt so ashamed that he sat down on the ground.
She burst into tears: 'Tao'er... Tao'er... you... you...'. "Everyone here, whether it is a driver, a bald middle-aged man, a doctor, a nurse, or a student, is concerned about the condition of the injured child.
The author focuses on depicting the negative attitude of the bald middle-aged man towards the child. , the enthusiastic help of the drivers, doctors, nurses and students created an atmosphere of sadness, joy, worry and anger in the whole place." 2. "Wang Liqin, come on, Team China, rise up!" The audience cheered one after another. The World Cup table tennis final between China and South Korea was pushed to the final stage by Wang Liqin and South Korea's Ryu Seung-min. There was a heat wave rolling in the stadium. We, sitting in front of the TV, couldn't take our eyes away. Watching TV, my father, brother and I were wearing headscarves, waving table tennis rackets, and beating the coffee table hard to act as cheerleaders outside the court. Wang Liqin won another game and sang loudly amidst the cheers. At this time, the opponent Liu Chengmin fought back, Several short swings, straight lines, and backhand pulls, using Wang Liqin's excessive sideways movement to catch up, made the audience's shouts louder and deafening, which deeply shocked the hearts of the audience in front of the TV. Our family was so anxious that we stomped our feet and simply took off our clothes and waved them around. Finally, Wang Liqin lived up to expectations and showed his kingly demeanor amidst the applause and cheers. With a shout and a gesture, he rose up and won the game. We also Unable to restrain their excitement, they hugged each other.
The difference between scene description and environment description. Environmental description refers to the description of the specific social environment and natural environment where the characters live. Among them, social environment refers to buildings, places, furnishings and other scenery as well as folk customs that can reflect the characteristics of society and the times.
Natural rings. 8. In the evaluation of the sixth-grade Chinese language "Secrets of Nature", focus on key words and scene descriptions
1. The beginning is exciting, and the topic leads to nature.
Teacher Zhang Jie showed a picture of a sea eagle and a turtle at the beginning of the class, and used vivid language to describe the story between the two animals. At the end of the story, he asked: What if What would you do if you encountered a sea eagle trying to eat a turtle? The students began to think about it and two different opinions emerged. One student said that he should help the turtle because the turtle is a small life after all; the other student said that he could not help because it was in line with the laws of nature. Faced with the students' answers, Teacher Zhang did not make any comments, but directly introduced this lesson. Let's see what the tourists did when this happened. Such an introduction makes the children full of curiosity, and they can't wait to see what the people in the article do and what the results are. Which of the two classmates just did the right thing? Students' enthusiasm for learning is mobilized and students' interest in learning this course is stimulated. This laid a good foundation for learning this lesson.
2. Grasp the words and sentences, and develop emotions while reading
This class is still a class full of Chinese flavor, and it is a solid Chinese class. The teacher grasped the words and sentences and did a very good job. Here, I would also like to mention that Teacher Zhang’s question design is also very effective, using several big questions to guide the teaching of the entire class. Then the way to solve these big problems returns to reading, and implements it into the reading of specific sentences and words.
For example: Teacher Zhang Jie first showed this passage: The facts soon made us understand: We turned out to have done something incredibly stupid. The teacher seizes on the two key words "foolishness" and "stupid thing" in the sentence and guides the students to imagine what it would be like. Students read the text with this question in mind and then summarize the matter themselves. In fact, the core of the article has already been revealed. This makes the structure of the lesson clearer, and when teaching paragraphs 1 to 5 of the text, always grasp the words "foolish" and "stupid". When teaching paragraphs 6-11, always grasp the two words "a mess" and "horrible" to teach, so that no matter which part of the content the students study, they can penetrate the human beings. However, when people are smart, everything may go to the opposite direction. .
3. Expansion and sublimation, well-prepared materials
After teaching, Teacher Zhang showed the pictures to the children and taught the story of silkworms, the story of deer and wolves, and the story of Sichuan monkeys `The story of the cat and the seabird, etc.
After listening to these stories, the children truly felt how stupid people's smart behavior is. These emotional stories and wonderful pictures shocked the students' hearts and made them think that they would never do such stupid things in the future. At this time, Teacher Zhang showed the tourist instructions again, allowing students to put the knowledge they learned into action, deepening the theme of the article.
The highlights of Teacher Zhang’s class are very outstanding. The class has its ups and downs. The students are very engaged in learning and the teacher is teaching. Teachers teach in a natural manner, can evaluate students in a timely manner, use encouraging language, are passionate, and have good interactions. In the solid reading, combined with speaking and writing, while improving the students' comprehensive quality, they return to reading aloud, and the reading is layered, insightful and affectionate. Reading teaching achieves the integration of situations, which is commendable. 9. Observation and expression composition teaching evaluation script
Classmate, what a kind and familiar word.
They have been around you since the first day of school and accompany you every day of your life. Before I knew it, I had entered junior high school.
While I am reluctant to leave my classmates who have been with me for six years in elementary school, there are ninety new classmates around me. They will accompany me through the three years of junior high school. School had just started and we were unfamiliar with each other. At this time, a friendly greeting, a kind smile, and a considerate pen... inadvertently brought us closer.
In my eyes, every one of my classmates is so cute. Ninety of them, from schools in different places, can get together today. We have been together for three years. It’s a kind of friendship. Fate, the ancients said: "It is necessary to know each other when we meet." Yes, why care about the past, as long as we get together, we should cherish it and pay attention to this fate.
In my eyes, every one of my classmates is so beautiful. We are both the treasures of our parents. In the eyes of our parents, we will always be their angels. Everyone has their own unique character, everyone has different wonderful things, and everyone has their own colorful sky.
In my eyes, every one of my classmates is so outstanding. After just a few months of getting along, I found that many classmates have their own shining points: he is cautious, she is serious, she is hard-working, She was brilliant in literature, he was tireless, he was motivated... Their persistence and beauty left an indelible impression on me. Through the exam, I discovered some talented girls, they were all so diligent and cute. In my eyes, every one of my classmates is so kind. They are willing to help others. They have helped me, a stranger, again and again, and they have also infected the people around them with their simple and kind hearts... In the blink of an eye, I have entered the third year of junior high school. It's been more than three months, more than three months.
In these three months, I gradually got to know my classmates. In my eyes, they are so cute, so outstanding, so... classmates, how beautiful they are.